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Devil May Care - An erotic redux
Your mouth,
It's smart and witty
BITING
Into that tender skin under my ear
where I spill my secrets,
I was so clear,
that's
where...I lose it all
Where 'good girl'
sheds all airs
and I'm left swimming in
"Devil may cares"
Head thrown back
to access flesh
"Ohh, God"
I. Love. It.
Self control never existed
Did I, before your mouth moved across my skin?
Lips tease, teeth nip,
on the tips of perfect ears
Tracing me, tempting me;
The semblance
of something resembling a moan
roars from lips that are noticeably sore
(which I ignore)
by such bruising kisses of yours
hushed breath sounds,
reverberate
goosebumps bound,
My poor clenched knees
~I almost drop down~
You speak deep and time freezes
with those filthy breezes,
Only mine
That wicked mouth so dirty
in truth, confident and sure
it's all and everything I fantasize so clearly;
Those traveled words of smut and sleeze
slither all the way down, find a home
between prior closed now wide open knees;
My sacrificial self lays down at your alter
YOURS.
You are the only one that can read
from the book of my own secrets of secrets
My sacred sex fuck texts
Psalms of my pussy
Carnal knowledge of just yours and mine,
Combined
I'm spread so wide
splayed on that mouth of yours...
—Moan-of-all-moans—
Glossy in glisten,
me and all my decadent flavor
fuck me,
how you savor it
Flicks of your clever learned tongue
I
ride
the
wanted
tortured
cusp
Pleas of "make me cum" "make me cum" when pressed so hard
against your face and tongue
Grind after grind in mutal time
Together, joined upon tearing waves
spiraling sky high in screaming praise
Away slips the last of clichéd shiny goodness
debauchery relishes it's devilish sin
as the pursuit of pure freedom
bellows loud confirmation by orgasmic win!
Written by
Bluevelvete
Published 12th Dec 2020
| Edited 27th May 2022
Author's Note
©Blu2020
A redux of my original from 08/30/2020
A redux of my original from 08/30/2020
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 5:19pm
This one is truly a scorcher, we love the phrasing and the imagery. This maybe your tightest piece of erotica. You seem to venturing out getting a little bolder, super tight Lady
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 5:23pm
A "super tight" feedback comment, is all this lady needs for day. made.
Ty so much, Me...
Really.
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
B
Ty so much, Me...
Really.
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
B
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 5:25pm
My fucking good god, that was a mind blowing, heart pounding piece, you truly are sex in words sweet, hot, horny just a sensational fuck in stanzas
Loved it
Love and light and a serious need of a cold shower
Ron xxx
Loved it
Love and light and a serious need of a cold shower
Ron xxx
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 5:40pm
Wow, Ron! Thank you so much for enjoying this rewrite like you do. I was hesitant to repost this redux, now I'm a bit more confident due to your lovely comments... I really appreciate it.
I'm also grateful for the RL add as well.
Your support is treasured
💜
xoxo
B
I'm also grateful for the RL add as well.
Your support is treasured
💜
xoxo
B
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 5:33pm
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12th Dec 2020 5:36pm
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 6:19pm
Mmmmmm, that's all I gotta say❣❣ Okay, maybe not😍 Yummmmmmm❣❣ That's all...nope. Blue this is so delicious. The stanza starting with "Combined" describes so seductively one of my favorite sports...I've got trophies 🏆👅💦💦
This passage is so kyrical and secy,
"Where 'good girl'
sheds all airs
and I'm left swimming in
"Devil may cares"
And YOWZA❣❣ This passage is a head-ta-toe tingle-maker,
"slither all the way down, find a home
between prior closed now wide open knees "
I sprung a leak 💦💦💦
And "Psalms to my pussy" is so irreverant and yet poetically beautifull.
This passage is so kyrical and secy,
"Where 'good girl'
sheds all airs
and I'm left swimming in
"Devil may cares"
And YOWZA❣❣ This passage is a head-ta-toe tingle-maker,
"slither all the way down, find a home
between prior closed now wide open knees "
I sprung a leak 💦💦💦
And "Psalms to my pussy" is so irreverant and yet poetically beautifull.
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
Thank you for that wonderful opportunity to see my write through your eyes. I am so very grateful that you enjoyed my slightly sacrilege spill.. 😁 I like how you picked out "psalms of my pussy".. my evil nasty side wanted to keep a delicious devilish theme and that line was an admitted fav... haha.
