Mon amour viennent coucher avec moi    Read By Miss Indie

so sad yet so beautiful.

Indie,
Thanks for stopping by and. Leaving your thoughts.
Some people may feel sadness , I myself did not have sadness in mind as I was writing it.
 
Great to get different perspectives , espesially one from such a learned writer .

"Oui mon amour, je vais te faire l'amour sous les étoiles la nuit."

A beautiful write virile piece very nice.

Gypsy red

"Merci beaucoup belle dame"

Nice of you to stop by and leave such a warm comment.

it is.. beautiful. yes that's the appropriate word for it.

Opheliac,
So glad you liked this little number .

Thank you for stopping by and commenting on my humble writings :)

Oh, the romance. It's a sentimental, brutish strike to the big beating muscle.. for which, I wasn't prepared.

Thank you for the read

;)

Violet ,
Glad I could be brutalising  your big beating muscle.

Thanks for your visitation and comment.
.

Eamo

A 'lovely' write.

It's always such a pleasure
to read one of yours.

This one is my current favourite.

It flows beautifully and makes
it inner voice well heard.

Congratulations.

Lack of any kind of punctuation
makes it bare-more scathing
I would say.

From the very first line the very
existence of a lover gave it an
alltogether different feel.
Especially when she is 'invited'
to put an 'end'.

The repeation of 'place' emphasizes
so well.

Same goes for  'behind us'.

The stanzas starting with a gentle
request 'come my love..' gives it
some of the 'lovely' factor I had
mentioned.

The last stanza adds a whole new
dimension. For me stars signify
death. That was a beautiful end.

Respect,

S'

p.s-was the usage of 'hates' intentional?
For it's uncountable and therefore should
be used in the singular form in a strictly
grammatical sense.

Mr Sumeet sir
Yes you have certainly got the feel for this little number.
Glad you got the reason for the repeating 'place'

You honour  me with your great praise and encouragement.

Yes I believe hate would  be more appropriate , I will fix that .

Thanks man !

I love that a suicide comp. produced such a romantic write..the ending is flawless(my fav part),beautiful Eamon!

mememe,

ah yes, well there can be romance in the most unsuspecting places or themes if one looks hard enough.

you did pretty good yourself by all accounts.

thank you lots for your visit and warm comment on this little number.

Was priceless.

Eamon many of the comments stated the obvious.

You can find romance in the most unsuspecting places.

Such a pioneer you are.

Hugs

Kym!

How the hell are you,

come in, take a seat, some wine maybe?

thanks for your stopping by and throwing down your thoughts.

Doesn't read like you. Lol at all

you know, you are so right there gg
 
i had a bit of an internal conflict with myself deciding if i would post this at all.
 
some of the words here are just too ... something  and i would not normally write them.
 
it was for a comp though and i am kind of happy with  the resulting write.  
 
 
thanks for stopping by :)

Thank you, Darkdreams.

Glad you liked it :)

=)'s

Thank you :)