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moments
morning
is a spark
the sun ignites.
dawning
still my stark
daydreams excites.
fleeting,
'tis a lark!
too soon the night,
eating
like a shark,
my hopeful flight.
seconds
synchronise:
tick calling tock
beckons
as i rise
to face the clock.
minutes
rush across
earth's startled face,
in its
desperate toss
a losing race.
every
single hour
a marriage claim;
empty
calls the lure
of fickle fame.
moments,
and the day
has had her fill,
surgent
as the clay
she seeks to kill.
monthly
dies the year
as weeks wax long;
promptly
grinds the gear
of ancient song.
youthful
passions wane
as decades drown,
truthful
as the pain
of time fast-flown.
© Copyright 2020 June 27
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
is a spark
the sun ignites.
dawning
still my stark
daydreams excites.
fleeting,
'tis a lark!
too soon the night,
eating
like a shark,
my hopeful flight.
seconds
synchronise:
tick calling tock
beckons
as i rise
to face the clock.
minutes
rush across
earth's startled face,
in its
desperate toss
a losing race.
every
single hour
a marriage claim;
empty
calls the lure
of fickle fame.
moments,
and the day
has had her fill,
surgent
as the clay
she seeks to kill.
monthly
dies the year
as weeks wax long;
promptly
grinds the gear
of ancient song.
youthful
passions wane
as decades drown,
truthful
as the pain
of time fast-flown.
© Copyright 2020 June 27
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
Published 29th Jun 2020
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29th Jun 2020 8:14am
30th Jun 2020 6:55pm
Thank you, SO!
Whereas the content evolved through some deliberation, the shape was more intuitive and spontaneous.
Sincerely
cab
Whereas the content evolved through some deliberation, the shape was more intuitive and spontaneous.
Sincerely
cab
3rd Jul 2020 00:07am
3rd Jul 2020 5:18am
29th Jun 2020 1:09pm
Fantastic content and form, Cabcool. I love that you have 'moments' bolded; it stands out as so significant.
Thank you, Ahavati.
Somehow, the stirrings in the human community have given me pause to contemplate how precious time is and how significant the records that we create with the little time we have. I think of a moment in time when the Berlin Wall came down; I think of the ravages of slavery; I think of the racial divide, which is rooted in oppressive time; and I think of recent developments, in which the present (the only time we really have) is toppling the status quo so that life can be more positively normal for all who dwell in time.
Your R/L inclusion honours me. I daresay, I appreciate your diligent encouragement, so generously given along my journey.
Sincerely
cab
Somehow, the stirrings in the human community have given me pause to contemplate how precious time is and how significant the records that we create with the little time we have. I think of a moment in time when the Berlin Wall came down; I think of the ravages of slavery; I think of the racial divide, which is rooted in oppressive time; and I think of recent developments, in which the present (the only time we really have) is toppling the status quo so that life can be more positively normal for all who dwell in time.
Your R/L inclusion honours me. I daresay, I appreciate your diligent encouragement, so generously given along my journey.
Sincerely
cab
29th Jun 2020 9:23pm
30th Jun 2020 7:20pm
That's where it's at -- in the gears. Movement (and not stasis), synchrony (and not lateralisation), progress (and not destruction) reside where the action takes place.
cab
cab
30th Jun 2020 2:37pm
the tick tock of the clock and the sands of time in our glass of life.. like the changing of the colors of the fall trees eventually we will all go bare
the body is just a leased vehicle for the soul
narrative-dramatic concrete shape poetry blend, creative shaping associated imagery on point
metering smooth, italic emphasis
assessment, acceptance, coming to terms
good stuff
Respect my poetic brother
the body is just a leased vehicle for the soul
narrative-dramatic concrete shape poetry blend, creative shaping associated imagery on point
metering smooth, italic emphasis
assessment, acceptance, coming to terms
good stuff
Respect my poetic brother
30th Jun 2020 7:27pm
Thank you, OG-P, for continuing your literary analysis on these pebbles that I post.
The suggestions I made last time might be of value to you, especially in diversifying your choice of vocabulary and engaging your broadening view of the dimensions that different works bring.
Keep up the good pathway.
Sincerely
cab
The suggestions I made last time might be of value to you, especially in diversifying your choice of vocabulary and engaging your broadening view of the dimensions that different works bring.
Keep up the good pathway.
Sincerely
cab
1st Jul 2020 00:43am
2nd Jul 2020 8:41pm
Reading over this again, I realized I've yet to comment, but I felt the need to compliment your form here. I am fascinated by the way you formatted this - a beautiful accompaniment for an excellent poem! Great work, cab, you have quite the eye for aesthetics :)
Thank you, NewB!
Your kind words are encouraging, showing that you yourself have an eye for beauty and a taste for flavour. When moments of thirst in a reader meet with moments of sacrifice in an offerer, then we find true confluence.
I am deeply honoured to be an instrument in greater hands than my feeble ones could manipulate. To God be the glory. Thank you for the R/L bookmark.
Yours sincerely
cab
Your kind words are encouraging, showing that you yourself have an eye for beauty and a taste for flavour. When moments of thirst in a reader meet with moments of sacrifice in an offerer, then we find true confluence.
