Her Desires

this is the most beautiful thing I've ever read...

That is very nice of you to say. Thank you!

No problem...

I wasn't sure about this one so it's nice to get some confirmation that it is decent lol

I'm sure about it

You loved her before you met her and then “one kiss later she owned me” very romantic preamble for a relationship
NG🌹

Thank you for the read and complement. As always, I appreciate your thoughts. I needed a bit of reassurance on this one so thank you!

You’re quite welcome

Hey Rainy,

So this is sexy and witty. I promise - smart girls love word play.
You got this on lock down mister:)

That's very sweet and Im proud you think so. Thank you for the read and complement! You're the best ❤️

What I like about this:
the long "e" rhyme-scheme, of alternating lines; variation with the part of speech; it falls off a bit in the 2nd half, and that actually disappoints me;
the other half of the rhyme scheme doesn't do much for me;
and this is where I start to understand my reluctance:  the rhyme scheme feels hemmed in by the short lines:  to my ear, this could be alleviated by loosening it a bit.
There's not a rigid meter that I can find (some iambs, trochees), and I could see letting the end-rhyme of "ee" be the repetition that keeps the lines hanging together.
Baudelaire used to do that in some of his poems. One in particular, every line....AAAAAAAAA. I don't think that can work in English. There wasn't a regular meter, but every line end stopped on the same sound:  I was like, WTF?!
I like the speaker's relationship to the woman, his thoughts and observations, his attitude, but feel the poem is a little hemmed in by the short line and a bit too strict rhyme scheme.
Enjoyed!

Thank you for the in depth read and comment. I appreciate your suggestions and reason for them. Comments like this are always useful. Thank you for your time and effort, friend.

I saw her words before her face
her poems were far from phony
so, I stalked her and got a date  
one kiss later, she owned me

Oh. My. God.   These words could get me going, talking and other things for days, maybe weeks.....love you <3

Well thank you my femme fatal. That is a very sweet comment and if you're saying too than this might actually be a poem that is enticing to woman. Yay! Love you too

To be honest.... This is a fantastic piece 👌 very enjoyable to read... Great rhyme and rhythm... It has some really killer verses... It got me hooked to it till the end... Bravo 👏👏👏

Thank you my friend ☺️ that is all very nice of you to say. Thank you your time and I'm happy you enjoyed! 😘

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Thank you and thanks for the read.
Hopefully not to bare lol

good morning dearest William this kind of reads like rap
it's romantic and dirty the dirty side is nicely balanced with your tenderness...

beautiful 💕💕

Thanks for the read as always and the recognition of trying to keep it balanced is awesome. I didn't want to be too far out there lol

Oh how beautiful. Smarts definitely get her horny among other things! Finding your way through that maze is so amazing. Discovering each new sensation and feeling; each new path sending shockwaves. Her poems must be amazing to take you in completely and to own with a kiss. This is so sexy... Those last two stanzas really have my mind truly engaged with such beautiful erotica. Really lovely.

Wow thank you. That is all very sweet and much appreciated! Very very cool comment. Thank you for your time and effort reading and commenting 😉

Splendid write rd ... nice flow ... great slant rhymes ... sensual and sophisticated ...

Thank you!
I appreciate the read and complement 😊 very sweet
And means a lot coming from you!
Thanks for the add also !!

"Like reading erotica with no clothing" ... poetic gold ... I really liked this line ...

Thank you 😘

Love your words here, very sexy indeed!

Considering how much I like your work, that is flattering! Thank you for taking the time to read and I'm very glad you liked it!
Thanks again 🙂

"only smart can get her horny"  Love it!

Thanks for the read it's always nice to see a new face around here

Sensually awesome.  I enjoyed the story.

LJ

Thank you for the read. I really appreciate stopping by my page and giving my work a chance. It's always nice to see a new face especially when I enjoy that new faces is work.
Thank you again hopefully I can return the favor soon.

Love this!

Thank you for the read and I’m really glad that you liked it! I’m going to have to take a look at your work soon. I’ll be looking forward to it. Nice pen!

What a beautiful feeling you have written without any vulgarity..juz awesome!!

An intelligent woman requires more work to please. but the end result is so worth it. Cherish her and she'll cherish you. Thank you for sharing this, and for your effort in properly pleasuring a woman. :)

I love your comments. Thank you so I much.