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It's not you
I don't know if I want her heart any more
mine is still cold, and I'm sure
it should have warmed
by now
mine is still cold, and I'm sure
it should have warmed
by now
Written by
lepperochan
(Craic-Dealer)
Published 18th Aug 2022
| Edited 19th Aug 2022
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Re: Re. It's not you
Re. It's not you
18th Aug 2022 10:19pm
this one is publishable if you change the "dunno" to "don't know" - very succinct but with enough in it to let us in on at least half a story, and I'm a sucker for those tiny hitters of a last line. really enjoyed this li'l one :)
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Re: Re. It's not you
19th Aug 2022 5:52pm
Hullo to you
I've taken your advice and changed the coupla words. you may put it on the list now :),
Thanks for your visit and words, much appreciated
I've taken your advice and changed the coupla words. you may put it on the list now :),
Thanks for your visit and words, much appreciated
Anonymous
- Edited 23rd May 2024 11:45am
18th Aug 2022 11:22pm
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Re: Re. It's not you
19th Aug 2022 6:26pm
Hullo
well I am, well too I hope you.
and thanked you are for the visit and words
*hat tip*
well I am, well too I hope you.
and thanked you are for the visit and words
*hat tip*
Re. It's not you
1st Sep 2022 12:44pm
When it's from the heart , I think you do know , cold or not . Great little piece of packed in and tight feeling , ~I wish I could do that as good this in so few a words . Hope you're ok over there my friend .
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Re: Re. It's not you
14th Sep 2022 9:47am
ahh, Didi,
good to see you floating about the place . thanks for your thoughts, much appreciated.
on the face of it, things aren't too bad over here, our government is paying us off. give it 6months it'll mad Max
*hat tip*
good to see you floating about the place . thanks for your thoughts, much appreciated.
on the face of it, things aren't too bad over here, our government is paying us off. give it 6months it'll mad Max
*hat tip*
Re: Re. It's not you
26th Sep 2022 9:27pm
Re. It's not you
23rd Sep 2022 7:28pm
Dude with the profile pic and this write you remind me of Bobby Caldwell or Boz Scaggs. (Total compliment)
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Re: Re. It's not you
14th Mar 2023 4:00pm
Jazzman
I do opologize for my tardiness. no excuse just lazy or stoned or both
that said, I do appreciate your presence, words, and songs
*Hat tip*
I do opologize for my tardiness. no excuse just lazy or stoned or both
that said, I do appreciate your presence, words, and songs
*Hat tip*
Re. It's not you
14th Mar 2023 3:09pm
Yes, after coming a special person in our life, it becomes necessary to warmth of the heart. Well done
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Re: Re. It's not you
14th Mar 2023 4:03pm
Hullo
and welcome to this place you beautiful creature.
thanks for dropping by and leaving your thought print
and welcome to this place you beautiful creature.
thanks for dropping by and leaving your thought print
Re: Re. It's not you
14th Mar 2023 4:15pm