Time is Ticking

I did notice that, and thought it was quite the coincidence my self. I really liked your poem - it goes hand in hand with mine, really! Makes you wonder of universal consciousness :)

ennui, entropy, decay
vs
joie de vivre, entropy decay
it's like most things... bahzaktly what you make ov it
even at rock bottom.
really dig this slice ov positivity

Thank you, shadoe!
Your comment is spot on...
I'm glad that you liked my writing here. Thank you for stopping by again :)

Poignant ... grabbing ... bravo sweet poet ...

Your kind words make me smile, LilDragonFly. Thank you! I appreciate your readership and your support :)

That's as real as it is.
Pounder on what was not or could have been instead of taking what is there in front of you to reach.

Thank you kindly for dropping in :)
I try to write from the heart...
This one was really about the imminence that I feel to accomplish things before I die.
I'm happy it resonated well with you!

I freaking love your take on this.  

Awesome spill NB  



Thank you for sharing your great works

I am so happy that you enjoyed it, Wh1sky! It's not a fun feeling, but it makes for great writing, eh? Lol

Thanks so much for your continued readership!! You're such a great supporter :)

Hmm... that is indeed a weird feeling, Mystical. Do you feel as if you are ageless? Lol. even if you are not timeless, your poetry will live on long after you. That is something I think about often, actually. If I've put anything into the world that will be remembered, I hope it to be my poetry... my message, and my heart.

I am sorry that you feel like your suffering will never end. Life can be cruel, but it can also be a very beautiful thing. Rest assured, you will die like the rest of us... but your spirit will live one :)

Yep. That sez it all.



hugs,
buddhakitty m

So glad that you felt my words, buddha. Your continued support is very important to me :)

truth spoken indeed my friend...respect

Only the truth, Stoney, only the truth! Thanks for the read and RL - to a message that can be universally relatable :)

FOSHO...RESPECT

As the norm,another great piece. Speaking upon that fact you are dead on.. as dreadful and crippling of a thought death can be at times,would we live the same lives we do now without the threat of it? Would I love to experience the mind of the first self aware "human" ..just to sorta dwell in such an unknown mindset of not even fathoming death. It makes you wonder. But alot us humans tend to live with a sense of urgency which you highlighted on...and somewhere there is a healthy medium in that. You know,the old not putting all your eggs(or years) in one basket haha. Anyways Cheers from devastatingly cold Buffalo NY ,stay warm friend!

Good to see you here again, Nick 😊

That is a good question. I don’t think I would like to see a world without the imminence of death, though. I feel without the threat of death, society would run rampant and reckless. Having that fear keeps people in check, I feel. On another note, it’s funny how much more impulsive and impassioned a person becomes in the face of death. People that find out that they are terminal oftentimes empty out savings accounts, making a bucket list of sorts to pursue long-lost dreams, connecting with people of the past, sometimes committing crimes, and oftentimes, having spiritual/religious reawakenings. Every now and again, if you think too hard on death, you will feel this imminence that I speak of…which is good sometimes, as it motivates us to better ourselves and live more exciting, and fulfilling lives, but it can also create a lot of undue stress if you focus too much on it.

Thanks so much for your thought-provoking comment. It’s always good to hear your feedback! Your continued readership and support are much appreciated, man!!

Sincerely,

-NewB

Absolutely NewB. Your reply was pretty parallel in the way i feel about death as well. It definitely has a way of keeping humanity in check haha.Talk to you later

Why thank you, Ru
That is a much more concise rendition of what I have said here... very true. Time never stops, and our life marches forward, whether we stop to sit it out for awhile or not is up to us.

Thank you for stopping by again - your support is deeply appreciated :)

That was really well said and the sad honest truth is I don't know the answer. Life is like a maze with many different exits. It is hard to find the right one for you. You search but sometimes you just can't find it. It is hard to know yourself and even harder to know what to do.

Well said, Cosiest. Life does indeed feel like a maze sometimes... we kind of blindly feel our way around trying to find the proper path. I don't think we are alone, though. A lot of us feel this way. A little lost sometimes, you know? We're all in this together, really :)

'empty endeavours' ...so conveying the message towards life love , the very essence....with that breathing ticking warmthly beats of heart n flaming soul... ever feels time is one notion of our measuring constants towards that One mystical infinity.. that shift from existential to essential ..all through the series of dreaded existential relay-journeys...so much more of core faiths it evokes..power write ..in all purposeful thoughts.. write on Poet :)  

Hey there, uma… it’s good to see you here!
The empty pleasures/endeavors part is actually a return to another poem of mine:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/338496-empty-pleasures/

Thank you for your beautifully poetic response… life is a journey, alright! On this planet, our days are numbered, so let us make the most of them 😊

Your readership is much appreciated. I see you've deactivated your profile for now... hope that this is nothing permanent, as your presence is pleasant!

Yes . . . I think this is relevant to current global events.  I also think that a low percentage of people have noticed the events and live in ignorant bliss of what it is leading to.  I only wish you work could be seen by more eyes.

Time is the utmost important commodity we live.
Profound response for you my dear. I agree with Tim. More eyes need to read your words.

The last line “... so much better” is vague and simple, felt slightly weak, although I’m hard pressed to think of an alternative.

Perhaps omit “it’s” on the second line, to increase the tension and element of suspense.

Also, perhaps omit the leading „and” and „as” on lines six and seven.

Perhaps a new stanza after line seven.

Apologies for My comment being brief and stilted - I am typing this on a bus

Opening with a question is good technique. Engages critical thinking, direct address, establishes rapport with the reader. The fly and mosquito metaphors are apt. Wise words in your close, well rendered. Nice work NB.

A thought flowing provoking read, all too true! Thanks NB.