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Midnight River
a luminescent glow falls from the moon
peaking through translucent sky
reflecting off of the glimmering stream
reaching down and gliding pebbles
almost skipping with them
moss tickles her soles
an emerald fern
transparent cloth drapes over her bare flesh
soon wrapping her thighs and ascending her torso
sealing her chest with fabric
as she steps into the midnight river
a quiet soul
who breaths of clouds
and whispers confessions
falls into the midnight river
drowning
in the crystal water
her own emptiness consumes her
of what she wishes she could be
muffled voices only consist of howling winds
a quiet place
that surrounds the midnight river
filled with a single lonesome soul
peaking through translucent sky
reflecting off of the glimmering stream
reaching down and gliding pebbles
almost skipping with them
moss tickles her soles
an emerald fern
transparent cloth drapes over her bare flesh
soon wrapping her thighs and ascending her torso
sealing her chest with fabric
as she steps into the midnight river
a quiet soul
who breaths of clouds
and whispers confessions
falls into the midnight river
drowning
in the crystal water
her own emptiness consumes her
of what she wishes she could be
muffled voices only consist of howling winds
a quiet place
that surrounds the midnight river
filled with a single lonesome soul
Published 12th Sep 2022
| Edited 13th Sep 2022
Author's Note
The concept of this poem was inspired by "Midnight River" By Pink Sweat$.
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13th Sep 2022 00:15am
I was hoping for a goddess rather than a soulless soul at the end of your poem, lol but I guess it reflects modern life somewhat. I really feel the girl's loneliness. It's quite a sombre read.
13th Sep 2022 2:10am
I quite liked the bleakness of the original though cos the peacefulness of the river seemed somewhat deceptive as I read on.
13th Sep 2022 9:43am
Well, to be honest, I didn't have a full idea of the story when I wrote the poem. I'll have to add to it later. I'll pm you then ^^
13th Sep 2022 00:22am
13th Sep 2022 9:44am
13th Sep 2022 6:10am
Dear C,
This has a balletic feel for me. I think because of the water there’s a bit of Swan Lake, but I’m also imagining Les Sylphides (not at all relatable so I can’t quite figure that out) maybe it’s the ethereal beauty of the poem against that of the dance. At any rate, the mystical quality of the write transcends. It’s full of lovely imagery. H🌷
This has a balletic feel for me. I think because of the water there’s a bit of Swan Lake, but I’m also imagining Les Sylphides (not at all relatable so I can’t quite figure that out) maybe it’s the ethereal beauty of the poem against that of the dance. At any rate, the mystical quality of the write transcends. It’s full of lovely imagery. H🌷
13th Sep 2022 9:44am
14th Sep 2022 1:05am
This is quite interesting to read, I can deeply imagine and picture the entire moment.
Its a lovely piece.
I can't wait for the edited version!
Its a lovely piece.
I can't wait for the edited version!
14th Sep 2022 1:59am
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