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Motherload
Reaching down
barely digging
extracting handfuls
sheets of yellowest gold
five decades of Autumns
mining this claim
wholly uncontested
Unabashedly consorting
with all manner of rakes
eschewing cacophonies
of puffed up blowhards
Young miners, at times,
appear less enthusiastic
laboring in crisp Fall air
they'll better appreciate
the seasonal exercise
when catapulting
on to piles
of gathered gilt treasure
Quitting for the day
stowing tools
depositing the haul
soon to meet
the refiners fire
The claim will yield,
many days to come
barrows-full of brilliance
as silently, bright yellow leaves
pirouette to the ground
Thar's gold on that there elm!
barely digging
extracting handfuls
sheets of yellowest gold
five decades of Autumns
mining this claim
wholly uncontested
Unabashedly consorting
with all manner of rakes
eschewing cacophonies
of puffed up blowhards
Young miners, at times,
appear less enthusiastic
laboring in crisp Fall air
they'll better appreciate
the seasonal exercise
when catapulting
on to piles
of gathered gilt treasure
Quitting for the day
stowing tools
depositing the haul
soon to meet
the refiners fire
The claim will yield,
many days to come
barrows-full of brilliance
as silently, bright yellow leaves
pirouette to the ground
Thar's gold on that there elm!
Published 7th Dec 2021
Author's Note
I took a poetry break whilst raking leaves beneath a beautiful elm in my parent's front yard..
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7th Dec 2021 9:40am
Dear GW,
I enjoyed your relationship of raking leaves to mining gold. Super clever and accurate in admiring the beauty of each. The fifth stanza is really cool with imagery and the closing line is poetic gold. I also loved how you took a break from working to write a poem. I would’ve taken a break to eat a pizza. Great write. H🌷
I enjoyed your relationship of raking leaves to mining gold. Super clever and accurate in admiring the beauty of each. The fifth stanza is really cool with imagery and the closing line is poetic gold. I also loved how you took a break from working to write a poem. I would’ve taken a break to eat a pizza. Great write. H🌷
9th Dec 2021 1:00am
Thanks you so much Honoria. My parent's large elm had such vibrant yellow leaves that evoked the gold connection. It's so beautifully quiet in their neighborhood as well. I thought of listening to music while raking but if I had done there would be no poem to read. I am thrilled that you like the piece. Muchisimas gracias❣🌹
