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Dilineation
fear me
in my whisper
as shadows breed where stillness lies
my nature's footing
wears a concrete soul
but when shed to tiptoe....
find demons curling in my flesh
find legion there
and their loyal stroking
swelling the curve
and up tip of my breast
my allure smooths
slinks in poseur
with an interlopers gloved hands
will writhe around you and reach
to pluck ennui like dark berry
and let the juices drip
over the plump turn of my smiling lip
in my whisper
as shadows breed where stillness lies
my nature's footing
wears a concrete soul
but when shed to tiptoe....
find demons curling in my flesh
find legion there
and their loyal stroking
swelling the curve
and up tip of my breast
my allure smooths
slinks in poseur
with an interlopers gloved hands
will writhe around you and reach
to pluck ennui like dark berry
and let the juices drip
over the plump turn of my smiling lip
Written by
calamitygin
(Jennifer Michael McCurry)
Published 5th Mar 2020
| Edited 6th Mar 2020
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Anonymous
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5th Mar 2020 5:40pm
Anonymous
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5th Mar 2020 5:46pm
lol, pardon
Mr. Blue....I make shit up asI go along.....every now and then its a problem
Mr. Blue....I make shit up asI go along.....every now and then its a problem
Anonymous
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Re. Dilineation
5th Mar 2020 5:44pm
Very NICE, Jennifer! Love the metaphors here! Very enticing imagery tastefully done.
In the spirit of honest critique, I suggest the following:
my nature[']s footing
wears a concrete soul
but when shed to [tip toe].... tiptoe* is one word
Elsewise, fantastic post!
In the spirit of honest critique, I suggest the following:
my nature[']s footing
wears a concrete soul
but when shed to [tip toe].... tiptoe* is one word
Elsewise, fantastic post!
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5th Mar 2020 5:48pm
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5th Mar 2020 6:35pm
Smooth very smooth delivery, I love the roll of the tongue here.
such a feat takes skill of the Writ and character!!!
such a feat takes skill of the Writ and character!!!
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5th Mar 2020 7:28pm
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5th Mar 2020 7:15pm
Very nice!! I dig this 🙌👏
Love the flow and the line breaks and the whole structure overall
Fantastic piece!!!
Love the flow and the line breaks and the whole structure overall
Fantastic piece!!!
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5th Mar 2020 7:29pm
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Anonymous
5th Mar 2020 7:32pm
Cooly done, like the imagery 👌
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5th Mar 2020 7:39pm
I have to RL any poem that has ennui in it ... *giggles* ... wonderful write my poetess ...
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5th Mar 2020 7:41pm
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6th Mar 2020 00:12am
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5th Mar 2020 8:35pm
Only as gifted a writer as you can turn apathy into erotica. Amazing what you've done here with dark words that reach out to the reader in Gothic splendor.
John
John
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6th Mar 2020 00:13am
Thank you for all of it Johm.
I owe a great deal to you as a writer....you inspire me
I owe a great deal to you as a writer....you inspire me
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Anonymous
6th Mar 2020 7:16am
I fucking love this, .. you must have the pattern seeking of words gift/curse too
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6th Mar 2020 7:20am
Never look a gift curse in the mouth .....instead let it fall and bleed into the page.
Thank you Dire
Thank you Dire
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Anonymous
6th Mar 2020 10:47am
all in
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