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O' dreams of technicolor
you speak,
without saying a word
that silence
screams
it's thunderous clarity
directing a will
or want
a type of navigation
or purposeful drumming
nonstop in
all it's obduracy
convincing me
to make guesses
which come in seconds
after seconds...
I only realize later,
that's the intention
to confuse and deflect
compliments
extended to reverse palm handed
my will and secrets
once shared,
seem fodder
of a truth, so contemplated
disguised, baited in coy
or just a rouse
falling for the smooth
the promise of...
connecting to—
being seen
having my color's plume
in your eyes of spirited
soul bound understanding
is still,
how my heart
sees
and believes.
yet, truth knows.
that's its just
the grey matter
that didn't matter
and it was always going to be
whispers of wanted technicolor
to the ear
of a girl drawn
in black and w h i t e
Published 25th Mar 2021
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25th Mar 2021 00:49am
25th Mar 2021 1:29am
haha... erhhmm.. ... it's what came, when pen to paper.... Ty for reading Francisco
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25th Mar 2021 1:38am
25th Mar 2021 1:48am
Mind bender?
I usually feel figuratively naked in how transparent my pieces seem.. lol..
.... it's just me struggling with myself and my apparent ability to fall into the same pitfalls of 'pleasing' others who, in the end didn't really want, care or see... "me"..as me.
or something along those line.... lol
Ty for reading, KP and the generous list add
I appreciate you and love it when you visit.
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-x
I usually feel figuratively naked in how transparent my pieces seem.. lol..
.... it's just me struggling with myself and my apparent ability to fall into the same pitfalls of 'pleasing' others who, in the end didn't really want, care or see... "me"..as me.
or something along those line.... lol
Ty for reading, KP and the generous list add
I appreciate you and love it when you visit.
🌹
-x
25th Mar 2021 1:58am
Great write beautiful
Sadly we all often try to please others who don't see pr give a real shit about us or who we are.
I think that's a weakness of having a open and hopeful heart
BE STRONG BE BEAUTIFUL AND BE YOU
love and light
Ron xx
Sadly we all often try to please others who don't see pr give a real shit about us or who we are.
I think that's a weakness of having a open and hopeful heart
BE STRONG BE BEAUTIFUL AND BE YOU
love and light
Ron xx
25th Mar 2021 9:04am
Dear, Lady Blue
I love this wonderful poetic puzzle. This passage is such an effective metaphor for the power of silence,
"it's thunderous clarity"
I read this as a commentary on one who chooses superficial over substance.
"Obduracy" hmmmmm one of those sexy words. I had to look it up.😁
This passage perfectly encapsulates what I perceive as the core message,
"that's its just
the grey matter
that didn't matter "
Bravissima, lovely S. 🌹🐻💋🐻💋🐻
I love this wonderful poetic puzzle. This passage is such an effective metaphor for the power of silence,
"it's thunderous clarity"
I read this as a commentary on one who chooses superficial over substance.
"Obduracy" hmmmmm one of those sexy words. I had to look it up.😁
This passage perfectly encapsulates what I perceive as the core message,
"that's its just
the grey matter
that didn't matter "
Bravissima, lovely S. 🌹🐻💋🐻💋🐻
25th Mar 2021 9:04am
25th Mar 2021 6:13pm
I forgot the last quote, I added it because it's my favorite passage. Gray matter is much more sexy than physical appearance.🐻💋🐻💋🐻
25th Mar 2021 6:19pm
To very select few, like you and I maybe.... but irl, especially online, when /if you're searching for a partner...... it's apparent that it so matters.
It prevails everywhere..... here included.
It prevails everywhere..... here included.
25th Mar 2021 6:27pm
25th Mar 2021 11:54am
25th Mar 2021 11:56am
26th Mar 2021 00:09am
26th Mar 2021 6:03am
Technicolor dreams longing to escape black and white. There is nothing black and white about your poetry. You write soulfully and vibrantly with words that carry me along like an emotional white water rafting trip which exhilarates me.
XoXoXo
John
XoXoXo
John
26th Mar 2021 6:02am
Your descriptions give me hope and confidence in myself, John... I truly appreciate that, it means a lot to me, my friend. Thank you for the list add and all your kindness
I'm touched.
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xo
-Susan
I'm touched.
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xo
-Susan
30th Mar 2021 8:51pm
This had a groovy feel to it, in the way you deliver this cool and laid back approach.
Great work as always Blue.
Great work as always Blue.
Thanks Wally
I forgot that I had a pic for this and I never put it back up.... thanks for commenting, so I could reread it(and add the pic) ... I think that I don't dislike it as much as I thought I did originally ... (I'm so terrible!!. Hahaha..) I mostly jest, methinks... lol
Anyway,(ha!) I appreciate you reading and your insights, my friend. I'm all smiles that you grooved along with me...
I really do appreciate you taking the time you do, Walter... it's generous and so indicative of your lovely character... (just wanted to say)
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x
I forgot that I had a pic for this and I never put it back up.... thanks for commenting, so I could reread it(and add the pic) ... I think that I don't dislike it as much as I thought I did originally ... (I'm so terrible!!. Hahaha..) I mostly jest, methinks... lol
Anyway,(ha!) I appreciate you reading and your insights, my friend. I'm all smiles that you grooved along with me...
I really do appreciate you taking the time you do, Walter... it's generous and so indicative of your lovely character... (just wanted to say)
🌹
x
30th Mar 2021 9:01pm
25th Apr 2021 6:58pm
line 31,32,and 33 "having my color's plume in your eyes of spirited soul bound understanding"- wonderful.
that last full stanza "and it was always going to be whispers of wanted technicolor to the ear of a girl drawn"- there's a fantastic want here that keeps ringing with me and I like it. wonderful emotions pushed here.
that last full stanza "and it was always going to be whispers of wanted technicolor to the ear of a girl drawn"- there's a fantastic want here that keeps ringing with me and I like it. wonderful emotions pushed here.
25th Apr 2021 7:37pm
