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…and so, we dance
Misunderstandings
move with swift feet
when mood (or stress)
strikes up the band,
musicians at the ready
awaiting their cue
we sway anxiously
under the glaring light
of too many wrongs and
not enough rights;
our eyes are so cloudy,
yet we glide along
to these familiar notes
Old Bitterness and
New Resentments,
our greatest hits play on -
crashing cymbals
sound against the silence
…and so, we dance
move with swift feet
when mood (or stress)
strikes up the band,
musicians at the ready
awaiting their cue
we sway anxiously
under the glaring light
of too many wrongs and
not enough rights;
our eyes are so cloudy,
yet we glide along
to these familiar notes
Old Bitterness and
New Resentments,
our greatest hits play on -
crashing cymbals
sound against the silence
…and so, we dance
Published 16th Aug 2022
| Edited 19th Aug 2022
Author's Note
Inspired by accompanying photography. I don’t know who the art belongs to, it was part of a brochure.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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16th Aug 2022 10:16am
Dear L,
You’ve requested honest critique and in that spirit I would honestly say this is, fantastic. It’s perfect in length, meter, and font. The metaphor of dance and music as it might relate to some relationships hit a chord that many of us can relate to without missing a beat. And so we dance on to this sometime harmonious often time discordant music…
It’s wonderful to see you. This is an outstanding piece. H🌷
You’ve requested honest critique and in that spirit I would honestly say this is, fantastic. It’s perfect in length, meter, and font. The metaphor of dance and music as it might relate to some relationships hit a chord that many of us can relate to without missing a beat. And so we dance on to this sometime harmonious often time discordant music…
It’s wonderful to see you. This is an outstanding piece. H🌷
16th Aug 2022 3:46pm
17th Aug 2022 7:05pm
17th Aug 2022 8:02pm
27th Aug 2022 4:01pm
"we sway anxiously
under the glaring light
of too many wrongs and
not enough rights; " loved these lines, it holds such a meaning of truth for the past.
Superb work.
under the glaring light
of too many wrongs and
not enough rights; " loved these lines, it holds such a meaning of truth for the past.
Superb work.
27th Aug 2022 4:13pm
"When We Dance" by Sting over romanticizes love. You bring it back to earth here. Each stanza reminds us that love aint for the weak at heart. My favorite lines: "our eyes are so cloudy,
yet we glide along
to these familiar notes "
yet we glide along
to these familiar notes "
28th Aug 2022 8:11pm
