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genuine in deed and isolation (a bird's eye view)
I found a little bird
that fell so far
from it's warm nesting place
O' the darkened comfort
of an only known
safe home
isolated
on a ground
of bitter cold
swallowed whole
in the mouth
of nature's unrepentant
icy unregretful role
a panicked flutter
of unstructured wings
a squawking strain
squeezing from premature lungs
jagged single tears
sliding into
all that obvious fear
petrified in willful pretending
heart, visually slamming
hopeless
of any possible winning
left to become so much like them
is to end in a methodical all alone
I once found a little bird
that fell so very far
it asked to be placed from which it came
secure now, away safe
in the comfort of it's
genuine chosen home
Published 16th Jan 2021
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©Blu2020
pic: via Pinterest
pic: via Pinterest
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16th Jan 2021 7:48pm
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16th Jan 2021 8:18pm
Your little poem comment vignettes are making my day!! ... Ty for reading, the list add and my smile
xoxo
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xoxo
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Anonymous
- Edited 6th Dec 2022 00:45am
16th Jan 2021 8:01pm
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You're back with a gusto.. I like it!
Good to see you.
Yeah.. it's a metaphor that's been sitting in my drafts since last night, I'm still committed to posting and not letting things hide away, this is how it turned out. isolation... waiting for that welcomed warmth...
or something like that...
Lmao
Ty for the RL add
and your thoughtful comments.
💜
B
Good to see you.
Yeah.. it's a metaphor that's been sitting in my drafts since last night, I'm still committed to posting and not letting things hide away, this is how it turned out. isolation... waiting for that welcomed warmth...
or something like that...
Lmao
Ty for the RL add
and your thoughtful comments.
💜
B
Anonymous
16th Jan 2021 10:08pm
I feel this metaphor.
16th Jan 2021 11:22pm
16th Jan 2021 10:49pm
17th Jan 2021 00:04am
17th Jan 2021 00:03am
Beautiful absolutely beautiful
I must say your words has picked up this broken crow, many times
Love and light
Ron xx
I must say your words has picked up this broken crow, many times
Love and light
Ron xx
17th Jan 2021 00:04am
17th Jan 2021 00:17am
17th Jan 2021 00:59am
BV, this charming write is another revelation exposing your beautiful naturalist essence through poetry. Beautiful!.........I once tried to give a bird mouth to mouth to help it survive and ended up with CHIRPIES!!!...lol
17th Jan 2021 1:54am
lol...hahaha
I needed that laugh Ty, so much... I had a rough day today. 🙏 This was actually one big metaphoric yammer about isolation, longing and what not... lmao. I know, it's out there... 😂 I do thank you very much for reading, the list add and your genuine comments.
xo
🌹
B
I needed that laugh Ty, so much... I had a rough day today. 🙏 This was actually one big metaphoric yammer about isolation, longing and what not... lmao. I know, it's out there... 😂 I do thank you very much for reading, the list add and your genuine comments.
xo
🌹
B
17th Jan 2021 1:35am
This poem is making shed tears because it's so beautiful like you. Keep on writing.
17th Jan 2021 1:39am
Blue, you capture so well the helplessness of being far from one's comforting place. Themes of home always touch me deeply. Bravissima, S ❣️❣️
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17th Jan 2021 4:32pm
Ohh, B
I'm so very grateful for your presence and lovely pov. Your comments have a way of confidence building with a comforting flair that's just so welcomed and helpful. I'm glad you enjoyed reading and my true thanks is plentiful.
(love the bears! 🐻!)
Much love and respect,
🌹🐻🌹
xo
B
I'm so very grateful for your presence and lovely pov. Your comments have a way of confidence building with a comforting flair that's just so welcomed and helpful. I'm glad you enjoyed reading and my true thanks is plentiful.
(love the bears! 🐻!)
