Absinthe

Wow. The eloquence of it has such a commanding fluidity, perfect pace and proportion, metaphors vivid and visceral, seems quite an inspired write, potent in its focused brevity.

I love the wow and I always appreciate how you are able to so succinctly analyze so many different aspects of writing. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. I had hoped the pace, the metaphors, and such would work for delivering the message. Pretty much everything I write is inspired in one way or another.

Life and death can be a deception. Pain is real. A shadow or mirror can be a deception. Stones can be cruel.        

I feel like something more can be written from what you have said. It is deeply meaningful. Perception can be reality or certainly appear so.  And deception is all around us, we can choose to believe it or not. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts.

Deception takes many forms. A portrait or a rose. An angel or a black swan. Life is common sense unless under a candle of deception. Beware of the moth in the candle's flicker.

Smacked, cracked and tormented
An unsure mind driven to the edge and possibly beyond
You're in my dreams again
Make it a double

BL
RL

I can identify with those things. Plenty of cracks but I hide them well.
Been driven to and beyond the edge before too.
What am I doing there? Wait, don't answer that. lol :p
Or a triple.

I love the famous Big Like and thank you so much for the comment and RL.

Heartfelt and shared ... Bless and much love ... ..

I am sorry if the feelings are shared. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with me. Extra bless and much love back at ya.

Thank you so much for reading and commenting Ru. I am really happy you found this one worthy of the read. I plan to share many more hopefully. :)

Yes! this one is pretty dark. Thank you for stopping by and your comment BP. :)

It’s always interesting to read the Edgar Allen Poe experiences with Absinthe and madness and how that ideology goes into your poem here so succinctly. The mythology of the drink alone is enough to offer a certain mysticism to your write, and it does right enough.

Thank you for sharing.

-M

Hey Missy! Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I know real Absinthe is some powerful stuff, green fairies and all. lol There is definitely a mysticism around the effects of Absinthe intoxication. I have been around people drinking Absinthe and it seemed like a really pleasant experience but it is toxic. I am glad you liked the name and it's contribution to the writing. I need to go back and read Edgar Allen Poe's experience with it. So have you ever had the real stuff Missy? :p

Brava Kristina❣❣ The first stanza reads like a recipe for pain.   This passage reminds me that sometimes words can hurt more than physical pain,
"soar in feelings of pain,
Or I fall down into the
rocks of sharp words,"

Definitely a recipe for pain in there. Sometimes words can hurt more than physical pain for sure. Mental abuse can be tremendously harmful and constant causing permanent or lasting damage. Thank you so much for the comment and feedback GW.

The pain is real but you have to fight to get into the light.  Keep on writing.

Thank you so much for the comment and encouragement Francisco. Always keep fighting, even in the dark.

Falling down into rocks of sharp words... damn, those are serious wounds.

Hey Lj, words can definitely hurt and cause some serious wounds that really stick with us. Thank you so much for the comment.

Excellent write ... you hooked me with the title ... the structure is lithe ... sustains the cadence ... awesome flow ... superb line breaks ... I like the highlighting of key words ... makes me pause there ... then when I finished the poem I went back and just read the highlighted words ... like a decryption ... the last line opens up the reader ... makes me think beyond the poem ... encourages me to reread the poem ... the hallmark of excellent poetry ...

Wow, deer in the headlights. Thank you so much for the incredible comment. I am over the moon with your feedback and so happy you liked it and found it worthwhile. I love that you were encouraged to reread and liked the formatting. :)

Damn Kristina.  Dark, deep, I like.

I cannot help but like Damn. :) Dark and deep like me, Remy! Thank you so much for the comment. I am really happy you liked it.

Truly inspiring.

Thank you so much for the comment, TQO. I am really happy you found it inspiring.

It really is inspiring in the way you've written it and that you've come through whatever caused you to feel this way. Stay strong. You're a beautiful soul.

Thank you for the encouragement and the beautiful compliment. I really appreciate it a lot. X

One can really feel the anxiety amidst those raw descriptions which adds a gloomy outlook for all its intents and purposes. Dark write indeed Kristina, and very well done.

I am no stranger to anxiety and life challenges, so sometimes I try to capture it in words and it can definitely be very dark dealing with certain things. Thank you so much for the comment and feedback Wally. I am really happy you felt it was very well done.

How could it not when you see green fairies and stuff. I know the artist of Europe used to use it for inspiration. But I can get you wasted and inspire without Absinthe. lol All this variety... ;)