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Fire Monsoon
Let’s break the rules
Create a twilight sunset
To intertwine our scents
Fan flames so high
With feathers of lust
Upon the midnight sky
Sear an orange glow
A flickering ember stroll
Caressed onto curious souls
Cinders sent from high above
Careful not to wake up
The resting tired world
Me and you
A Fire Monsoon
Burning down the moon
Create a twilight sunset
To intertwine our scents
Fan flames so high
With feathers of lust
Upon the midnight sky
Sear an orange glow
A flickering ember stroll
Caressed onto curious souls
Cinders sent from high above
Careful not to wake up
The resting tired world
Me and you
A Fire Monsoon
Burning down the moon
Author's Note
This is a speed write.
Just heard this song and wrote this. LOL
The Kills - Pull A U
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=An-aifBbCx4
Just heard this song and wrote this. LOL
The Kills - Pull A U
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=An-aifBbCx4
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Re. Fire Monsoon
Anonymous
26th Sep 2022 2:20am
Wowww
🔥
🔥

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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
26th Sep 2022 11:46pm
Hello again Oliva:)
Best one word comment!! hahaha
Plus a fire emoji!!
You are super cool!!
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment!!!
Best one word comment!! hahaha
Plus a fire emoji!!
You are super cool!!
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment!!!
Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
Anonymous
27th Sep 2022 1:59am
Helllo
It's my pleasure 😊
It's my pleasure 😊

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Re. Fire Monsoon
26th Sep 2022 2:35am
Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
26th Sep 2022 11:48pm
Hi PS:)
Love the idea of burning the moon.
I was going to title it Burn the Moon but
the direction changed into lust so I went with it. LOL
Thanks for enjoying This write amigo!!
Love the idea of burning the moon.
I was going to title it Burn the Moon but
the direction changed into lust so I went with it. LOL
Thanks for enjoying This write amigo!!
Anonymous
- Edited 28th Mar 2025 1:50am
26th Sep 2022 2:43am
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
26th Sep 2022 11:49pm
Hi Her!!
So happy to tantalize you.
Mission accomplished.
Love the fire emoji:)
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment amiga!!
So happy to tantalize you.
Mission accomplished.
Love the fire emoji:)
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment amiga!!
Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
26th Sep 2022 11:51pm
Hi Tim:)
Super hot and high buddy!! hehehehe
Thanks for enjoying the read and leaving a comment.
Super hot and high buddy!! hehehehe
Thanks for enjoying the read and leaving a comment.
Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
26th Sep 2022 11:53pm
Hi H:)
A picture tells a thousand words. Love
all of your the emojis. hahaha
Thanks for giving me some love on this write:)
A picture tells a thousand words. Love
all of your the emojis. hahaha
Thanks for giving me some love on this write:)
Re. Fire Monsoon
26th Sep 2022 2:58pm
A fiery inviting poem to hot muse🔥fab to read. Kudos for the imagery as well.!
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
26th Sep 2022 11:55pm
Hi Z.
Glad you enjoyed all the fire and imagery.
Was fun writing.
Fixing to read yours next:)
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment
Glad you enjoyed all the fire and imagery.
Was fun writing.
Fixing to read yours next:)
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment
Re. Fire Monsoon
27th Sep 2022 00:01am
I see the new album's progressing nicely, haha. Another solid cute write. You're on fire girl!
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
27th Sep 2022 00:09am
Dude - What an awesome album name
Burning down the Moon!!!
I totally see it.
Now to convince someone I'm cool.
That's another subject all together. LOL
Thanks for giving me some love on this buddy:)
Burning down the Moon!!!
I totally see it.
Now to convince someone I'm cool.
That's another subject all together. LOL
Thanks for giving me some love on this buddy:)
Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
27th Sep 2022 00:14am
Can I do the shoot for the forthcoming album cover, once you've done the final mixes, haha? I mean, yeah, 'Burning Down The Moon' ain't a bad title for an album or indeed an album track also. But I doubt you even have a name for your band at this stage, right? Gosh, that's gonna be fun, isn't it? I have a photo you might like. ;-)
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
27th Sep 2022 00:19am
Oh Lory. LOL
No name yet - just getting comfortable with each other I
think. I have not met any of them yet. Not my band though.
It's my oldest son's LOL
No name yet - just getting comfortable with each other I
think. I have not met any of them yet. Not my band though.
It's my oldest son's LOL
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Oct 2022 6:45pm
27th Sep 2022 8:07pm
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
28th Sep 2022 2:26am
Hey Tim:)
Trying different stuff. LOL
Full of abandon - thank you.
So happy to see ya.
It's been a minute:)
Trying different stuff. LOL
Full of abandon - thank you.
So happy to see ya.
It's been a minute:)
Re. Fire Monsoon
28th Sep 2022 2:57am
You burning up with love. I'll break the rules with you. Keep on writing.
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
28th Sep 2022 3:02am
Well hey there Francisco - can I call you Cisco?
Just thought it would be interesting to create a
sunset at midnight by burning the moon.
My mind works strange like that. A rebel at heart. LOL
Just thought it would be interesting to create a
sunset at midnight by burning the moon.
My mind works strange like that. A rebel at heart. LOL
Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
28th Sep 2022 3:14am
Re. Fire Monsoon
29th Sep 2022 1:33am
This really makes us think of a late desert evening, all of the colors in the evening sky. We wonder of the colors of a prairie fire late into the night as old man Saguaro's silhouette dances about. Tight
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
29th Sep 2022 1:45am
Well hello:)
We took a picture of the eclipse with our cell phone a few months back.
It literally looked like the moon was on fire.
So eerie but beautiful at the same time.
