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Falling
Climb, climb
Way up high
Past the treetops into the sky
Man you better pass that fifth
I wanna take another hit
I've got my wings and I wanna fly
Sail me down the river
Dock my ship around the bend
A little place called the devil's den
I'm gonna stay here a little bit
Get myself a little lit
Find something that'll take away shivers
Sipping booze, I'll slip away
Binge and purge all the day
Slide into this broken bed
By the morning I'll be dead
There's no way to save me
Way up high
Past the treetops into the sky
Man you better pass that fifth
I wanna take another hit
I've got my wings and I wanna fly
Sail me down the river
Dock my ship around the bend
A little place called the devil's den
I'm gonna stay here a little bit
Get myself a little lit
Find something that'll take away shivers
Sipping booze, I'll slip away
Binge and purge all the day
Slide into this broken bed
By the morning I'll be dead
There's no way to save me
Published 6th Jul 2020
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Great job, I had some thoughts on possibly changing a few words which may give the piece a better flow. Bear n mind, I am no expert, its just my thoughts.
climb, climb
Way up high
Past the treetops reach for the sky
Man you better pass that fifth
Yearning for another hit
I've got my wings, ready to fly
Sail me down the river
You'll discover my ship around the bend
Docked, the location... devil's den
I'm gonna dwell here a little bit
Get myself a tiny lit
Maybe uncover what take away shivers
Sipping booze, I'll slip away
Binge and purge the entire day
Finally slipping into this broken bed
By the morning I'll surely be dead
There is no way to save me
climb, climb
Way up high
Past the treetops reach for the sky
Man you better pass that fifth
Yearning for another hit
I've got my wings, ready to fly
Sail me down the river
You'll discover my ship around the bend
Docked, the location... devil's den
I'm gonna dwell here a little bit
Get myself a tiny lit
Maybe uncover what take away shivers
Sipping booze, I'll slip away
Binge and purge the entire day
Finally slipping into this broken bed
By the morning I'll surely be dead
There is no way to save me
8th Oct 2020 1:02am
