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This is my brain on senryu II
I have a fever
as yet unbroken for days
as it ruminates
I hear Baudelaire
in my earbuds as I write
something about death
it keeps me centered—
death does, not writing of it,
and bottled water
and did I mention
I haven’t had solid food
for over ten days
reaching a Zen state
not yet near to Nirvana
but that’s only me
I am voracious
I’m dying for a burger
but I don’t eat meat
I could eat a yak
really? no I don’t think so
but a pastry yes
I’m always sleepy
without eating for so long
but I’m sick you see
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 18th Dec 2019
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Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 5:39am
This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 4:59am
Ha! This is your brain on music! (I have the book right here right now. Bought it in 2008.)
The gaps left by Daniel Levitin certainly find voice here.
The childlike innocence of the tri-linear flow gives it the feel of a scherzo.
I'm wondering whether dying for the burger is the fever-begetting Zen state of the persona so that the whole has become a vicious circle (?).
Sincerely
cab
The gaps left by Daniel Levitin certainly find voice here.
The childlike innocence of the tri-linear flow gives it the feel of a scherzo.
I'm wondering whether dying for the burger is the fever-begetting Zen state of the persona so that the whole has become a vicious circle (?).
Sincerely
cab
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Re: This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 7:07am
Dear Cab...
If I wasn’t feeling all I’ve described in my piece, I’d say much more than I’m about to...
that I /love/ every single word of your wonderful comment, and I thank you!
Now if someone would please resuscitate me.
If I wasn’t feeling all I’ve described in my piece, I’d say much more than I’m about to...
that I /love/ every single word of your wonderful comment, and I thank you!
Now if someone would please resuscitate me.
Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 5:38am
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18th Dec 2019 5:41am
Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 5:43am
Of course I do :)
No questions, I just thought it was an interesting scene...
No questions, I just thought it was an interesting scene...
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Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 6:43am
Aahhh, okay, gotcha.👍
And thank you. You know, there’s a #1 of this, too. I might make this a series.🤒
And thank you. You know, there’s a #1 of this, too. I might make this a series.🤒
Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 6:32am
Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
What is what?
You mean “senryu”? Just tap on the hashtag #senryu where I have the themes listed... it will take you to a description of what it’s about.👩🏻🎓
You mean “senryu”? Just tap on the hashtag #senryu where I have the themes listed... it will take you to a description of what it’s about.👩🏻🎓
Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 10:37am
wonders what yak tastes like and whether les fleurs du mal would be the better for their inclusion
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Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 7:18pm
Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 12:03pm
very intresting piece as the mind is so powerful with inner strenght nicely done poetess..respect
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Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 7:25pm
Thank you, Stoney, and yes - the mind (even under great duress) can be a strong element to pull one through. I pray I can outlast what this is I’ve been enduring.
Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
20th Dec 2019 1:20pm
like all things in life it shall pass with time for you are a strong minded woman who has endure so much in life and the greatest thing is that you are a surviver of all that you had to face head on and still remain standing tall fighting like the warrior that you have become..respect poetess
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20th Dec 2019 6:55pm
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22nd Dec 2019 11:41am
i see in others what they dont see as others see in me that which i dont see only if i look deep within me as in an exchange of visions of potential with strenght and courage plus knowledge and wisdom...respect poetess
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Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 7:34pm
Je ferai de mon mieux ma belle fille tigre.
And I can’t thank you enough for your dear words of comfort & support.💌
🐾
And I can’t thank you enough for your dear words of comfort & support.💌
🐾
Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 2:25pm
Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 7:43pm
Thank you, dear Kimmy... I believe you’re right. And I really appreciate the note.🙏🏻
Jadey🐾
Jadey🐾
Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 7:46pm
Hi Jade ... just dropped by to embarrass you with praise ... but I'll spare you as much as possible by keeping it short. As you know, I really like your discipline of form ... the chick who never hits a bum note. All the best ...
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18th Dec 2019 7:53pm
Re. This is my brain on senryu II
18th Dec 2019 11:31pm
Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
Pristine... oh gosh, thank you, Tomcat. I’m so glad I got to read it to you.🙏🏻
Tiger🐾💌
Tiger🐾💌
Re. This is my brain on senryu II
19th Dec 2019 1:09am
I smiled when you mentioned Charles as sometimes I'll listen to his works too. It felt as if in the hunger/fast you've reached Enlightenment...
Well done Ms. Jade.
Well done Ms. Jade.
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Aaww thank you, Wally, so we have something in common. Me, enlightened? I’d have to stay unwell and keep starving for another ten+ days to begin that kind of mental uplift, wearing bed sheets as clothing.
Re. This is my brain on senryu II
20th Dec 2019 00:22am
Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
20th Dec 2019 00:35am
Why thank you, Marks, that’s kind of you.
Hope you’re Holidays are happy.🎄
Hope you’re Holidays are happy.🎄
Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
20th Dec 2019 5:47pm
You're welcome, Jade-Pandora
(I'm fine ...🎄... )
... ...
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
(I'm fine ...🎄... )
... ...
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
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Re. This is my brain on senryu II
20th Dec 2019 4:41pm
Sending you healing energy. 💖💕✨
I went twelve days on no food or sleep, New Years of 2012. I had a vision at the end, and only then did I realize it was an ordeal of cleansing. Also lost 15lbs, which is a nice plus. Seriously, rest up and get well soon sugah. There is admirable elegance to this write. I love how an artist turns to ennui, ugliness and pandemonium of life into a keen linear razor.
I went twelve days on no food or sleep, New Years of 2012. I had a vision at the end, and only then did I realize it was an ordeal of cleansing. Also lost 15lbs, which is a nice plus. Seriously, rest up and get well soon sugah. There is admirable elegance to this write. I love how an artist turns to ennui, ugliness and pandemonium of life into a keen linear razor.
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Re: Re. This is my brain on senryu II
20th Dec 2019 7:20pm
I used to do some serious fasting back in the day, and not only did I feel remarkable, I didn’t want to stop.
But as a type 2 diabetic, the things I need the most is plenty of rest & noutrition (along with meds & insulin).
This>> ”I love how an artist turns to ennui, ugliness and pandemonium of life into a keen linear razor.”
Somehow, I’m able to still write verse with clarity, vision & purpose. This part of my brain will probably be the last to go.
Thank you for your exquisite words, always.
But as a type 2 diabetic, the things I need the most is plenty of rest & noutrition (along with meds & insulin).
This>> ”I love how an artist turns to ennui, ugliness and pandemonium of life into a keen linear razor.”
Somehow, I’m able to still write verse with clarity, vision & purpose. This part of my brain will probably be the last to go.
Thank you for your exquisite words, always.