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lacks of emotion
what I cannot see with my naked eye,
is what defined their minds by frying what they kept inside.
they walked with straight backs and in coats of black.
they looked and kicked me in my shins.
but only I still feel threw emotions and wins.
sadness is still important.. but only at times of need.
we all need to experience emotions that makes us want to bleed.
is what defined their minds by frying what they kept inside.
they walked with straight backs and in coats of black.
they looked and kicked me in my shins.
but only I still feel threw emotions and wins.
sadness is still important.. but only at times of need.
we all need to experience emotions that makes us want to bleed.
Published 28th Mar 2012
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1st Apr 2012 5:43pm
What makes this work is that you mesh the interpersonal with a commentary about the the world. Whats more is you do it with only 7 lines! Not sure if you meant to use "threw" (what one does with a baseball)
