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perfection in the dark
fear is a stray dog
dry humping your
leg.
an ill moon pulls
knives from the
eyes of wounded
stars.
fire up a match
and light a Lucky
Strike,
then finger bang
the world.
dead man's
hand,
dead end
road,
dead is the
face of the
rose lying
in the dirt,
the arms and legs
of the future are
broken.
love has blacked
out from a week
long bender on
the Vegas strip
and no matter
what our intent...
in the end,
there will be
blood.
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Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 3:35pm
You had me with opening stanza ... raw ... riveting ... great closing bk ...
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Re: Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 3:48pm
Re: Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 5:34pm
Wow! High praise indeed coming from one of my favorite poets on DUP.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 4:50pm
Just a tremendous write, bk... that ending is ringing in my head...
So rich and compelling... I'm left enthralled
🌹
xo
So rich and compelling... I'm left enthralled
🌹
xo
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Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 5:10pm
I do hope you are wrong, Kitts. We are on the precipice of a razor's edge here in this country; it all comes down to a lousy vote by people who seem to only have their best greedy interests at heart.
a(n) ill moon pulls
xo
a(n) ill moon pulls
xo
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Re: Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 5:31pm
Thank you, Ahvanti. We are, indeed, in a razors edge. We way we go? Who knows.
Appreciate the catch also .
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Appreciate the catch also .
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Re: Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 5:33pm
That catch adds some awesome consonance to the line too! LOL!
Well, all we can do is hope for the best, Kitts. xo
Well, all we can do is hope for the best, Kitts. xo
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Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 8:26pm
Dear BK,
“ then finger bang
the world. ” love it! Seriously my stomach hurts from laughing. Well, you’ve written up another fine poem my friend. I very much enjoyed each stanza on their own and collectively. You’ve a keen eye on the world. H🌷
“ then finger bang
the world. ” love it! Seriously my stomach hurts from laughing. Well, you’ve written up another fine poem my friend. I very much enjoyed each stanza on their own and collectively. You’ve a keen eye on the world. H🌷
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Re: Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 9:11pm
Thank you my dear Honoria. Some I just throw thoughts out there.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 11:00pm
One powerful expression after another with the perfect ending. I agree with Honoria that each stanza stands alone but when combined it is even more amazing. So many ways to appreciate this write.
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Re: Re. perfection in the dark
13th Feb 2021 11:23pm
Re. perfection in the dark
14th Feb 2021 2:46pm
It's like a modern book of badass proverbs.... had me grinning and chuckling. Nice work!
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Re: Re. perfection in the dark
14th Feb 2021 2:50pm
Thank you, b.t. Much appreciated. Remember it's Valentine's day, so eat a boatload of chocolate.
hugs,
buddhakitty .
hugs,
buddhakitty .
Re. perfection in the dark
17th Feb 2021 3:45am
“dead is the
face of the
rose lying
in the dirt, “
I like those lines that can be dark and beautiful at the same time. I like that you don’t hold back.
Well done bk
face of the
rose lying
in the dirt, “
I like those lines that can be dark and beautiful at the same time. I like that you don’t hold back.
Well done bk
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Re: Re. perfection in the dark
18th Feb 2021 00:33am