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First Dates: Dance Steps
First Dates: Dance Steps
When words
have become
too powerful
to speak
or write,
then
sublanguages
of human content
suffice
for the greetings
we once hailed
as our greetings
grew then,
further on,
obrusive.
Let us then
strive for
a conversation
of equals.
When words
have become
too powerful
to speak
or write,
then
sublanguages
of human content
suffice
for the greetings
we once hailed
as our greetings
grew then,
further on,
obrusive.
Let us then
strive for
a conversation
of equals.
Published 29th May 2022
Author's Note
Negotiations are boundaries agreed upon. A flower bed of pansies can play a part.
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29th May 2022 7:05pm
First: Fix the last stanza. Your capital letters are first line-fisting and it doesn't seem to be for poetic license.
Second: This was so delicate, my man. I loved the conceit, the little picture of the hesitant first steps, the new dance, the imbalance of equilibrium and the hope that it stabilizes.
Keep rockin, buddy!
Second: This was so delicate, my man. I loved the conceit, the little picture of the hesitant first steps, the new dance, the imbalance of equilibrium and the hope that it stabilizes.
Keep rockin, buddy!
29th May 2022 9:41pm
Betty, good eye. I had written the first part as a single sentence and then versified it. That last section was written line by line....
And exactly so, an invitation to engage....a delicate dance indeed.
Thanks and thank you.
And exactly so, an invitation to engage....a delicate dance indeed.
Thanks and thank you.