Much love and respect,
🌹🐻🌹
xo
B
17th Jan 2021 6:17pm
Sorry for the "Blued." I corrected it. I'm glad you like my bear hugs ❤
17th Jan 2021 7:00am
Dear BV,
Poor little bird. I appreciate the bird as a metaphor of sorts for fear and loneliness. This world can be so isolating and to me, when we fall out of our protective nests with no one to help it’s devastating. I really liked how you ended the piece with a resonance of hope and safety. It’s as if I could breathe without a catch in my breath knowing there’s a beacon of hope somewhere. Lovely write. H🌷
Poor little bird. I appreciate the bird as a metaphor of sorts for fear and loneliness. This world can be so isolating and to me, when we fall out of our protective nests with no one to help it’s devastating. I really liked how you ended the piece with a resonance of hope and safety. It’s as if I could breathe without a catch in my breath knowing there’s a beacon of hope somewhere. Lovely write. H🌷
17th Jan 2021 7:22am
Dearest H,
I couldn't agree more!! I usually get beat up a tad for being too sensitive.. that protection from others or even from myself, is imperative. To me anyway. I try to develop a thick skin and can talk a good talk, yet it's marshmallow center, all the way!!
You're spoiling me tonight and I utterly adore you! hahaha..
Ty Ty for the list add and the totality of your visits!
hugs,
🌹
xo
B
I couldn't agree more!! I usually get beat up a tad for being too sensitive.. that protection from others or even from myself, is imperative. To me anyway. I try to develop a thick skin and can talk a good talk, yet it's marshmallow center, all the way!!
You're spoiling me tonight and I utterly adore you! hahaha..
Ty Ty for the list add and the totality of your visits!
hugs,
🌹
xo
B
This piece reminds me of the statement that we can choose our family if our natural one proves unworthy. Fear of loneliness need never be a fear, in that case. Lovely piece.
17th Jan 2021 4:41pm
Eerie,
You're atune and astute with that imagining. The fending off of isolation that someone might normally need help with, and knowing it's only your closest friend(s) that know how to reach in and help "right the ship" (thoughts that ran through my head, while writing) ... It's a bit ambiguous, I know but yeah, you certainly get it.
I'm so appreciative of your read and thoughtful comments, they're meaningful to me
-All smiles that you enjoyed it.
Much love,
🌹
-B
You're atune and astute with that imagining. The fending off of isolation that someone might normally need help with, and knowing it's only your closest friend(s) that know how to reach in and help "right the ship" (thoughts that ran through my head, while writing) ... It's a bit ambiguous, I know but yeah, you certainly get it.
I'm so appreciative of your read and thoughtful comments, they're meaningful to me
-All smiles that you enjoyed it.
Much love,
🌹
-B
17th Jan 2021 9:43pm
One aspect of poetry that I admire is subtle and sensitively rendered metaphor that exudes something personal without an outright statement of it. This is so lovely Susan. 💖🎶🙏
17th Jan 2021 10:08pm
Your admiration is making my wonky smile that much more pronounced and my coffee that much more delicious... 😋 yum!.. Hee hee hee..
Ty for reading and the kindness of the list add. This was a departure for me (completely!) and I was not thrilled with posting it, but stuck to my promise to myself to post everything and not chicken out by leaving poems in 'drafts' to wither away..... I think I should get some chamomile tea as well... thanks for the ear worm!
;)
Cheers to hot 🔥 beverages!! 😂
🌹
xo
Ty for reading and the kindness of the list add. This was a departure for me (completely!) and I was not thrilled with posting it, but stuck to my promise to myself to post everything and not chicken out by leaving poems in 'drafts' to wither away..... I think I should get some chamomile tea as well... thanks for the ear worm!
;)
Cheers to hot 🔥 beverages!! 😂
🌹
xo
20th Jan 2021 5:55pm
Touching write Blue. Something so fragile, vulnerable and beautiful at the mercy of kindness.
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20th Jan 2021 6:08pm
Thank you for reading and your thoughts, Walter.
This piece was one big metaphoric attempt and I wasn't sure about it, in the least.... so I'm appreciative of the sentiments shared.
You always reinforce such positivity!
Enjoy your day,
🌹- Susan
This piece was one big metaphoric attempt and I wasn't sure about it, in the least.... so I'm appreciative of the sentiments shared.
You always reinforce such positivity!
Enjoy your day,
🌹- Susan
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28th May 2021 9:01pm
I enjoyed this, the idea of choosing is something... the control and one's joy.
28th May 2021 9:08pm