You and I have a shared love of this particular oral theme!!... 😋..... lol
I am thankful for you, the list add and all your beautiful support
💜🌹💜🌹💜🌹
xoxo
B
You and I have a shared love of this particular oral theme!!... 😋..... lol
I am thankful for you, the list add and all your beautiful support
💜🌹💜🌹💜🌹
xoxo
B
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
Anonymous
12th Dec 2020 6:22pm
How boring. KIDDING!
Your words create such a specific scene. Hot and personal. Two people engaged in what we all need to be engaged in and doing it passionately, mind blowingly. Resistance then surrender. Nothing hotter. A very specific spot on the body that when touched/caressed/licked/bitten results in complete fucking abandon. I love that feeling, that knowledge that amongst all the erotic touching there is one spot that causes delicious loss of control. I can identify with that.
Enough. This is a beautiful, erotic, arousing poem. Amazing.
Your words create such a specific scene. Hot and personal. Two people engaged in what we all need to be engaged in and doing it passionately, mind blowingly. Resistance then surrender. Nothing hotter. A very specific spot on the body that when touched/caressed/licked/bitten results in complete fucking abandon. I love that feeling, that knowledge that amongst all the erotic touching there is one spot that causes delicious loss of control. I can identify with that.
Enough. This is a beautiful, erotic, arousing poem. Amazing.

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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
I know! doldrum... that's for sure!
😉 I love your attention to every little detail.. I appreciate that, attention to DETAIL. It's one of my most favorite attributes to admire and lust after. You have given me compliments of such a genuine and generous nature, my erotic new friend, that I am sincere in all my thank you's. Looking forward to seeing your avatar, is putting it mildly. Connections sometimes are just meant to be.
Your insights are felt, deeply.
Ty so much
💜
xoxo
B
😉 I love your attention to every little detail.. I appreciate that, attention to DETAIL. It's one of my most favorite attributes to admire and lust after. You have given me compliments of such a genuine and generous nature, my erotic new friend, that I am sincere in all my thank you's. Looking forward to seeing your avatar, is putting it mildly. Connections sometimes are just meant to be.
Your insights are felt, deeply.
Ty so much
💜
xoxo
B
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 6:42pm
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12th Dec 2020 6:54pm
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 6:45pm
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12th Dec 2020 7:19pm
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 7:23pm
beautiful Blue I love it
he inspired me too
this write is sexy, naughty, and hot...
sizzling ❤
he inspired me too
this write is sexy, naughty, and hot...
sizzling ❤
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
Thank you Brenda!
PS is a true motivator! ... hahaha
I enjoyed your sizzling comment so very much
🌹
Ty for the always lovely visit and the generous list add. I'm so grateful for you.
💜
xoxo
PS is a true motivator! ... hahaha
I enjoyed your sizzling comment so very much
🌹
Ty for the always lovely visit and the generous list add. I'm so grateful for you.
💜
xoxo
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 7:26pm
Woahhhhhh!!! Holy molly miss blue 🌹YOU are a cut above... 🦋 this is the most sensually freeing composition of erotica I've ever read... and read again... and again... and again🔥
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
Ohh Eli!!
I love the thought of you reading over and over and smiling mischievously... Hee hee hee.. Hopefully that's not too self centered a wish / dream! Your visit leaves me smiling as always and always. and always.. Lol. I hope your Sat includes me in your thoughts... I appreciate your RL add and all your beautiful comments..
🌹💕🌹💕🌹💕🌹
xo
B
I love the thought of you reading over and over and smiling mischievously... Hee hee hee.. Hopefully that's not too self centered a wish / dream! Your visit leaves me smiling as always and always. and always.. Lol. I hope your Sat includes me in your thoughts... I appreciate your RL add and all your beautiful comments..
🌹💕🌹💕🌹💕🌹
xo
B
Anonymous
- Edited 20th Sep 2021 1:45am
12th Dec 2020 7:31pm
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
12th Dec 2020 8:18pm
Lmfao!
Yessssssss
The melting of any body part is a much adored reaction! (I'm so naughty!)
Ty so much, Wilber... what a terrific sexy nugget of feedback! 🔥 🔥
🌹💜🌹
xoxo
-B
Yessssssss
The melting of any body part is a much adored reaction! (I'm so naughty!)
