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To those Who Killed Before Us
Your
words
slide over pages
like ice cream
melting into
sugar
cone
Your grammar holds
as a centre piece Flake
We still lick your opinions
suck on your concepts
and eat your pages
I feel the thunder
of reading
perfection
in titles
as bone creaks
into the next
page
of
your
every
moment
while I pray
on Theresa to
bring you back
in this life or the
next
.
Published 10th Apr 2022
| Edited 12th Apr 2022
Author's Note
To the enormously large number of missing DU poets... Both from loss of real life and just log ins. I miss you!
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10th Apr 2022 2:57pm
The hourglass shape of the poem was effective at conveying the theme of loss over time, and the ice cream metaphor very well executed.
11th Apr 2022 9:15am
Hey Hey mate
Thanks for popping in again!
I have a favorite song in the world, youtube it!
"Disappear without a trace" - by the Parlotones (recommended listening)
What I love most about music and poetry is that we see, hear, feel, taste, something differently based on where we sit in both life and situation. I cherish that.
I'm so grateful you are here!
Thank you for that!
Blue Skies J
Al
Thanks for popping in again!
I have a favorite song in the world, youtube it!
"Disappear without a trace" - by the Parlotones (recommended listening)
What I love most about music and poetry is that we see, hear, feel, taste, something differently based on where we sit in both life and situation. I cherish that.
I'm so grateful you are here!
Thank you for that!
Blue Skies J
Al
Anonymous
10th Apr 2022 10:49pm
I kinda got a different shape from this. Perhaps it wasn’t an hourglass for me, but the shape of the licking of the ice cream when turned on its side. Just my two cents :)
The good things about those no longer around is they leave us plenty of legacy to learn from. The journey is we never stop learning and that’s a beautiful thing. There’s power in them there words.
Doesn’t stop us missing them though. That’s more than allowed.
Thank you for sharing your 11 😊
-M
The good things about those no longer around is they leave us plenty of legacy to learn from. The journey is we never stop learning and that’s a beautiful thing. There’s power in them there words.
Doesn’t stop us missing them though. That’s more than allowed.
Thank you for sharing your 11 😊
-M
11th Apr 2022 9:20am
Aaah the importance of learning from history!
it's so special! there's poetry in that! (note made for a future write in the journal)
I think I'll try in my own little way keep some memories alive! I find I get anxious at some strange unexpected things these days... Often the mundane, other times the real, raw truth, in what we do.
To be honest, no two people will see the same image in those words, that's the point! We take from history the way we see it unfold. It's a beautiful thing!
Blue Skies Missy
Al
it's so special! there's poetry in that! (note made for a future write in the journal)
I think I'll try in my own little way keep some memories alive! I find I get anxious at some strange unexpected things these days... Often the mundane, other times the real, raw truth, in what we do.
To be honest, no two people will see the same image in those words, that's the point! We take from history the way we see it unfold. It's a beautiful thing!
Blue Skies Missy
Al
Anonymous
- Edited 20th Dec 2022 8:45pm
11th Apr 2022 12:11pm
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11th Apr 2022 12:15pm
oh hell yes!
there are some incredibly special pieces that haunt the halls of this extremely large data center of poetry! some masterpieces live here!
thanks for checking in mate!
Blue Skies at you
Al
there are some incredibly special pieces that haunt the halls of this extremely large data center of poetry! some masterpieces live here!
thanks for checking in mate!
Blue Skies at you
Al
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