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The Outline of My Lover
I used to dream in black and white but now I dream in color
It used to be that every cloud hid it's silver lining behind shadows
But now even the darkest of clouds expose the outline of my lover
While pain has died in a silver noose that dangles from my gallows
I have waited all my life for a light to shine where none had ever shown
To warm my heart by a fireplace glowing from the embers of my soul
They'd grown so cold I was sure that I had not learned all that I've known
That snow flakes on my heart concealed nothing more than an empty hole
I was lonely in ways that fooled the fools who never knew me
And the ones who did could not see the cloud that had no lining
For hidden inside me was a man who could not set the darkness free
Embracing emptiness to form delusion's fog of grand designing
At first you tried to shatter myths I had molded into gods
Who would not show the silver that could expose you as my other
Till darkness painted a rainbow from gold blinding my demigods
In lonely times I dreamt in black and white but now I dream in color
It used to be that every cloud hid it's silver lining behind shadows
But now even the darkest of clouds expose the outline of my lover
While pain has died in a silver noose that dangles from my gallows
I have waited all my life for a light to shine where none had ever shown
To warm my heart by a fireplace glowing from the embers of my soul
They'd grown so cold I was sure that I had not learned all that I've known
That snow flakes on my heart concealed nothing more than an empty hole
I was lonely in ways that fooled the fools who never knew me
And the ones who did could not see the cloud that had no lining
For hidden inside me was a man who could not set the darkness free
Embracing emptiness to form delusion's fog of grand designing
At first you tried to shatter myths I had molded into gods
Who would not show the silver that could expose you as my other
Till darkness painted a rainbow from gold blinding my demigods
In lonely times I dreamt in black and white but now I dream in color
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Loneliness...
24th Dec 2011 8:18am
is like a piece of yesterday's newspaper blown by the wind on an empty sidewalk. As usual Poetryman..you are a poet.
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re: Loneliness...
24th Dec 2011 5:40pm
well after 30 years of writing it, I had better be a poet... Thanks for commenting Gace! jj
re: re: Loneliness...
24th Dec 2011 10:42pm
true !!
24th Dec 2011 1:09pm
*I was lonely in ways that fooled the fools who never knew me *--Ugh!! i know ....
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re: true !!
24th Dec 2011 5:42pm
Thank you for commenting Rakhi! Always makes me feel good to know others can relate. jj
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re: The Outline of My Lover
24th Dec 2011 9:45pm
re: Whoa!
5th Jan 2012 7:01am
First time
5th Jan 2012 1:57pm
Poetry man this is my first time visiting you.
I must say lines 9-12 hit home for me PERFECTLY.
Thanks for sharing such a beautiful piece with me.
Cheers.
I must say lines 9-12 hit home for me PERFECTLY.
Thanks for sharing such a beautiful piece with me.
Cheers.
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re: First time
5th Jan 2012 10:27pm
Kym, thank you for commenting. I am always glad to hear when people can relate to something I write, makes me feel not so alone in the world. And thanks for the compliment on the poem, the muse is taking a bow backstage. jj
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Anonymous
6th Jan 2012 2:57am
captured from the very first line!enjoyed Poetryman!
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6th Jan 2012 3:45am
JJ
6th Jan 2012 8:48am
so very beautiful this poem..it touched my heart..i'm glad to hear you dream in color now :) this was so masterfully crafted and as always from your soul..peace Crim
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re: JJ
6th Jan 2012 9:41am
Relating
10th Jan 2012 00:28am
I got chills reading this because it totally relates to a time in my life when loneliness was all around me it was consuming me.
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re: Relating
10th Jan 2012 1:15am
Thanks for commenting Kayla. Though it's never fun to experience loneliness, it is always good to know our shared experiences can produce feelings that lift us up as far as we were lowered by the others. We are never alone in our loneliness.
Wow!
Anonymous
16th Jan 2012 1:40am
You are right on with this. People do not take the time to know someone on the inside. They miss so much only looking on the outside. "Look in between the lines and the writen words. You might just see someones heart and soul". That will be my next poem I post. I know what loneliness is about, PM me if you need to talk. I more than understand. Take care, Gail
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re: Wow!
16th Jan 2012 6:46am
Thank you for commenting Gail, you are a generous soul! I am pleased you like it and understand. jj
Great piece Glad I read
16th Jan 2012 9:37pm
I was lonely in ways that fooled the fools who never knew me
This line is magic
it speaks to a host of your inner beings
This line is magic
it speaks to a host of your inner beings
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re: Great piece Glad I read
17th Jan 2012 00:22am
Indeed it does. and thank you for commenting Ghostgyrl. Welcome to DU Poetry... jj
Re: The Outline of My Lover
22nd Jul 2012 7:48pm
A masterpiece. The tone vibes such benevolence. It reminds me of my first love, the words you've emoted were similar to his. The feeling of love is divine, and the character it reveals is just as pure and delightful.
Great read
Great read
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22nd Jul 2012 8:41pm