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Spiraling into sadness
Someone asked me if I would ever fight for them, if I would do whatever it took to keep them next to me, if I would be jealous or angry at someone who tried to make a move on them.
The question puzzled me for a moment and I realized.. that I wouldn’t ever feel that way towards them.
I don’t have those feeling in me, at least not for them.
Then It hit me like a ton of bricks.
why it is that you can bring out the fire in my otherwise bland and mundane heart?
Why is it when I see you with someone, that it hurts, like my soul has been ripped out of my cheast?
Why can’t I let you go?
Why is it that my heart and body reject the idea of you leaving me behind, even though I know you deserve better.
Why?!
The question puzzled me for a moment and I realized.. that I wouldn’t ever feel that way towards them.
I don’t have those feeling in me, at least not for them.
Then It hit me like a ton of bricks.
why it is that you can bring out the fire in my otherwise bland and mundane heart?
Why is it when I see you with someone, that it hurts, like my soul has been ripped out of my cheast?
Why can’t I let you go?
Why is it that my heart and body reject the idea of you leaving me behind, even though I know you deserve better.
Why?!
Published 2nd Feb 2021
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2nd Feb 2021 8:47pm
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16th Feb 2021 9:36pm
WHY has been considered the greatest generator of questions and all answers are found in the quest. Great write. Peace. oral
1st Aug 2021 7:48am
It’s tough to explain how someone gets under your skin. For everyone else looking in from the outside, they can’t comprehend the dynamic between you and the person of your affection.
A 1st love is tough to let go.
A 1st love is tough to let go.
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21st Dec 2021 5:25pm
I’m not mad, thank you for the honest criticism It is appreciated. I don’t do a very good job at explaining the situation or context behind the poem or give a clear indication of who I’m talking to or about.
21st Dec 2021 5:49pm
Hullo
this is quite good. it's honest and raw, and spoke simple.
fair points in the comment above. certainly watch out for the switching of horses in future. that's to say keep it in mind and it'll become instinct.
to be fair, and with respect, I didn't really need you to tell me who you were talking about. I found the poem was more about you and your feelings. the other person was secondary, and evidently not that important.
that said, those are merely my opinions.
shine on
this is quite good. it's honest and raw, and spoke simple.
fair points in the comment above. certainly watch out for the switching of horses in future. that's to say keep it in mind and it'll become instinct.
to be fair, and with respect, I didn't really need you to tell me who you were talking about. I found the poem was more about you and your feelings. the other person was secondary, and evidently not that important.
that said, those are merely my opinions.
shine on
27th Dec 2021 10:28pm
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