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Hunting Unicorns
so much pain
running like mice
scrabbling around
hurting the brain
mutterings, you know
with wiggling tails
rubbing other thoughts
akin to lighted flue
velvet can be painful
nightmares wide awake
new days bright agony
each steps on razor blade
sun shines in
sometimes
cleaning the cobwebs
planting smiles in her eyes.
running like mice
scrabbling around
hurting the brain
mutterings, you know
with wiggling tails
rubbing other thoughts
akin to lighted flue
velvet can be painful
nightmares wide awake
new days bright agony
each steps on razor blade
sun shines in
sometimes
cleaning the cobwebs
planting smiles in her eyes.
Published 17th Jun 2020
Author's Note
Is it dementia...a friend asked. I didn't know. She's young yet. She looked away, clutching her photo album.
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17th Jun 2020 8:18pm
Great Title Grace!!!
Very emotive Write...such things
must be truly terrifying, to lose memory and conscience thought
to break through the cob-webs must be a very special day.
Bittersweet Write!!!
Very emotive Write...such things
must be truly terrifying, to lose memory and conscience thought
to break through the cob-webs must be a very special day.
Bittersweet Write!!!
17th Jun 2020 11:12pm
It's periodical and most days she's just like anybody else. Very lovely, lively and outgoing. But sometimes she spaces out, forget where she is, who I am etc.
I'd like to think she goes to a good place then.
Thanks for reading me Soul. And the kind remarks.
I'd like to think she goes to a good place then.
Thanks for reading me Soul. And the kind remarks.
17th Jun 2020 9:30pm
The piece holds a lot of feeling, as well as this dystopian, dreamlike sense of abstraction that is interesting. I think it is well proportioned and rendered sugah.
17th Jun 2020 11:15pm
Hi Daniel. I'm actually shooting in the dark with these thoughts. I can't put myself in the subject's shoes but I think where darkness is concerned, I've been there, so I can relate.
Thank you so much for being with me and reading my humble writes. You're very much appreciated.
Thank you so much for being with me and reading my humble writes. You're very much appreciated.
17th Jun 2020 11:21pm
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18th Jun 2020 11:26am
Moving, as usual, you always display so much emotional compassion in every line you write. I love it.
18th Jun 2020 11:37am
I will never write as well as you do, anon shadow...but thank you for being with me.
30th Jun 2020 2:46pm
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30th Jul 2020 9:21am
Oh this is such a sad piece but so beautifully written. Takes me back to the final twilight years with my grandmother. Way to put it all out on paper! Such heart in this
30th Jul 2020 12:16pm
