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Hypocrite
I got a problem with this guy
he can rant and rave
like a crackhead caught
shoplifting
about capitalist this, and
society that.
Last time I saw him
he was watching formula1
on a big screen tv.
I got a problem with this guy.
he can rant and rave
like a crackhead caught
shoplifting
about capitalist this, and
society that.
Last time I saw him
he was watching formula1
on a big screen tv.
I got a problem with this guy.
Published 14th Jan 2012
| Edited 16th Jan 2012
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14th Jan 2012 7:18pm
WORD!!! simple n straight forward! (Caught)?? dig it BIG time! remember tho! this is next level writing! spelling counts. not enough to keep you off the podium but with excessive use of punctuation... it does take away for the over-all 8.64 of 10
15th Jan 2012 6:30pm
thanks im glad you like it. and I appreciate the advise, and the spirit it was given. but (always a but, only a little one tho) I know nothing of levels, my pen just prints what my brain tells it. I don't get much say. cheers tho :)
16th Jan 2012 11:04pm
