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I hate to leave you, actually.
I find you a little addicting;
reluctantly but entirely
consuming.
A helpless liver taking on the poison of its troubled owner.
Not in control of the entity i should be,
and becoming more powerless daily.
On the ground but higher than the trees, facing the come down each time you leave.
Encompassed by eyes,
watching our solitude demise.
Unconcious and complete with fondness,
surrendering to a connection that is beyond us.
So i breathe,
And tell myself that it will all be ok.
Assemble my courage,
and love you for another day.
reluctantly but entirely
consuming.
A helpless liver taking on the poison of its troubled owner.
Not in control of the entity i should be,
and becoming more powerless daily.
On the ground but higher than the trees, facing the come down each time you leave.
Encompassed by eyes,
watching our solitude demise.
Unconcious and complete with fondness,
surrendering to a connection that is beyond us.
So i breathe,
And tell myself that it will all be ok.
Assemble my courage,
and love you for another day.
Written by
bethanyjay
(Bethany Jay)
Published 1st Dec 2021
| Edited 10th Jan 2022
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Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
1st Dec 2021 4:53pm
Definitely a palpable write, especially when you express the "come down everytime you leave" feeling. Yes, falling in love can be quite addicting, all the emotions being uncovered and reveling in the ache.
Excellent write.
Excellent write.
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Re: Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
1st Dec 2021 5:24pm
Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
1st Dec 2021 7:34pm
Dear B,
You’ve absolutely nailed the out of control insane feeling of euphoria when falling in love. For me it’s staying there. That part feels like absolute work but this…this is bliss. “ Not in control of the entity i should be,” great line as one can give over so much in this state of being. I love the rhythm and wonder if you will put this to a melody? Lovely write. H🌷
You’ve absolutely nailed the out of control insane feeling of euphoria when falling in love. For me it’s staying there. That part feels like absolute work but this…this is bliss. “ Not in control of the entity i should be,” great line as one can give over so much in this state of being. I love the rhythm and wonder if you will put this to a melody? Lovely write. H🌷
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Re: Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
3rd Dec 2021 9:27am
Hi H,
Thank you! I'd like to put a melody to it yes, feel it needs adding to it to make it a song and I havent quite figured it all out yet haha :)
B
Thank you! I'd like to put a melody to it yes, feel it needs adding to it to make it a song and I havent quite figured it all out yet haha :)
B
Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
1st Dec 2021 10:50pm
As the old saying goes, "love is a drug." And even more so, the person you're in love with. I put myself through years of hell because I didn't have the strength to stay away from her. Great piece you've written!
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Re: Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
3rd Dec 2021 9:29am
Thank you! Yes love definitely is a drug, the strongest one of all and the only thing that makes this crazy world worth living.
Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
21st Dec 2021 6:12pm
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Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
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Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
23rd Feb 2022 6:43pm
Hello there
This was really brave in its vulnerability. I really like the stripped back approach here and how it is all you. It doesn’t waste any time with frills and twills.
A beauty all of its own. Thank you for sharing.
-M
This was really brave in its vulnerability. I really like the stripped back approach here and how it is all you. It doesn’t waste any time with frills and twills.
A beauty all of its own. Thank you for sharing.
-M
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Re: Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
1st Mar 2022 1:26pm
Thank you! Thats kind of you and I really appreciate your feedback. Means alot. 🙏
Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
17th Jan 2023 5:13pm
👏 👏 👏!!! Excellent I truly agree 👍 savor the taste like the day for another in completely amazing way!!! Please 🙏 keep on writing ✍ ok queen 👸 peace ✌ and blessings always 🙏
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Re. I hate to leave you, actually.
29th May 2023 11:09pm
that breathe
before diving in again
is soul saver
sometimes losing yourself
needs a tether
to get back
before diving in again
is soul saver
sometimes losing yourself
needs a tether
to get back
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