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I’VE MADE UP MY MIND
If you and I don’t end up together
I’m going to have to punch a hole in this universe
To find the one where we do
I’m going to have to punch a hole in this universe
To find the one where we do
Published 25th Aug 2021
Author's Note
I worried that outside of context this would sound incel-ish but I have been assured that is not the case
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25th Aug 2021 3:22pm
25th Aug 2021 3:31pm
Anonymous
25th Aug 2021 4:26pm
It's about incel-ish as it is incest-ish. You're safe. Very romantic. Reminds me of when Superman flew around the Earth fast enough to make time go backwards.
25th Aug 2021 9:28pm
25th Aug 2021 4:53pm
25th Aug 2021 9:28pm
Thank you. Writing this was a very pure experience. I've had a few poems like that lately. Fertile earth I'm planted in.
It made my heart skip a beat. Just the right kind of intense.
❤k
Edit: I showed this one to my kid (who has great capacity for poetry, if he would just get over the idea that it has to be long and rhymey) and his response was that it was very visceral... and I thought that was such a great word for it. It gets me right in the gut. 🙂
❤k
Edit: I showed this one to my kid (who has great capacity for poetry, if he would just get over the idea that it has to be long and rhymey) and his response was that it was very visceral... and I thought that was such a great word for it. It gets me right in the gut. 🙂
25th Aug 2021 5:53pm
thank you k. The situation is incredibly intense but I am somehow just swimming in the joy of being with her.
26th Aug 2021 11:03pm
It's great! Punching a hole in the universe reminds me of the Hunger Games where something similar happens, and a gazillion things are set in motion.
27th Aug 2021 00:46am
