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Morning Sun
I see the sun rising behind me in the reflection of her eye
it is beautiful
and I can't help but wonder where it gets her shine
there's a smile in there somewhere
I know one day to find
I run my fingers across her length
and I wish this place to stay
dawn it is an awakening
aroused as breath is day
it is beautiful
and I can't help but wonder where it gets her shine
there's a smile in there somewhere
I know one day to find
I run my fingers across her length
and I wish this place to stay
dawn it is an awakening
aroused as breath is day
Published 19th Aug 2022
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22nd Aug 2022 8:47pm
When you see her eyes reflect the sun for you. That brightness is her feelings for you brightly shining, sun or not. And that's where the smile comes from too. As you run the length of her body and mind, that's the most beautiful place to stay. Awakening the breath to everything that passion has to offer, which is nothing short of everything.
22nd Aug 2022 9:42pm
The purity of such a heartfelt compliment, where not only are you comparing her spark, her very essence to the luminescent beauty of the morning sun but you're also expressing such awe at how the sun is the one that has the good fortune to shine like she does- is not only poetically breathtaking, it's where dreams of romance are born.
I applaud how you expertly 'invite in' with these gentle whisper-like enchanting wishes and then gorgeously carry away the reader while lost amongst this intimately captured moment.
Bravo, Tim
-B
I applaud how you expertly 'invite in' with these gentle whisper-like enchanting wishes and then gorgeously carry away the reader while lost amongst this intimately captured moment.
Bravo, Tim
-B
24th Aug 2022 2:04am
