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star dusted lust
I've a fistful of hours; a mouthful of dreams
Roughly finding the lust of life in their mouth
Hands crushingly passionate in the dark
But when those star lit shimmering dreams
Are brought, no... Dragged into the all too bright day
That soft glowing stardust left quickly fades away
And the bruises left hurt when the lust fades away
Roughly finding the lust of life in their mouth
Hands crushingly passionate in the dark
But when those star lit shimmering dreams
Are brought, no... Dragged into the all too bright day
That soft glowing stardust left quickly fades away
And the bruises left hurt when the lust fades away
Published 3rd Apr 2023
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3rd Apr 2023 9:01pm
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3rd Apr 2023 10:50pm
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5th Apr 2023 4:04pm
"Star Dusted Lust" is a short but evocative piece that explores the fleeting nature of passion and desire. The first line sets the tone for the poem, suggesting a sense of magic and wonder in the idea of being "star dusted". This is juxtaposed with the more carnal and earthy image of "lust" that follows.
The second line speaks of having "a fistful of hours" and "a mouthful of dreams", which suggests a sense of urgency and a desire to make the most of the time available. The third line describes a rough and passionate encounter, with "hands crushingly passionate in the dark".
However, the tone shifts in the following lines, as the speaker acknowledges the fleeting nature of their desires. When the dreams are "brought, no... Dragged into the all too bright day", they lose their magic and the "soft glowing stardust" fades away. The bruises left behind serve as a painful reminder of the transience of lust and the disappointment that can follow when it fades away.
Overall, the poem explores the tension between the magical, ephemeral nature of desire and the harsh reality of its impermanence. The contrast between the romantic imagery of stardust and the more physical, bruising language of passion creates a sense of tension and unease, highlighting the bittersweet nature of human desire.
This was the ChatGPT generated analysis of the poem that I got.
The second line speaks of having "a fistful of hours" and "a mouthful of dreams", which suggests a sense of urgency and a desire to make the most of the time available. The third line describes a rough and passionate encounter, with "hands crushingly passionate in the dark".
However, the tone shifts in the following lines, as the speaker acknowledges the fleeting nature of their desires. When the dreams are "brought, no... Dragged into the all too bright day", they lose their magic and the "soft glowing stardust" fades away. The bruises left behind serve as a painful reminder of the transience of lust and the disappointment that can follow when it fades away.
Overall, the poem explores the tension between the magical, ephemeral nature of desire and the harsh reality of its impermanence. The contrast between the romantic imagery of stardust and the more physical, bruising language of passion creates a sense of tension and unease, highlighting the bittersweet nature of human desire.
This was the ChatGPT generated analysis of the poem that I got.
5th Apr 2023 4:10pm
The haptics of the poem are evocative and there is soulful emotional presence to your writing. A sense of time and passionate longing and urgency that is palpable and resonant to those quiet small hours of the evening.
5th Apr 2023 4:34pm
5th Apr 2023 5:14pm
Thank you for reading. I'm nervous about each poem I post as I near my thousandth. It's daunting. I'm fascinated by the ai reviews. They're... noticable different.
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16th Apr 2023 1:21pm
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16th Apr 2023 9:31pm
9th May 2023 7:07am
Always love your approach, raw and honest and no filters. Spill 'em like you feel 'em for the world to see and get a glimpse of you.
Wonderful.
Wonderful.