Ty so much, Wilber... what a terrific sexy nugget of feedback! 🔥 🔥
🌹💜🌹
xoxo
-B
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
13th Dec 2020 2:31am
What a yummy poem 🥰 You captured the buildup so well, giving a sweet release in that last line. 😌
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
13th Dec 2020 3:59am
Thank you for reading and your lovely comments
I'm glad you found something that spoke to you, that's always such an honor to read.
I'm grateful for your RL add and your thoughts expressed.
🌹
Welcome to DUP
I hope you enjoy your time here.
💜
xoxo
B
I'm glad you found something that spoke to you, that's always such an honor to read.
I'm grateful for your RL add and your thoughts expressed.
🌹
Welcome to DUP
I hope you enjoy your time here.
💜
xoxo
B
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
13th Dec 2020 3:39am
Ummmmmm first off, does anybody have a fan?
and maybe a towel ;p
This is was so fuckin hot blue
Excellent sexy dark enticing visceral write
More please :)
and maybe a towel ;p
This is was so fuckin hot blue
Excellent sexy dark enticing visceral write
More please :)
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
13th Dec 2020 3:57am
😈 🌹😈🌹 😈
Ty, Swagger
I'm glad you enjoyed yourself
...a girl does love her visuals....
😉
I'm grateful for the fact you need a fan, your list add and such kind words that made my electric blue burn a little bit bluer tonight....
Your presence upon my page is proof positive that I'm doing something right.
Much love and respect,
🌹 🌹 🌹
xo
B
Ty, Swagger
I'm glad you enjoyed yourself
...a girl does love her visuals....
😉
I'm grateful for the fact you need a fan, your list add and such kind words that made my electric blue burn a little bit bluer tonight....
Your presence upon my page is proof positive that I'm doing something right.
Much love and respect,
🌹 🌹 🌹
xo
B
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
13th Dec 2020 4:57am
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13th Dec 2020 5:12am
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13th Dec 2020 5:16am
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
Another Classic in the MAKING
FUCK Netflix
Im just going to wait TILL
What you write next
God bless you
FUCK Netflix
Im just going to wait TILL
What you write next
God bless you
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
13th Dec 2020 11:55am
Lmfao
You are my DU funny bone
Ty, TROME
Best comment award 🏆 is yours!
Tyvm for the RL add and your
sexy comments
💜🌹💜
xo
B
You are my DU funny bone
Ty, TROME
Best comment award 🏆 is yours!
Tyvm for the RL add and your
sexy comments
💜🌹💜
xo
B
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
13th Dec 2020 3:13pm
......MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM, speechless, mmmmmmMMMMMM, can I buy a vowel please??? I need a minute and maybe a cigarette and I don't even smoke nor have ever smoked, lol, as I try to string together a few words to describe my aMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMazement of this erotic mmmmmmMMMMMMMMMasterpiece! Taking a bite of the wild side with this mmmmmmMMMMMMindlowing write has me Salivating with every descriptive display of poetic bliss. MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMind Blowing submission Bluevelvette.
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
13th Dec 2020 5:33pm
lmao...
I'm assuming you enjoyed?
Thank you for reading and your gusto filled comments! You made me giggle and smile
I appreciate your visit, the RL add and all your thoughts and desire spilled forth!!
(naughty Blue!)
lol
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
B
I'm assuming you enjoyed?
Thank you for reading and your gusto filled comments! You made me giggle and smile
I appreciate your visit, the RL add and all your thoughts and desire spilled forth!!
(naughty Blue!)
lol
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
B
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Oct 2022 6:45pm
13th Dec 2020 4:10pm
<< post removed >>

Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
13th Dec 2020 4:57pm
I'm not sure my pen is gold but at times I can pen a tiny bit of fire. My wish would be consistency... However, it's inspiration and not really my own doing that allows for a write like this. ... lol....
I know this spill might not be quite your cup of tea, which makes your lovely and extremely thoughtful comments, that much more cherished. Thank you, Tim.... for all this input and feedback. I adore the time and consideration you've taken.
.... and Yes, my erotic imagination comes from (no pun intended... well, not really... lol) a place that I have cultivated within myself and truly enjoy.
