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Thrill Pill
is it human nature
violence toward those we love
why do i gain pleasure
by dominating
controlling
inflicting
demanding
it’s the challenge
worthy opponent
betting
you can’t do it
then daring
go faster
go farther
go deeper
go harder
we’ve ingested the red pill
like it dark never vanille
she submits
of her own free will
she squirms
and squiggles and can’t hold still
she gasps
for breath as if running uphill
(or going nowhere on a treadmill)
she acts silly
like a girl on Benny Hill
when she obeys
i get a thrill
when she cries and begs
i get a chill
she’s the parchment
i’m the quill
in the end
our spirits refill
© 2022 Raibeart Bruis
violence toward those we love
why do i gain pleasure
by dominating
controlling
inflicting
demanding
it’s the challenge
worthy opponent
betting
you can’t do it
then daring
go faster
go farther
go deeper
go harder
we’ve ingested the red pill
like it dark never vanille
she submits
of her own free will
she squirms
and squiggles and can’t hold still
she gasps
for breath as if running uphill
(or going nowhere on a treadmill)
she acts silly
like a girl on Benny Hill
when she obeys
i get a thrill
when she cries and begs
i get a chill
she’s the parchment
i’m the quill
in the end
our spirits refill
© 2022 Raibeart Bruis
Published 17th Aug 2022
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17th Aug 2022 6:25pm
Control Rocks !
Do some nice aftercare and she'll come back for more....
BIG LIKE
Do some nice aftercare and she'll come back for more....
BIG LIKE
10th Sep 2022 7:08pm
You get it, KP!
(I'm still cracking up at the Benny Hill line and I instantly heard the music 🎶 hahaha... )
I love the lighthearted rhyme and rhythm that flows down the page....wonderful!!
💞
I adore how even within the carefree quips you know it's so much deeper and about way more than just control and a need to submit. Your path of discovery is so alluring and enlightening to me because you too, feel that's it's about shared fulfillment of minds, souls and bodies. That there's a sacredness of being totally free with your partner that only exists on a higher level of (a sometimes) complex, mutual understanding and unmitigated trust.
That symbiotic spiritual 'refill'... had me purring in total agreement, KP
Excellent poeting,
🌹💙
B
(I'm still cracking up at the Benny Hill line and I instantly heard the music 🎶 hahaha... )
I love the lighthearted rhyme and rhythm that flows down the page....wonderful!!
💞
I adore how even within the carefree quips you know it's so much deeper and about way more than just control and a need to submit. Your path of discovery is so alluring and enlightening to me because you too, feel that's it's about shared fulfillment of minds, souls and bodies. That there's a sacredness of being totally free with your partner that only exists on a higher level of (a sometimes) complex, mutual understanding and unmitigated trust.
That symbiotic spiritual 'refill'... had me purring in total agreement, KP
Excellent poeting,
🌹💙
B
10th Sep 2022 7:12pm
Yes! Understanding and trust are key components.
I don’t think sacredness and humor are mutually exclusive, although a Benny Hill soundtrack might not work during a flogging…
Thank you.
❣️🙏
I don’t think sacredness and humor are mutually exclusive, although a Benny Hill soundtrack might not work during a flogging…
Thank you.
❣️🙏
18th Aug 2022 3:51am
10th Sep 2022 7:13pm
