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forlorn
I could love you deep inside me
where the blue of me meets black
I ache in the cold without your touch
all these years in your presence
I need you in deep but said nothing
I can't tell you, no, I can't even whisper it
it would break me in the utterance
broken thoughts bring me to my knees
I linger in the darkness holding my heart
I ache in velvet tones
where canaries sing and whores die alone
I keen for your absence
over my brittle soul crushed when it came too close
rushing into you for a kiss
then nothing
I hurt in the emptiness that followed
down into a dark hole where loneliness caressed
taking more than it gave leaving me hollow
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20th Sep 2022 5:21pm
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20th Sep 2022 6:27pm
Lust and emptiness are weird bedfellows
This is your mantra and without it you might be sadder. A different take for sure.
Soothing in a weird way
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This is your mantra and without it you might be sadder. A different take for sure.
Soothing in a weird way
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Re: Re. forlorn
20th Sep 2022 7:10pm
good morning dearest Poet I really love the thought you left me with.... you're right of course thank you graciously for the love here ❤️
Re. forlorn
20th Sep 2022 6:43pm
I felt this more than I’d like to admit. Beautifully done poetess! 💜💜💜
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20th Sep 2022 10:43pm
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20th Sep 2022 10:45pm
thank you graciously dearest Jay for feeling me so deeply here I cherish your thoughts 💕
Re. forlorn
20th Sep 2022 9:06pm
Wow, heart wrenching.
Even though painful, without this person, you may not have discovered the love and companionship emotions. Without which you wouldn't know the despair. But I also think to myself I wouldn't want anyone to go through something this deep and personal.
Even though painful, without this person, you may not have discovered the love and companionship emotions. Without which you wouldn't know the despair. But I also think to myself I wouldn't want anyone to go through something this deep and personal.
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20th Sep 2022 10:47pm
hello dearest Leo thank you for the very thoughtful comment it is a beautiful feeling even in its sadness I truly appreciate your insight 💕
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Re. forlorn
20th Sep 2022 9:58pm
You hit that aching nerve we all bury, the one that's carefully concealed.... so it feels that much more resonant and relatable. This is some truly masterful conveyance of the anguish of regret, pain and the bits of darkness most people like to just sweep under the rug, where the pain only festers to become a gaping wound. Highlighting it and 'writing it down' sort of airs it out, imo. I hope you take catharsis in penning out the needful sorrow .... because it's beautiful in all brokenheartedness.
Absolutely phenomenal work, dear lady
You move me.... always.
🌹🖤
x
Absolutely phenomenal work, dear lady
You move me.... always.
🌹🖤
x
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Re: Re. forlorn
21st Sep 2022 00:47am
good afternoon beautiful Blue thank you for the love here it's deeply felt... your thoughtful comments always give me further insight into my feelings... I cherish your thoughts 💕
Re. forlorn
21st Sep 2022 8:37am
urrggh! why do I feel like I'm the one writing this one. I can really feel it like it fits my shoe. Love it so much. ♥
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21st Sep 2022 7:57pm
hello and welcome to DU it hurts but it's beautiful to love like this... I'm happy this poem spoke to you 💕
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23rd Sep 2022 10:15pm
That last stanza is sad and beautiful all at the same time.
Great work crimsin.
Great work crimsin.
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