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through the fire
♪a rhymed, mirrored double octet♪
[Octet 1 is a tribute to the resilience of my friend, NewBeginnings.]
§
years
a g o
a green tree
in t h e forest
axes h u n t e d me
but my r e s i l i e n c e
the fellmen dreaded never
nor did i e m b e r in the fire
tho fames did ‘gainst my soul conspire
m y s p i r i t k n e w a r i v e r
whose s o l e benevolence
w a s a m y s t e r y
by whose bequest
my bruised knee
k n e w n o
f e a r s
§
ache
softens
in the ken
of my ageing
c o n s p i c u i t y
though at last i’m fallen
yet will i r e s i s t the urge
to expire when through the fire men
burnish me in stark derision
stronger still shall i emerge
though it is appalling
that the f i l i g r e e
of my r a g i n g
shall vile men’s
c o f f i n s
m a k e
§
© Copyright 2020 January 20
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
[Octet 1 is a tribute to the resilience of my friend, NewBeginnings.]
§
years
a g o
a green tree
in t h e forest
axes h u n t e d me
but my r e s i l i e n c e
the fellmen dreaded never
nor did i e m b e r in the fire
tho fames did ‘gainst my soul conspire
m y s p i r i t k n e w a r i v e r
whose s o l e benevolence
w a s a m y s t e r y
by whose bequest
my bruised knee
k n e w n o
f e a r s
§
ache
softens
in the ken
of my ageing
c o n s p i c u i t y
though at last i’m fallen
yet will i r e s i s t the urge
to expire when through the fire men
burnish me in stark derision
stronger still shall i emerge
though it is appalling
that the f i l i g r e e
of my r a g i n g
shall vile men’s
c o f f i n s
m a k e
§
© Copyright 2020 January 20
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
Published 20th Jan 2020
| Edited 7th Feb 2020
Author's Note
View visual version (copy/paste):
http://mydo.cx/ZjYxMGU4
When my pen picked me up to spill this message, I had poet NewBeginning in mind. If you're reading me, NewB, the opening octet is a special tribute to your resilience in the face of recent challenges. Perhaps, after retirement, you might wish to make the closing octet yours, as well.
http://mydo.cx/ZjYxMGU4
When my pen picked me up to spill this message, I had poet NewBeginning in mind. If you're reading me, NewB, the opening octet is a special tribute to your resilience in the face of recent challenges. Perhaps, after retirement, you might wish to make the closing octet yours, as well.
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Anonymous
21st Jan 2020 3:11am
Hey Cab.......what a beautiful tribute to an amazing soul........you’re a giving soul just as she is.......luv the grace of this ink.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
21st Jan 2020 7:09pm
Thank you, flower.
When I read NewB's story, I was moved to turn my pen to persistence mode; hence, octet 1 is my offering to such an indomitable spirit.
I have deliberately not assigned octet 2 because it seems more well-placed at the end of an older age.
Sincerely
cab
When I read NewB's story, I was moved to turn my pen to persistence mode; hence, octet 1 is my offering to such an indomitable spirit.
I have deliberately not assigned octet 2 because it seems more well-placed at the end of an older age.
Sincerely
cab
21st Jan 2020 4:51am
This form is really creative, I love that you gave a tree a voice through the elements and that of fire, its a visual stunner and the poem is great on its own also, great work :)
21st Jan 2020 7:11pm
A perceptive response and encouraging feedback, PR!
Thank you for so kindly understanding and applauding this effort.
Sincerely
cab
Thank you for so kindly understanding and applauding this effort.
Sincerely
cab
7th Feb 2020 3:27am
Thanks for that incredible tribute, cab. I'm truly honored you would think of me when writing. I'm glad to have impacted you in such a way... Thank you! I love the poem and its beautiful form :)
