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marry
Less sex, and
sexless
In relation
often
holds distance
between
fine-tuning and
forgotten.
sexless
In relation
often
holds distance
between
fine-tuning and
forgotten.
Written by
ursa
Published 24th Apr 2021
| Edited 25th Apr 2021
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written for the 13. competition
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- Edited 9th Apr 2022 5:45am
24th Apr 2021 10:56pm
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Re: Re. marry
25th Apr 2021 1:00pm
Re. marry
25th Apr 2021 00:29am
Re. marry
25th Apr 2021 1:24am
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25th Apr 2021 1:01pm
Re. marry
25th Apr 2021 2:25am
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25th Apr 2021 1:02pm
Re. marry
25th Apr 2021 6:45am
Dear U,
What a terrific play on and between words. Your thoughtful poem has tremendous meaning and has stopped me in my tracks. It’s pushed me into several layers of thoughts and I really appreciate that. All the best for the comp. Great write and welcome to DU.
H🌷
What a terrific play on and between words. Your thoughtful poem has tremendous meaning and has stopped me in my tracks. It’s pushed me into several layers of thoughts and I really appreciate that. All the best for the comp. Great write and welcome to DU.
H🌷
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Re: Re. marry
25th Apr 2021 1:04pm
Dear @Honoria, thank you for taking the time to write such a detailed comment. It is so helpful to hear. thank you. I appreciate you.
warmly, ursa
warmly, ursa
Re. marry
25th Apr 2021 1:04pm
Wouldn't it have been better to arrange the first two lines,
'Less sex, and
sexless.
In relation
often
holds distance
between
fine-tuning and
forgotten.'
Just food for thought. :)
'Less sex, and
sexless.
In relation
often
holds distance
between
fine-tuning and
forgotten.'
Just food for thought. :)
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Re: Re. marry
25th Apr 2021 1:09pm
@Penguinphile yes I think you are right! Thank you! I sincerely appreciate it. :) warmly, ursa
Re. marry
25th Apr 2021 6:15pm
I hope and vote for fine tuning, bring on the practice I say to my wife lol. well penned piece.
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Re. marry
29th Feb 2024 1:51am
The contract almost always requires more of an effort (like an unspoken agreement) to make sure the passion stays alive.
Nicely done.
Nicely done.
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