I'm grateful for you
and all your kindness shown.
🌹💜🌹💜🌹
xoxo
B
I know this spill might not be quite your cup of tea, which makes your lovely and extremely thoughtful comments, that much more cherished. Thank you, Tim.... for all this input and feedback. I adore the time and consideration you've taken.
.... and Yes, my erotic imagination comes from (no pun intended... well, not really... lol) a place that I have cultivated within myself and truly enjoy.
I'm grateful for you
and all your kindness shown.
🌹💜🌹💜🌹
xoxo
B
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
14th Dec 2020 7:09pm
I, uh...I, uh...
Cheese us crust that was so good. Just kind of left me speechless (and smiling).
:-)
Cheese us crust that was so good. Just kind of left me speechless (and smiling).
:-)
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
24th Jan 2021 4:24pm
Hee hee hee...
I just came across (no pun intended!) this comment and I am still giggling... sorry I missed it, but not sorry that you left me smiling-laughing on a random Sunday... hahaha
Ty, my lovely friend... I really appreciate you.
🌹
xo
I just came across (no pun intended!) this comment and I am still giggling... sorry I missed it, but not sorry that you left me smiling-laughing on a random Sunday... hahaha
Ty, my lovely friend... I really appreciate you.
🌹
xo
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
23rd Jan 2021 6:06pm
Ah, the moment the good girl sheds all air, the switch flipped, a very special moment and bond.
Reading this I could sense your passion / lust / need, feel your trembles, and submission.
Reading this I could sense your passion / lust / need, feel your trembles, and submission.
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
Mmm...
I'm deeply appreciative of your read and comments, Leo. Thank you, so so much. I haven't read this in a bit so I reread it because of your notification and you're 100% correct. Honestly, I was ABLAZE with enormous emotion while I wrote this initially. It was a direct result of need, lust and yearning.... plain and simple. I am glad that I was able to get that to come across.... ;)
Your visits are always welcomed. 🙏 don't be a stranger!
Much love,
🌹
xo
-B
I'm deeply appreciative of your read and comments, Leo. Thank you, so so much. I haven't read this in a bit so I reread it because of your notification and you're 100% correct. Honestly, I was ABLAZE with enormous emotion while I wrote this initially. It was a direct result of need, lust and yearning.... plain and simple. I am glad that I was able to get that to come across.... ;)
Your visits are always welcomed. 🙏 don't be a stranger!
Much love,
🌹
xo
-B
Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
5th Sep 2022 4:15am
Susan, this was a delight to my body and soul. Your playful rhythm and well-placed use of graphic imagery made for a wild ride of orgasmic intensity. This is the gold of erotica. This is what most erotica writers only dreamed of writing. You got a home run with the ball out of the park. This is the real stuff. I felt like an untethered kite reading this. It took me soaring.
XoXo
John
XoXo
John
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Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
These older pieces are definitely interesting to revisit! I think of how just the other day someone meaning to hurt me, alluded to my writing as being lessor and stale (sadly, sometimes the people here on DUP don't turn out to be the kind and honest people you think they are, it's not the first time and I'm sure it won't be the last!) and after rereading this older piece , I can confidently say that's patently false... lol... I see nothing but change, growth and currently a more intuitive Blue that's been able to blossom into a much better writer. While I do appreciate this poem has it's own place in my personal journey; which absolutely means your beautiful comments do as well, I was struck more so by that former revelation. So, to put it all into perspective, you, delving into my erotic nature, have inadvertently helped me to ignore the bullying that was pursued out of what I assume are one's own inferior needs to make themselves feel something other than what their obvious sad lives leave them feeling. You've highlighted me, my true value and strengths, I am enormously grateful to you for that wonderfully unexpected gift, my darling... and to be honest, I'm a bit relieved, too; as I had almost started to believe that bully was right...
You're incredible.
My cup runneth over. 🙏
🌹
-Susan
You're incredible.
My cup runneth over. 🙏
🌹
-Susan
Re: Re. Devil May Care - An erotic redux
5th Sep 2022 9:00pm
My darling, your poetry is an ongoing miracle that continuously resurrects my faith in the possibilities inherent in the human dream. Your use of language composes stars that shine through my soul to make art blossom in my heart. For those things and many more, I am eternally grateful to you.
You are my dream come true,
John
You are my dream come true,
John
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