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why?
hot tears
scorch flesh
as I read your words
completely
blinded
by
heart break
Written by
Bluevelvete
Published 28th Mar 2021
| Edited 22nd Mar 2024
Author's Note
© Blu2021
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Re. why?
28th Mar 2021 11:19pm
Hey beautiful I'm sorry you are sad, I hope your tears dry soon
Hugs and love
Love and light
Ron x
Hugs and love
Love and light
Ron x
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28th Mar 2021 11:22pm
You're very sweet, my friend
I'll be alright.. Ty for the RL and your concerns..
🌹
xo
I'll be alright.. Ty for the RL and your concerns..
🌹
xo
Re. why?
28th Mar 2021 11:21pm
I like the layout of this ... most people don't appreciate the use of line breaks and space ... they don't read (or like me whisper) the poem ... to hear the rhythm that is written ... well done ...
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29th Mar 2021 2:05am
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29th Mar 2021 00:03am
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29th Mar 2021 2:07am
I'll take that 🤗 hug!!!
Thank you Wilberfloss, you're a true gentleman.
Much love and respect,
🇺🇸 💙 🇬🇧
xoxo
B
Thank you Wilberfloss, you're a true gentleman.
Much love and respect,
🇺🇸 💙 🇬🇧
xoxo
B
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29th Mar 2021 00:16am
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29th Mar 2021 2:09am
I'm trying!
xoxo
I bask in your thoughtfulness, my lovely friend
(it was much needed)
✨💫✨
xoxo
xoxo
I bask in your thoughtfulness, my lovely friend
(it was much needed)
✨💫✨
xoxo
Anonymous
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29th Mar 2021 00:32am
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29th Mar 2021 00:34am
Re. why?
29th Mar 2021 00:51am
Love the layout as it makes the impact of the words more intense. As music is always spinning in my head and when I read this I started singing "That's the sound that a heart makes when a heart breaks" Great spill : )
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You overwhelm with your perfectly kind words, Stanhoven. I thank you so much for sharing your inner "music"... I kinda do the same... So grateful for such thoughtfulness
--Sending love and respect your way,
🌹
-B
--Sending love and respect your way,
🌹
-B
Re. why?
29th Mar 2021 1:10am
You are beautiful inside out...one who feels is one who loves well. 🌹Good read, Blue. As always.
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29th Mar 2021 2:35am
Your eloquence has me breathless in my simple gratitude. I thank you for all your loveliness, Grace
Deepest appreciations,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
-B
Deepest appreciations,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
-B
Anonymous
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29th Mar 2021 1:27am
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Re: Re. why?
29th Mar 2021 2:42am
It's true, indeed, my friend....
I do appreciate that very insightful comment and my hopes are that I have the gumption left for a rebuild... 🤷🏻♀️.
We'll see!
It was extremely nice seeing you!
I also wanted to extend a very wholehearted, sincere Ty for your other generous list adds~ it's not taken lightly and much appreciated. ;)
🌹
xo
-B
I do appreciate that very insightful comment and my hopes are that I have the gumption left for a rebuild... 🤷🏻♀️.
We'll see!
It was extremely nice seeing you!
I also wanted to extend a very wholehearted, sincere Ty for your other generous list adds~ it's not taken lightly and much appreciated. ;)
🌹
xo
-B
Re. why?
29th Mar 2021 3:36am
Dearest, Lady Blue❣❣ This is devastating. I am intensely sad that you are so sad. Sending big bear hugs your way 🐻💋🐻💋🐻
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Re. why?
29th Mar 2021 4:10am
Not sure how to take or apply. Very interesting and different. Hugs, kisses,, and peace.
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Your comments are like a balm, sometimes there's painful moments... this was one of them... in a minimalistic style...
I appreciate you taking the time to leave your thoughts, Oral... it means a lot to me.
🌹
xo
I appreciate you taking the time to leave your thoughts, Oral... it means a lot to me.
🌹
xo
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29th Mar 2021 4:56am
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29th Mar 2021 2:11pm
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29th Mar 2021 5:48pm
Truer words were never spoken.... indeed.
Ty for those kind words, my friend. I'm so appreciative of your visit and leaving your thoughts....
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
Ty for those kind words, my friend. I'm so appreciative of your visit and leaving your thoughts....
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
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29th Mar 2021 5:47pm
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30th Mar 2021 2:54am
Ohhh... ouch.
Your use of blank space really adds to the empty feeling. Well expressed!
《hug》
Your use of blank space really adds to the empty feeling. Well expressed!
《hug》
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30th Mar 2021 4:02am
Hey there, k.. ;)
I thank you for your visit and appreciate your kind words. 🙏 I'm trying my hand at minimalism and it's affects, so I am all smiles that worked for you... I really do enjoy your feedback, it's valuable in spurring me forward and I kinda feel like I'm doing something right!
lol.... sounds silly maybe, but true... haha.
Warmest regards, my friend!
🌹
-x
I thank you for your visit and appreciate your kind words. 🙏 I'm trying my hand at minimalism and it's affects, so I am all smiles that worked for you... I really do enjoy your feedback, it's valuable in spurring me forward and I kinda feel like I'm doing something right!
lol.... sounds silly maybe, but true... haha.
Warmest regards, my friend!
🌹
-x
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30th Mar 2021 4:36pm
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30th Mar 2021 6:23pm
Anonymous
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31st Mar 2021 3:14pm
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Re: Re. why?
31st Mar 2021 3:17pm
(hugs)
Ty for being amazing
... and for everything said.
I appreciate it (and you) greatly, Tim.
🌹
-x
Ty for being amazing
... and for everything said.
I appreciate it (and you) greatly, Tim.
🌹
-x
Re. why?
7th Apr 2021 9:12pm
I like how minimalist pieces always leaves us open to interpretation when the weight of the words say so much with so little.
"Hot tears" is a perfect expression of the emotion.
Wonderful work.
"Hot tears" is a perfect expression of the emotion.
Wonderful work.
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7th Apr 2021 9:14pm
Thank you for that, Walter. I do love the brevity and punch of minimalism from some absolutely wonderful poets here and I like practicing. I appreciate your thoughtful comments, my friend
🌹
xo
🌹
xo
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Yeah, I've had moments like that where I have over dwelled, perhaps. I hope yours have passed for the time being. Sadly, for those susceptible, these moments will often occur, not just when peeling onions.
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13th Apr 2021 4:04am
Thanks for the encouraging words, Billy
I wholeheartedly thank you and hope you are doing well on your end... I appreciate you taking the time to read and leave your thoughts with me.
🌹
xo
I wholeheartedly thank you and hope you are doing well on your end... I appreciate you taking the time to read and leave your thoughts with me.
🌹
xo