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Eden perhaps
They were promised
To be in Eden
But something
Wen wrong
On God's computer
And they ended up
In Aden
A lovely place
To be sure
Totally to his tastes
But not entirely
To hers.
To be in Eden
But something
Wen wrong
On God's computer
And they ended up
In Aden
A lovely place
To be sure
Totally to his tastes
But not entirely
To hers.
Published 29th Sep 2020
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29th Sep 2020 3:15am
dearest Robert as you know I think my alternate account here is smackdownraven
I really enjoyed this and happy to think I inspired some thoughts in you tonight 💕
I really enjoyed this and happy to think I inspired some thoughts in you tonight 💕
29th Sep 2020 3:36am
Possible. I have no idea of multiples accounts..........but I did read something about Eden before, so it led me to this...........Regards, if it was you. Kisses indeed.
29th Sep 2020 3:35am
The whimsical nature of the beginning reminds me of Neil Gaiman. Very nice, I’d like to see a longer version of this, perhaps as a story.
29th Sep 2020 5:18pm
4th Oct 2020 9:17pm
I have written a few under the Aden theme if you care to look at my recent list of poems. (Even wrote one today involving Lucy y Fair and Dr Faust.....) Of course God, Archangel Gabriel, various demons etc.... Your reading is much appreciated. Regards, Robert.
29th Sep 2020 5:13pm
29th Sep 2020 5:19pm
29th Sep 2020 6:04pm
dearest Robert I really rather enjoyed this and yes I am Crim as well ❤
29th Sep 2020 7:00pm
4th Oct 2020 9:14pm
4th Oct 2020 9:01pm
Not everything can be bliss, perhaps that's what make life worth living, trying to reach it.
Thought provoking write.
Thought provoking write.
4th Oct 2020 9:18pm
