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Wonder-struck
He did not know
where the lightning was coming from—
then it struck him.
where the lightning was coming from—
then it struck him.
Published 9th Dec 2022
Author's Note
For the Zinger/ Foo-Kai competition
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9th Dec 2022 3:00pm
10th Dec 2022 2:48pm
10th Dec 2022 8:37pm
10th Dec 2022 9:22pm
Thank you. The amount of time spent wracking my brain was out of all proportion to the result.
11th Dec 2022 1:39am
11th Dec 2022 9:14am
13th Dec 2022 5:40am
Dear W,
Love the metaphoric irony in this.
Short, sweet, funny yet very meaningful. H🌷
Love the metaphoric irony in this.
Short, sweet, funny yet very meaningful. H🌷
14th Dec 2022 00:07am
You have captured that moment perfectly when someone realises they have fallen in love; either that or it really is just bad luck! ;-)
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16th Dec 2022 11:02pm
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16th Dec 2022 11:06pm
Thank you. Clever is as clever does... my wit seems to have vanished lately!
19th Dec 2022 1:15am
19th Dec 2022 1:18am
Thank you!
It's 1.17am here (whoops) but when I get up for the day, I'll definitely take a look at some of your work!
It's 1.17am here (whoops) but when I get up for the day, I'll definitely take a look at some of your work!
19th Dec 2022 1:26am
No problem my friend. I enjoyed roaming through your words and look forward to more excursions into your poetry.
John
John
19th Dec 2022 1:30am
A lot of these recent ones were written in a specific style and/or theme, for competitions etc. There are loads in my back catalogue, and they tend to be longer, instrospective, stripped back. A few funny/ silly ones too. I write quite a bit about mental health, life challenges, identity and hope. Look forward to reading some of yours.
