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Abridged
You are a
haunting hymn
to beauty
played on loop
in a labyrinth;
the deeper
I go, the more
lost I become
with need
to hear the
next verse.
haunting hymn
to beauty
played on loop
in a labyrinth;
the deeper
I go, the more
lost I become
with need
to hear the
next verse.
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Welcoming that glorious fall into the beautiful abyss of another's heart, soul and mind would be hard pressed to be penned any better.... The brevity and wallop of emotional conveyance you masterfully generate with your minimalism is so impressive... Thank you for an excellent example of how it's done, B.
You know I love all your ink but there's something about the lovely way your succinct little tidbits like this one, hit all my feels.
I totally aspire...
Thank you for sharing yourself.
🌹 💙 💙
B
You know I love all your ink but there's something about the lovely way your succinct little tidbits like this one, hit all my feels.
I totally aspire...
Thank you for sharing yourself.
🌹 💙 💙
B
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11th Mar 2023 00:08am
Could I love you more?
I mean... technically yes (gestures to roses and whipped cream) So...
But intellectually, no, you are absolutely the soul of this entire place and I fucking adore you, Blue. Thank you for pulling up and poking at the tender bits when I show them.
I appreciate you.
B
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10th Mar 2023 10:52pm
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11th Mar 2023 00:08am
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10th Mar 2023 11:07pm
As if mesmerized by the myriad false eyes of the peacock's feathers.
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10th Mar 2023 11:07pm
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11th Mar 2023 00:09am
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Anonymous
10th Mar 2023 11:33pm
You minimal is still a LOT ❤
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11th Mar 2023 00:10am
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11th Mar 2023 1:39am
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11th Mar 2023 2:29am
hello beautiful Betty you summoned the darkness in me with you sinfully delicious write... I'm seduced ❤️
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11th Mar 2023 2:55am
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11th Mar 2023 8:40am
'' the deeper
I go, the more
lost I become
with need
to hear the
next verse. ''
Sheer dopeness!!
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12th Mar 2023 5:01am
Dear B,
This write reminds me I felt like this once upon a time ago. I think I might have been happy then. I dig your minimalist write. You hit that target every single time with every single line.
Really love this poem. H🌷
This write reminds me I felt like this once upon a time ago. I think I might have been happy then. I dig your minimalist write. You hit that target every single time with every single line.
Really love this poem. H🌷
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12th Mar 2023 1:18pm
Happiness is fleeting my dear.
Do you know what’s not fleeting?
Asskicking. You can be a little happy here and there, but you can kick ass forever
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30th Mar 2023 3:41am
Wonderfully written. Much like reading many of the writings here in DUP. Some just reel you in and you read it some more, just to stay with the mood it created. Like this one.
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30th Mar 2023 3:58pm
Yeah? I was really inspired by this one, too. I’m glad you like it, Styx.
Your writing always draws me in, too.