It started leaning towards more of a lustful tone
when I started writing so I just went with it.
I think it needs more work but it was written in like 15 min.
That song was too sexy to not give it a try. LOL
We took a picture of the eclipse with our cell phone a few months back.
It literally looked like the moon was on fire.
So eerie but beautiful at the same time.
It started leaning towards more of a lustful tone
when I started writing so I just went with it.
I think it needs more work but it was written in like 15 min.
That song was too sexy to not give it a try. LOL
Re. Fire Monsoon
30th Sep 2022 2:59pm
I very much enjoyed the nature of the energy, infused throughout this piece, A...
Very much in line with your electric style... :)
Very much in line with your electric style... :)
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
1st Oct 2022 2:09am
Hey Cipher:)
I heard that electric guitar and the visions came buddy. hahaha
Just stretching my wings a bit.
Thanks for commenting and the RL.
I heard that electric guitar and the visions came buddy. hahaha
Just stretching my wings a bit.
Thanks for commenting and the RL.
Re. Fire Monsoon
1st Oct 2022 5:56pm
Okay, I will play along. One word comment:
Incinerating!
I don't think I've ever used that word before. (As I check it off my bucket list of fire words. Lol)
This is solid, vivid. Like a dash of perfume that isn't overbearing, but definitely rapturing. I especially like the idea of flames "feathering" in the sky. That's how I saw it anyway. Like I said, vivid write.
I like to see when I read. Thank you for that!
Incinerating!
I don't think I've ever used that word before. (As I check it off my bucket list of fire words. Lol)
This is solid, vivid. Like a dash of perfume that isn't overbearing, but definitely rapturing. I especially like the idea of flames "feathering" in the sky. That's how I saw it anyway. Like I said, vivid write.
I like to see when I read. Thank you for that!
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
1st Oct 2022 7:05pm
Hi Styx:)
Awesome one word comment!!!
Look at you using your caveman brain of yours. LOL
So glad you enjoyed all the visuals.
I'm giving myself a pat on the back right now.
It was a quick write and wanted to see how it would
turn out. One of my favorite bands and I hadn't heard
the song before. It all turned sexual so I went with it.
They also have a song called "doing it to death" LOL
Great song!!!
Here and you're welcome;)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=498zUzNGQxY
Just want you to feel glad to be alive!!
Del's got your back!!
Awesome one word comment!!!
Look at you using your caveman brain of yours. LOL
So glad you enjoyed all the visuals.
I'm giving myself a pat on the back right now.
It was a quick write and wanted to see how it would
turn out. One of my favorite bands and I hadn't heard
the song before. It all turned sexual so I went with it.
They also have a song called "doing it to death" LOL
Great song!!!
Here and you're welcome;)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=498zUzNGQxY
Just want you to feel glad to be alive!!
Del's got your back!!
Re. Fire Monsoon
8th Oct 2022 10:21am
Very good! I loved it. The ending is the cherry on the cake! Such inventively imagistic poetry is definitely my jam.
Mundus
Mundus
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
9th Oct 2022 8:05pm
Hey Mundus:)
Thank you for your snaps on this.
We like the same jam!! hahahaha
Thanks for stopping by amigo
Thank you for your snaps on this.
We like the same jam!! hahahaha
Thanks for stopping by amigo
Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
12th Oct 2022 4:30am
Re. Fire Monsoon
When you do a speed write inspired by a song the universe explodes into magic. Love where this took me and the romantic exhilaration of your words. Your word painting was more than a portrait. It was a supernova across the screen as my eyes smoked from your imagery.
Xo
John
Xo
John
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
15th Dec 2022 2:32am
HI John!!
Loved that I made your eyes smoke!! Best comment ever. hahaha
I was in a mood and had all of these visions. And I thought about a sunset at midnight. So yeah - I went there. LOL
So glad you enjoyed!!
Thanks for sending me all this love tonight amigo!!
Made my evening:)
Loved that I made your eyes smoke!! Best comment ever. hahaha
I was in a mood and had all of these visions. And I thought about a sunset at midnight. So yeah - I went there. LOL
So glad you enjoyed!!
Thanks for sending me all this love tonight amigo!!
Made my evening:)
Re. Fire Monsoon
15th May 2023 1:56pm
Your words poured like bright lava on my mind.
If that was a speed write, I can only imagine how good a slow write would be..... 😊
If that was a speed write, I can only imagine how good a slow write would be..... 😊
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
20th Aug 2023 2:32am
I was going through my poems and saw that I hadn't replied to your comment.
My apologies!!!
I truly didn't see it!! ughhhh
Anyhow, sorry for the late response and thank you so much
for a lovely comment:)
My apologies!!!
I truly didn't see it!! ughhhh
Anyhow, sorry for the late response and thank you so much
for a lovely comment:)
Re. Fire Monsoon
5th Jun 2023 11:28pm
A fiery, passionate work! Fire has always been my element, more so than the other elements anyway... and love and passion subjects near and dear to my heart. This is a great poem that brings such things into a skillfully blended work of art! Brilliant stuff.
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Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
7th Jun 2023 00:15am
Hey!
The song did it for me. LOL
The visions came and I started writing.
Was kind of trance like in a way.
Thank you for again for stopping by:)
The song did it for me. LOL
The visions came and I started writing.
Was kind of trance like in a way.
Thank you for again for stopping by:)
Re: Re. Fire Monsoon
7th Jun 2023 3:34am
It was a pleasure to stop by! This poem definitely called out for me to read it, and I am happy to have answered that call. I've written more than a few works from time to time that were inspired by dreams and visions, so I get what you mean there. When such visions come, one must write to preserve the experience for all of time! :D
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