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The Elements Bring Out The Magic I Seek
( Tanka )
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Mother driftwood sighs—
shaped by Nature’s fickle storm,
yet her insistence
the old Sage whispers to me
as I come to pay respects
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the honor embraced,
I feel the tree within her
alive, evoking—
the gulls soar in with each rush
as she hears my ocean breath
〰️🐚〰️
〰️🐚〰️
Mother driftwood sighs—
shaped by Nature’s fickle storm,
yet her insistence
the old Sage whispers to me
as I come to pay respects
〰️🐚〰️
the honor embraced,
I feel the tree within her
alive, evoking—
the gulls soar in with each rush
as she hears my ocean breath
〰️🐚〰️
Published 17th Nov 2019
| Edited 18th Nov 2019
Author's Note
Image: sculpture by Debra Bernier
For AMElia554’s “Re-Sculpturing, the art of driftwood”.
For AMElia554’s “Re-Sculpturing, the art of driftwood”.
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17th Nov 2019 10:41pm
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18th Nov 2019 4:05am
What an amazing sculpture, it looks like she is listening to the ocean within the tree, your poem brings the two worlds together, sea and earth as sisters..
18th Nov 2019 5:52am
Thank you so much.
Yes, exactly, dear sister...
listening, as we do when we find a nautilus on the beach and hold it to our ear.🐚
Yes, exactly, dear sister...
listening, as we do when we find a nautilus on the beach and hold it to our ear.🐚
18th Nov 2019 10:58am
Beautiful Expression (not to mention Gorgeous display)
I Love Tanka...I never mess with forms much anymore...I should-this is Greatness Jade-The emotive is forefront...I think thats key for this comp.
Good luck in the comp-Pen On!!!
I Love Tanka...I never mess with forms much anymore...I should-this is Greatness Jade-The emotive is forefront...I think thats key for this comp.
Good luck in the comp-Pen On!!!
18th Nov 2019 11:09am
Dear soul man... it’s you who planted the seed in my brain with your personal entry... How it came to be, for I will have been an active haijin for 12 years as of January 2020. Yet the form of this piece did not reveal itself until It was written halfway.
All of my best to you for the challenge.
Jade🐚
All of my best to you for the challenge.
Jade🐚
18th Nov 2019 11:12am
active haijin for 12 years -Thats Quite Incredible!!!
it’s you who planted the seed in my brain -careful of the root-rot
:)
Such Beautiful Work Jade-It breathes peace
it’s you who planted the seed in my brain -careful of the root-rot
:)
Such Beautiful Work Jade-It breathes peace
18th Nov 2019 11:13pm
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20th Nov 2019 1:44am
Thank you, Daniel, for your kind appreciation, I hope all is going well for you.
16th Dec 2019 6:00pm
My apologies, Kathy, for your comment falling thru’ a crack.🤭
And a dear comment it is, as always.
I really aporeciate how much you enjoyed my effort; you know my love of the Japanese forms, and anything to do with the sea.
Happy Holidays to you.🐾🎄
And a dear comment it is, as always.
I really aporeciate how much you enjoyed my effort; you know my love of the Japanese forms, and anything to do with the sea.
Happy Holidays to you.🐾🎄
