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On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
Every moment marks a shaded encounter
a palpitation sweating in the wings
forgetting lines I blabber breathless banter
whilst adults try to figure serious things
and as the pen rolls out the line with caution
the muse looks on and wonders if she shall
decide to gift the scene with inspiration
or let the poet flounder, feeling small
the one thing learned from years of tortured writing
is not to push too hard, or else the muse
will say “his mind is closed, I will not fight him
he’s left no room, there’s nothing I can do”
and every day I’m challenged to be humble
I wake up in the morning - I’m still breathing
which happens by itself - I cannot grumble
as muses and their kind refuse to leave me
the fire-season’s over in our region
I’ve filled the wood-store ready for the winter
another year is ambling to completion
and poems wait with patience to be written.
a palpitation sweating in the wings
forgetting lines I blabber breathless banter
whilst adults try to figure serious things
and as the pen rolls out the line with caution
the muse looks on and wonders if she shall
decide to gift the scene with inspiration
or let the poet flounder, feeling small
the one thing learned from years of tortured writing
is not to push too hard, or else the muse
will say “his mind is closed, I will not fight him
he’s left no room, there’s nothing I can do”
and every day I’m challenged to be humble
I wake up in the morning - I’m still breathing
which happens by itself - I cannot grumble
as muses and their kind refuse to leave me
the fire-season’s over in our region
I’ve filled the wood-store ready for the winter
another year is ambling to completion
and poems wait with patience to be written.
Written by
Josh
(Joshua Bond)
Published 9th Nov 2019
| Edited 9th Mar 2024
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Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
9th Nov 2019 10:51pm
Loved this -particularly the part about the poet's mind being closed, leaving no room for something new. It embodies a Daoist view of needing to empty before being refilled. We are not in control of the poem - and if we think we are, then it's only ego that will shine through - not the truth of the Muse.
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11th Nov 2019 8:33pm
Yes thank you - that's so true - it seems there is so much more of 'life' that would flow through us, if only we would stop getting in the way. And honoured by the RL again too.
Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
9th Nov 2019 11:35pm
This is a beautifully, wonderful introspective ... this particular part struck me ...
"the one thing learned from years of tortured writing
is not to push too hard, or else the muse
will say “his mind is closed, I will not fight him"
so much truth in those words ...
"..and poems wait with patience to be written"
Greatly enjoyed your reading as well ...
"the one thing learned from years of tortured writing
is not to push too hard, or else the muse
will say “his mind is closed, I will not fight him"
so much truth in those words ...
"..and poems wait with patience to be written"
Greatly enjoyed your reading as well ...
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Re: Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
11th Nov 2019 8:35pm
Thank you Jemac, and for the RL. So glad you liked it. Once the wood burner(s) have to be lit, it kind of takes you into a different mind-space with the longer periods of seasonal darkness.
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11th Nov 2019 10:34pm
Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
10th Nov 2019 2:17am
The muse can be a real bitch sometimes. Excellent write Josh.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
11th Nov 2019 8:36pm
Thank you BK - it's a bit of a tight-rope thing - balance, concentration and pushing on to the other side - but not too hard.
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Re: Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
11th Nov 2019 8:40pm
Thank you crystalcolumz - glad you liked the expression of an irritating topic.
"There are times when I know something inside wants out,"
... my take on this comes from a 'logon-saying' from the Gospel of Thomas, a saying that both simultaneously scares and encourages me. "If you bring forth that which is within you, it will give you life. If you do not bring forth that which is within you, it will kill you". Life takes no prisoners I guess :))
"There are times when I know something inside wants out,"
... my take on this comes from a 'logon-saying' from the Gospel of Thomas, a saying that both simultaneously scares and encourages me. "If you bring forth that which is within you, it will give you life. If you do not bring forth that which is within you, it will kill you". Life takes no prisoners I guess :))
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Re: Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
11th Nov 2019 8:44pm
Hi sunsettown; thank you for the read, and the RL. Glad you enjoyed it. I'm a believer that poetry is essentially an emotional experience, (rather than an intellectual exercise), and it is imagery that mainly stimulates it - so it's nice to get deed-back that you felt both those 'measures' were fulfilled. Cheers, Josh.
Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
10th Nov 2019 6:25pm
Beautiful tone and measured meter, nice syllabic harmony to the message. Great work. Has the kind of earthy warmth of Bobby Frost. 🙏🏻
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Re: Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
11th Nov 2019 8:47pm
Thank you Daniel - "earthy warmth of Bobby Frost" - hmmm, all my reading of him must be rubbing off on me :))
Really nice to hear you appreciated the 'poetics' of it too.
Really nice to hear you appreciated the 'poetics' of it too.
Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
10th Nov 2019 9:44pm
Ah Josh...you have captured the Artist's dilemma my friend...a female friend once told me that her muse was like her clitoris...seemed to move around a bit and sometimes simply refused to be stimulated at all...mine is like that quite often. Great ink man.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
11th Nov 2019 8:49pm
Thank you Harry for a different angle on things :)) and for the RL. It's a tricky balance. Maybe it's like Picasso said: "inspiration comes but it must find you at your desk/easel".
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11th Nov 2019 9:04pm
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Re: Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
11th Nov 2019 8:51pm
Thank you Rose - yes, you're right about how the change to Autumn affects the way we think - we go more reflective as you say, more "inner" focussed, like Nature herself I guess, waiting for Spring. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Anonymous
11th Nov 2019 12:31pm
And when you get snowed in up to your neck, you have nothing but time on your hands, so the creative struggle is amplified. Solid write that flows like as usual - like skiing downhill, Josh.

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Re: Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
11th Nov 2019 8:54pm
No snow here (but plenty of rain, thankfully). Glad you liked the downhill flow - had to climb the mountain first, though :))
Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
11th Nov 2019 3:51pm
It truly is a relationship between the writer and the muse.
Excellent piece Josh. Good luck in the comp.
Excellent piece Josh. Good luck in the comp.
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Re: Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
11th Nov 2019 8:57pm
Thank you Wally, and for the RL (again, I'm honoured). The writer-muse relationship is tricky, sometimes evanescent, but definitely real. One notices it most by absence :))
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Anonymous
2nd Dec 2019 6:22pm
Hey Josh.......outstanding ink........listening to your voice made it even better........such a calming feeling this gave me........enjoyed very much.......purple luv & hugs xo :)

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Re: Re. On Writing A Poem During An Autumnal Evening
2nd Dec 2019 6:24pm
Thank you flowergirl - really glad you liked it - and its 'calming' effect.
Cheers, Josh.
Cheers, Josh.
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17th Aug 2020 9:27pm
Hello karterharris. Thank you for commenting; glad you like it. Welcome, and I hope you enjoy browsing through DUP. All the best, Josh.