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Hope
I went away three weeks ago,
My life was a mess,I felt so low.
Left my children, my partner too,
I was desperate,what could I do?
As days went by, it wasn't so bad,
I grew calmer,felt less sad.
I made new friends, people who cared,
We listened to each other, began to share.
There's been laughter,there's been tears,
Revealing our dreams,admitting our fears.
I'm going home soon,not sure how I feel,
A bit worried, I guess,it feels so unreal.
Now things are better,I'll be alright,
The future looks positive, definitely bright.
My life was a mess,I felt so low.
Left my children, my partner too,
I was desperate,what could I do?
As days went by, it wasn't so bad,
I grew calmer,felt less sad.
I made new friends, people who cared,
We listened to each other, began to share.
There's been laughter,there's been tears,
Revealing our dreams,admitting our fears.
I'm going home soon,not sure how I feel,
A bit worried, I guess,it feels so unreal.
Now things are better,I'll be alright,
The future looks positive, definitely bright.
Author's Note
I wrote this poem 21 years ago,when I was in a bad place. I never imagined I'd be sharing it anywhere!
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. Hope
18th Aug 2021 3:40pm
Thanks for sharing this honest poem; it gives hope and courage for those who may be on the same road, or have traveled the same road. Now you must write and write, you have so much to share. You are sunshine in a dark world. Hugs and peace, Oral
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18th Aug 2021 4:18pm
Oral,thankyou so much. This is such good feedback. Tbh,it's the first time I've ever let anyone read my stuff,so it's great to know it's not terrible!
Re: Re. Hope
18th Aug 2021 4:22pm
Remember, every day you (we) are given a set of circumstances with which we must deal; how we deal with them depends on the attitude we choose. Yesterday ended last night, tomorrow is not promised, TODAY is the blessing we have. Take a deep breath of fresh air and write...dare to say yes, dare to go with the flow...WRITE...if it's only one word....write YES!!!!
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18th Aug 2021 4:24pm
Re: Re. Hope
18th Aug 2021 4:29pm
Thank you. I tried the negative for years only dug me deeper into negativity and low self-esteem. It's the "Two men look out through prison bars, one sees mud, the other sees stars. It's a choice. Look for the star dear friend; it's shining inside waiting to be released...NOW. Remember,you can't put toothpaste back in the tube once squeezed out, so it is with life. Smile and go on....Hugs and peace, O
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Re. Hope
18th Aug 2021 4:21pm
Dear S,
Brava to you. I enjoyed the honesty of this and the gentle rhyme which can be hard to accomplish with a serious subject.
Great piece and Welcome to DU.
H🌷
Brava to you. I enjoyed the honesty of this and the gentle rhyme which can be hard to accomplish with a serious subject.
Great piece and Welcome to DU.
H🌷
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18th Aug 2021 4:22pm
Re. Hope
Anonymous
18th Aug 2021 4:31pm
Hey Shabre…….it’s good to step back at times when laughter goes away…….always good to find your smile again……..this is a brilliant ink…….thank you for sharing…….you’re not alone here in any trial of life…….we’ve all experienced the oblivious in our own ways…….hope you share more…….purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re: Re. Hope
18th Aug 2021 4:38pm
Hey Flower girl,
Yes,so many people struggle at some point in their lives. A friend told me about this site,and I'll always be thankful for that. It seems to be a wonderful forum for releasing our emotions. I look forward to reading more poems on here,and gaining inspiration.
Yes,so many people struggle at some point in their lives. A friend told me about this site,and I'll always be thankful for that. It seems to be a wonderful forum for releasing our emotions. I look forward to reading more poems on here,and gaining inspiration.
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Anonymous
19th Aug 2021 7:33am
Wow...I be your partner & your / his / her children were worried.
Reading this, I wondered how the speaker's relationship with the family was handled: did the speaker tell them before leaving? Tell them after the speaker settled somewhere?
So many things are left out, that make me wonder.
Interesting poem...
Reading this, I wondered how the speaker's relationship with the family was handled: did the speaker tell them before leaving? Tell them after the speaker settled somewhere?
So many things are left out, that make me wonder.
Interesting poem...
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Re. Hope
20th Aug 2021 1:17pm
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Re: Re. Hope
23rd Aug 2021 7:00pm
Hi Cara,
This was many years ago that I wrote this and yes,my life got so much better afterwards.🙂
This was many years ago that I wrote this and yes,my life got so much better afterwards.🙂
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25th Aug 2021 11:11pm
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25th Aug 2021 11:27pm
Re. Hope
26th Aug 2021 7:33pm
Well done for being brave and leaving, and also sharing it with us. I'm sure your words will encourage someone else.
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30th Aug 2021 00:34am
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Re. Hope
19th Sep 2021 2:01pm
Older writing frames all the tomorrows
Like
I've read all your poems
You have emotion and a voice
Keep at it
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I've read all your poems
You have emotion and a voice
Keep at it
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Re: Re. Hope
19th Sep 2021 4:41pm
Thankyou so much for your encouraging words,Poetspeak. I know my poetry isn't in the same league as some on this site,but I enjoy what I do. And there's plenty of inspiration here.
Re: Re. Hope
19th Sep 2021 4:46pm
Just keep at it
Write when you feel it
Don't try and force it
You'll do just fine
Write when you feel it
Don't try and force it
You'll do just fine
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Re. Hope
23rd Mar 2024 2:44am
This poem beautifully captures the journey of hope amidst despair and uncertainty. It illustrates the transformative power of finding support and connection in unexpected places, leading to personal growth and healing. The progression from despair to newfound strength and optimism is portrayed with authenticity and sensitivity. It reminds us that even in our darkest moments, there is potential for positive change and a brighter future ahead. Overall, it's a testament to resilience, the importance of reaching out for help, and the possibility of finding hope even in the most challenging times.
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Re: Re. Hope
25th Mar 2024 6:13pm
Hi Louis,
Thankyou for your feedback and for taking the time to read my poem. I appreciate it.
Sharon.
Thankyou for your feedback and for taking the time to read my poem. I appreciate it.
Sharon.
Re: Re. Hope
28th Mar 2024 6:31pm
It's great to hear from you! I'm glad you appreciated the feedback on your poem. I'd love to connect further and continue our conversation. If you don't mind, would you be open to connecting on Facebook? It would be wonderful to have the opportunity to get to know you better. Let me know if that's something you're comfortable with. Looking forward to hearing from you!
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Re. Hope
18th Apr 2024 7:18am
Your poem beautifully captures the transformative journey of self-discovery and healing. The progression from despair to resilience is palpable in each stanza. The honesty in facing fears and embracing vulnerabilities resonates deeply. Your words evoke a sense of hope and optimism for the future, illuminating the path toward a brighter tomorrow. Your journey reminds us all of the strength found in community, the power of shared experiences, and the resilience of the human spirit. Thank you for sharing your inspiring story through poetry.
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