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Edge of Silence
You said moonlight is liquid
And now I believe and now I see
How it penetrates through
narrow crevices
It flows and flows, filling all thoughts
Icy deserts, kilometers of silence
The immense burden of
boundless freedom
Zippers zipped across the tarpaulin sky
And weak shoots pulsate in the
damp ground
I'm looking for you to hide from the
cruel wind
To win you back from cold and dark
The candle flame goes out,
but I believe in your immortality
And I will take you away from the
icy deserts
I don't want you to be alone
Immobile, helpless in these
gloomy halls,
Among the strange and
creaks and rustles
Among the alien cold, air currents
I came to steal your body from them
Reluctantly, but stubborn arrows are
moving backwards
I keep my secret, and who will believe me
But I know you’re sleeping,
you’re just sleeping too deeply
And I sneak in the dark, ignoring the
fits of fear
In endlessly cold, empty corridors
Listening tensely,
getting cold and shuddering,
Pressing against the wall at the
slightest rustle
I'll blow these walls down,
I'll break open all the doors
Having overcome all barriers,
defeating all obstacles.
I'm stronger than the cold,
you'll come back - I believe
From where there is no return
Lost in the dark depths of
mirrored surfaces
You call me through the oceans of the
full moon
A thin thread breaks,
but I believe in your immortality
And I will find you even on that
Edge of Silence ...
And now I believe and now I see
How it penetrates through
narrow crevices
It flows and flows, filling all thoughts
Icy deserts, kilometers of silence
The immense burden of
boundless freedom
Zippers zipped across the tarpaulin sky
And weak shoots pulsate in the
damp ground
I'm looking for you to hide from the
cruel wind
To win you back from cold and dark
The candle flame goes out,
but I believe in your immortality
And I will take you away from the
icy deserts
I don't want you to be alone
Immobile, helpless in these
gloomy halls,
Among the strange and
creaks and rustles
Among the alien cold, air currents
I came to steal your body from them
Reluctantly, but stubborn arrows are
moving backwards
I keep my secret, and who will believe me
But I know you’re sleeping,
you’re just sleeping too deeply
And I sneak in the dark, ignoring the
fits of fear
In endlessly cold, empty corridors
Listening tensely,
getting cold and shuddering,
Pressing against the wall at the
slightest rustle
I'll blow these walls down,
I'll break open all the doors
Having overcome all barriers,
defeating all obstacles.
I'm stronger than the cold,
you'll come back - I believe
From where there is no return
Lost in the dark depths of
mirrored surfaces
You call me through the oceans of the
full moon
A thin thread breaks,
but I believe in your immortality
And I will find you even on that
Edge of Silence ...
Written by
KristinaX
Published 1st Nov 2020
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Re. Edge of Silence
1st Nov 2020 6:18pm
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1st Nov 2020 10:41pm
Thank you Swagger, I really love 'Holy WOW', that definitely made me smile. 💖
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1st Nov 2020 7:21pm
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1st Nov 2020 10:43pm
Re. Edge of Silence
1st Nov 2020 8:01pm
Boo this is an excellent piece, you really elevated the bar by posting this. Dark love is truer to form than any thing else in this universe, just think of how many love triangles invaded Eden. Super tight Boo
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1st Nov 2020 10:51pm
'Elevated the bar by posting this' - Thank you so much that is a huge compliment. Also a good point about dark love and love triangles in Eden. 💖
Re. Edge of Silence
1st Nov 2020 9:50pm
All is dar..even love...until there is a little light. Great ink Kristina.
🙏 Harry
🙏 Harry
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1st Nov 2020 10:54pm
Re. Edge of Silence
2nd Nov 2020 3:01am
Dear K,
Like a dream that you want to wake from but can’t until you find the captured hero. What I relate to in this piece is its sense of alone-ness. You won’t rest until things are resolved because true love, no matter how dark is so real. That’s how I seem to be taking in this write. Wonderfully written with great development and suspense. I so appreciate the dedication and determination to bring back that love from the brink of the abyss. Epic write. H🌷
Like a dream that you want to wake from but can’t until you find the captured hero. What I relate to in this piece is its sense of alone-ness. You won’t rest until things are resolved because true love, no matter how dark is so real. That’s how I seem to be taking in this write. Wonderfully written with great development and suspense. I so appreciate the dedication and determination to bring back that love from the brink of the abyss. Epic write. H🌷
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2nd Nov 2020 7:44pm
And again you have captured things perfectly. You have made me really happy that you feel it is an epic write. Thank you so much for the comment and your continued support. 💖
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Re: Re. Edge of Silence
3rd Nov 2020 9:58pm
It would appear we were commenting at the same time. :) Thank you for the beautiful compliment. I hope that some of my other work can meet your expectations. :) 💖
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3rd Nov 2020 11:00pm
Bravissima, Kristina❣❣ You illustrate so well the persistence of true love in this piece and the courage that it takes to pursue this elusive emotion even across the precipice of death. A hauntingly romantic masterpiece.
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3rd Nov 2020 11:18pm
Thank you GW, I am really happy you like it. You summarize things so well... I love that you think it is a 'hauntingly romantic masterpiece'. 💖
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3rd Nov 2020 11:21pm
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4th Nov 2020 5:15pm
Your abilities are growing, your voice grows in its calm strength, your exploration of imbuing the environment with soulful presence, fluidity of metaphor, proportion and depth in lovely dimensions.
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4th Nov 2020 7:40pm
You made my day Daniel, "your abilities are growing" means a lot to me. Your writing is phenomenal and I treasure your feedback and guidance. Thank you. 💖
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18th Nov 2020 3:36pm
Kristina, this is pretty amazing. There's like a sense of spirituality underneath it all.
That last stanza is brilliant, summarizing what many of us try to find.
Bravo.
That last stanza is brilliant, summarizing what many of us try to find.
Bravo.
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18th Nov 2020 7:25pm
Thank you so much the comment and compliment Wally, I am really glad you liked it and could see the spirituality aspect. I really appreciate your feedback so much and RL entry. 💖
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14th Dec 2020 8:57pm
Just wanted to add I'm so happy and excited for you on winning the Poem of the Month for November.
Congratulations! Well deserved.
Congratulations! Well deserved.
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14th Dec 2020 9:06pm
Thanks Wally, that is a really nice thing to say and I appreciate it a lot! 💖 xoxo (I am still surprised about that...)
Re. Edge of Silence
24th Feb 2021 4:29pm
There is so much fervor and strength in this write
Chills run down my spine
Last stanza brings everything into view
Potent and mind bending
BIG LIKE
Chills run down my spine
Last stanza brings everything into view
Potent and mind bending
BIG LIKE
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25th Feb 2021 00:19am
Thanks Poetspeak that is a really amazing comment and one that no doubt I would have some awesomely sarcastic and wonderful response for normally lol but sadly it has been a really hard day for me personally. So the strength part is missing. You know how much fervor I normally have and I absolutely love chills, potent, and mind bending.... I BIG LIKE your comment. It cheered me up a little. 💖