I am deeply honoured to be an instrument in greater hands than my feeble ones could manipulate. To God be the glory. Thank you for the R/L bookmark.
Yours sincerely
cab
7th Jul 2020 10:49pm
Your creativity is inspiring. The format is absolutely beautiful and the message including those within the bold and italics is so meaningful as always. And on a side note, I was so mad at myself when I noticed that somehow I had not followed you. I cannot believe I would ever make such an oversight.
Your tribute is of the highest order, Kristina! I should frame this one!
Obviously, your eye for detail locks unto those subtle annotations (bolded and Italicised texts, for instance) that could make all the difference to what a poem is saying. Thank you for seeing beyond the naked words.
If your main note is the wind that buoys my sails in the sky, then your "side note" must be the sky itself that allows the wind to blow! Two things about that:
1) hopefully, it's only a little madness (poco mania), such as make's the heart merry; and
2) I recognise that a person who becomes "followed" cannot afford to be a callow fellow, so I will do my best not to lead you astray.
I appreciate the R/L shout out.
Sincerely
cab
Obviously, your eye for detail locks unto those subtle annotations (bolded and Italicised texts, for instance) that could make all the difference to what a poem is saying. Thank you for seeing beyond the naked words.
If your main note is the wind that buoys my sails in the sky, then your "side note" must be the sky itself that allows the wind to blow! Two things about that:
1) hopefully, it's only a little madness (poco mania), such as make's the heart merry; and
2) I recognise that a person who becomes "followed" cannot afford to be a callow fellow, so I will do my best not to lead you astray.
I appreciate the R/L shout out.
Sincerely
cab
8th Jul 2020 9:32pm
That you feel that way makes me so happy.
I love how your writing is multi-faceted. I recently used some italic and bold type messaging in one as well. :)
That is the beginning of a beautiful poem in and of itself.
1) Well it is now because of your beautiful reply.
2) That's good because you could probably lead me astray and there are at least a couple people that would not like that much. lol
(don't worry I would not actually do that)
Have no doubt, more to come as time permits.
I love how your writing is multi-faceted. I recently used some italic and bold type messaging in one as well. :)
That is the beginning of a beautiful poem in and of itself.
1) Well it is now because of your beautiful reply.
2) That's good because you could probably lead me astray and there are at least a couple people that would not like that much. lol
(don't worry I would not actually do that)
Have no doubt, more to come as time permits.
8th Jul 2020 10:50pm
A beautiful and tactical response!
I'll be looking out for that and others of your poems of graphic distinction.
Interestingly, quite a few of my poems are born of something I have said to someone, or vice versa, which becomes the stimulus. Thanks for the thought, therefore; it means that your perception is no trifling peep into the peripheral limitations of meaning -- you see with eyes of faith.
Thank goodness I would not have to lead a liberated soul astray! I would say, let the free spirit break forth from its own shackles and let the so-called going-astray be the founding of great new horizons. Then, being lost is being found, even as the seed that dies to rise.
Sincerely
cab
I'll be looking out for that and others of your poems of graphic distinction.
Interestingly, quite a few of my poems are born of something I have said to someone, or vice versa, which becomes the stimulus. Thanks for the thought, therefore; it means that your perception is no trifling peep into the peripheral limitations of meaning -- you see with eyes of faith.
Thank goodness I would not have to lead a liberated soul astray! I would say, let the free spirit break forth from its own shackles and let the so-called going-astray be the founding of great new horizons. Then, being lost is being found, even as the seed that dies to rise.
Sincerely
cab
8th Jul 2020 11:01pm
:)
Just realize that they in no way could compare to yours.
I knew that would be the case so that was me putting in my request.
Okay, make that two requests because I am sure you would create something magnificent with that as a starting point.
Just realize that they in no way could compare to yours.
I knew that would be the case so that was me putting in my request.
Okay, make that two requests because I am sure you would create something magnificent with that as a starting point.
10th Jul 2020 1:05am
A wonderful smile becomes the sun for many a bleak morning.
"If you compare yourself with others, you may become vain..." for there is nothing anywhere to solicit bitterness.
I took it as generous, unselfish inspiration and started working right away.
Where two thoughts diverge in a wood, the seeker of thoughts may find treasures at dual destinations -- each in its own time and with its own import.
Sincerely
cab
"If you compare yourself with others, you may become vain..." for there is nothing anywhere to solicit bitterness.
I took it as generous, unselfish inspiration and started working right away.
Where two thoughts diverge in a wood, the seeker of thoughts may find treasures at dual destinations -- each in its own time and with its own import.
Sincerely
cab
10th Jul 2020 1:27am
Thank you, Kris!
Kindred spirits know each other or soon discover same. One bright spark always recognises some other spark -- or even a glimmer.
You should find connectivity in "a little taste of heaven" because you knew its origin before it even had shape or form:
http://mydo.cx/OTI5MjIy
It is probably a product of faith; please tell me what you think.
cab
Kindred spirits know each other or soon discover same. One bright spark always recognises some other spark -- or even a glimmer.
You should find connectivity in "a little taste of heaven" because you knew its origin before it even had shape or form:
http://mydo.cx/OTI5MjIy
It is probably a product of faith; please tell me what you think.
cab
