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Taking All of Her
It wasn’t enough to touch her hand
Though at the time it was a blessing
It wasn’t enough to kiss her lips
So much more for his possessing
He would take all there was of her
Though quietly and over time
Piercing every part of her
Each touch became a crime
When at last he finished her
She had nothing left to give
She pressed a barrel against her tongue
On the night she ceased
Though at the time it was a blessing
It wasn’t enough to kiss her lips
So much more for his possessing
He would take all there was of her
Though quietly and over time
Piercing every part of her
Each touch became a crime
When at last he finished her
She had nothing left to give
She pressed a barrel against her tongue
On the night she ceased
Published 28th Oct 2021
| Edited 28th Sep 2024
Author's Note
I knew a lady who kept giving herself to a man until there was nothing left. He didn't recognize his crimes until her death.
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28th Oct 2021 12:58pm
Sad, but true to nature of one who’s incapable of
giving, whilst taking to balance the flow, and mitigate the risk of depletion.
Your write reminds me of the women, who become enslaved to a man who’s not taking care of her, in the same context that she takes care of him to keep him nourished.
When I think about a healthy relationship, I think in the context of a plant; noting, that for a plant to grow or blossom, it’s needs adequate sustenance/ nourishment.
As always, a great write…🎩
giving, whilst taking to balance the flow, and mitigate the risk of depletion.
Your write reminds me of the women, who become enslaved to a man who’s not taking care of her, in the same context that she takes care of him to keep him nourished.
When I think about a healthy relationship, I think in the context of a plant; noting, that for a plant to grow or blossom, it’s needs adequate sustenance/ nourishment.
As always, a great write…🎩
28th Oct 2021 1:34pm
I like your plant analogy to describe a healthy relationship. It was so sad to see this young life end when she had so much left to live.
28th Oct 2021 4:01pm
28th Oct 2021 7:31pm
29th Oct 2021 11:11am
Heart rending patterns of love as a chaos spiral.
This is poignant and deeply impactful.
This is poignant and deeply impactful.
29th Oct 2021 11:44pm
Anonymous
1st Nov 2021 12:25pm
Nice one. Good rhyming and good story. Could used one more stanza in the middle, but that's just my opinion.
1st Nov 2021 7:28pm
