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Fleeting Breaths
Craving to kiss again
Softly
Gently
Amidst a collection of synchronized fleeting breaths
And slow blissful torturous caresses
Bodies pressed ever so close
A passion profoundly burns
And there
In the depths
The bond of two souls goes beyond any abyss
Further than the void of space
Without words
A love that has no boundaries
Craving to kiss again
Softly
Gently
Amidst a collection of synchronized fleeting breaths
Published 18th Jan 2022
Author's Note
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Love the formatting, pace and repetition! ....To me, it all adds another element of yearning; highlighting that sense of abandon at the sheer otherworldly connection that you clever convey, as well as the dire crucial need— the MUST of that cravable kiss!
Such potent romanticism!
Loved it, W
Truly inspired work
🌹 - B
Such potent romanticism!
Loved it, W
Truly inspired work
🌹 - B
24th Jan 2022 5:22pm
Thank you very much Blue. I've always loved repetition (when it's done properly of course) to accentuate the feeling and emotion.
18th Jan 2022 9:48am
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18th Jan 2022 10:01am
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18th Jan 2022 11:45am
24th Jan 2022 5:24pm
Thank you very much Poet (for both the RL and Big Like).
The flood gates have to open from time to time you know.
The flood gates have to open from time to time you know.
Anonymous
18th Jan 2022 12:53pm
The internal pauses within the repetition really help to sell this. It's like the imagination wandering off only to be drawn back to the initial fixation.
24th Jan 2022 5:26pm
JB, thanks for the comment and RL.
I find that slowing down and pausing....for dramatic effect...adds to the overall emotional delivery.
I find that slowing down and pausing....for dramatic effect...adds to the overall emotional delivery.
18th Jan 2022 5:21pm
A beautiful expression of passion to assuage feelings with a kiss and caress to be in the abyss of bliss.
Love,
KS
Love,
KS
24th Jan 2022 5:27pm
Thank you very much Kristopher.
It's the never ending search for the right words.
Hope all is well.
It's the never ending search for the right words.
Hope all is well.
22nd Jan 2022 00:03am
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