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protrude
it rakes down my back
a wild clawing
of all that etches
tearing at defined sinew
a sarcastic laugh
at these broken bones
as they push,
just. so.
pressing to protrude
from my inside
out
as pure truth,
deep red glistens
Written by
Bluevelvete
Published 11th Mar 2021
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©Blu2021
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Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 2:23am
isn't that how it always feels? or at least it does to me. the whole writing and letting words out. even the words that seem frivolous.
well done.
well done.
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Re: Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:02pm
Yep, it does.
Ty for reading and leaving your comments Daisy.
Much appreciated
🌹
xo
Ty for reading and leaving your comments Daisy.
Much appreciated
🌹
xo
Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 4:04am
It hard to let the words come out but when you do if feels exciting. Keep on writing.
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Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:10am
Wow, this is so visceral. I know this is figurative, I hope, but I feel the pain and that's good poetry🐻💋🐻💋🐻
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Re: Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:01pm
Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:11am
Ah, but in their journey through your insides you become part of the words.
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Re: Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:03pm
Yes, still...it's one hell of a journey, eh?
Ty so much for reading and your thoughts, Leo
I appreciate you
🌹.
Ty so much for reading and your thoughts, Leo
I appreciate you
🌹.
Re: Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:04pm
It's okay... Ty for leaving me your thoughts, my lovely friend 🙏
I appreciate you reading
🌹
I appreciate you reading
🌹
Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 9:08am
Re: Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:05pm
lol... yes, it's definitely a good thing, there once in a while... I thank you for reading, the list add and your thoughtful comments, C.
💜
xoxo
💜
xoxo
Anonymous
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11th Mar 2021 10:41am
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Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 11:04am
Dear BV,
Rather like an alien birth. I’ve never experienced one, only saw it once on tv. Like everything else that is good, I think writing must sometimes be painful and awkward to be right and truthful. I love the stark (not really the word I want but the only one coming to mind) formatting and description of thought to paper of this process. It’s brutal sometimes. Great write!
H🌷
Rather like an alien birth. I’ve never experienced one, only saw it once on tv. Like everything else that is good, I think writing must sometimes be painful and awkward to be right and truthful. I love the stark (not really the word I want but the only one coming to mind) formatting and description of thought to paper of this process. It’s brutal sometimes. Great write!
H🌷
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Re: Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:17pm
Yeah, brutal is a good word, though... imo
Perhaps a rawness, almost an animalistic fervor used, to figuratively make a point...that almost feels at times, like it could be literal... lol
We sensitive, folks... we're conundrums, we are
lol... I thank you for reading, the list add and as always, I appreciate your thoughtful remarks, (so so so much) Honoria.
Much love and respect,
🌹
Perhaps a rawness, almost an animalistic fervor used, to figuratively make a point...that almost feels at times, like it could be literal... lol
We sensitive, folks... we're conundrums, we are
lol... I thank you for reading, the list add and as always, I appreciate your thoughtful remarks, (so so so much) Honoria.
Much love and respect,
🌹
Anonymous
- Edited 18th Nov 2021 8:45pm
11th Mar 2021 12:28pm
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Re: Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:21pm
Hey there, my lovely friend 🙏
I thoroughly enjoyed your takeaway and the depth of emotion you had. I so appreciate your time and and leaving those thoughts, RiAN. It's sometimes difficult to reconstruct exactly my intents but you're very close to the feelings I had while writing, for sure... I love seeing you and hope you are doing well,
Much love, my friend
🌹
B
I thoroughly enjoyed your takeaway and the depth of emotion you had. I so appreciate your time and and leaving those thoughts, RiAN. It's sometimes difficult to reconstruct exactly my intents but you're very close to the feelings I had while writing, for sure... I love seeing you and hope you are doing well,
Much love, my friend
🌹
B
Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 5:13pm
Its rare and wonderful when I am struck by the focused brevity, visceral presence of a write. Been over it a few times, letting it take forms in my mind's eye.
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Re: Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:24pm
Hi, Daniel
That's some comment and I appreciate you taking the time to leave your thoughts. really.
Much thanks for the list add and really for making me feel like this was worthy of a reread... nice to hear
I hope you are doing well,
Much love-
🌹
That's some comment and I appreciate you taking the time to leave your thoughts. really.
Much thanks for the list add and really for making me feel like this was worthy of a reread... nice to hear
I hope you are doing well,
Much love-
🌹
Anonymous
- Edited 22nd Jul 2022 4:45pm
11th Mar 2021 6:31pm
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Re: Re. protrude
11th Mar 2021 6:32pm
Re. protrude
12th Mar 2021 5:52am
Re: Re. protrude
28th Mar 2021 4:40pm
Your, 'wow' has me smiling.
I appreciate that, Richard and I'm sorry I missed this comment!
I'm glad you enjoyed it and that you found it resonates
Well wishes your way,
🌹
-B
I appreciate that, Richard and I'm sorry I missed this comment!
I'm glad you enjoyed it and that you found it resonates
Well wishes your way,
🌹
-B