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noth/ing/ness.....
i'm bound
to a perpetual
axis of darkness
my emotions
- soaked in
putrid rains
taut strings
laced 'round
my corseted heart
cumbered breaths
verging on
as/phyx/i/a/tion
my mind
screaming
into
a
vortex
blues gazing
upon galaxies
of dull obsidian
surrendering
to the evil
synergy
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*
*
of
noth/ing/ness
Written by
PandoraUnleashed
Published 19th Oct 2019
| Edited 6th Jul 2020
Author's Note
I just told Brenda & Willow I didn't want to write anymore.....and then it comes...
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19th Oct 2019 4:40am
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19th Oct 2019 6:02am
Thank you so very much for the detailed thoughts. I'm trying hard to let go of the darkness within & I'm finding, I can only manage it with some sort of format. Thank you for the appreciation of my emphasis and placing me upon your virtual bookshelf. 🙏
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19th Oct 2019 5:20am
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19th Oct 2019 6:06am
Omgoodness, what a wonderful comment! He's a favorite of mine, more so, because he was a rebellious writer & that's my creed. Thank you for visiting my page. I'll put you on my list to follow & come paying you respect sometime soon!
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19th Oct 2019 3:42pm
You are welcome. I am happy to have you visit my page, and only "pay" me what I earn.
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20th Oct 2019 00:46am
I can't lie when it comes to writing. Praise goes where it is deserved. I'll come your way again soon!
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19th Oct 2019 5:37am
Your word choice is soo awesome and makes the muse so much more admirable . Dark feel and poignancy in all eloquence. Kudos for the poetry!
Pls pleez do comment/ write down your thoughts about and under my newest poem too. Without such thought exchange interaction we would be in monologue merely.
Pls pleez do comment/ write down your thoughts about and under my newest poem too. Without such thought exchange interaction we would be in monologue merely.
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19th Oct 2019 6:13am
Welcome to my page, new friend! I'll absolutely read your work, and agree that's how we thrive. I just hit follow & will be your way soon.
Thanks for such the lovely comment love, Zaynab! My muse has been stubborn with poetry & I'm tired of prose. It seems we only agree when I play with formats. I appreciate your recognition of my work & cheering me on!
Thanks for such the lovely comment love, Zaynab! My muse has been stubborn with poetry & I'm tired of prose. It seems we only agree when I play with formats. I appreciate your recognition of my work & cheering me on!
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19th Oct 2019 5:43am
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19th Oct 2019 6:18am
And I love me some, Noire!! We're soul sisters and your work always astonishes me beyond words. I wish you'd open up your commentary so I could feed your ego to the moon & back, but I understand why many don't. Regardless, I've yet to resist placing a piece of yours on my virtual bookshelf since finding you! Thank you, love..❤...Pandy hugs!
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19th Oct 2019 7:15am
Your nothingness
is exquisite
love the structure to this spill, as well -- Wow!
is exquisite
love the structure to this spill, as well -- Wow!
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20th Oct 2019 00:38am
My nothingness appreciates your nothingness, Tallen. We're two introverted enpaths in this thing together! Thank you for your humbling words & add. Big Pandy hugs.. I'm pretty sure it's a tough time over on your side right now. Love & light comes too!
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19th Oct 2019 7:58am
Difficult to say something but it is remarkable it came after what seems to have been a block. It seems something gave you a second wind. Perhaps lesson is 'never say never' - sometimes the creative force (I like to call it God) can surprise us! (The picture, raised in my mind just now, this is rain after a drought, we welcome it however imperfect or odd the shower.)
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20th Oct 2019 00:44am
Oh, I'm a firm believer in God's mysterious ways! I've had somewhat of a block, but me thinks the muse wants to write more than trumped up erotic pieces. I have been pretty disappointed in the changes here, so much drama where I never expected it, and feeling as if my words have led me to some depressing places.
Funny thing, is I saw something so similar in that picture..as if either drowning or finding renewal...
Funny thing, is I saw something so similar in that picture..as if either drowning or finding renewal...
Re. noth/ing/ness.....
19th Oct 2019 11:33am
Never say never ... Creativity flows of it's own will ... We just facilitate it's new forms filtered through our individual souls ... Bless and love ...
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20th Oct 2019 00:49am
This is so very true. I've just been so depressed over the state of our family here. We're so broken, everybody is disappearing & feelings regarding negative aspects of my words. Not so much writers block, although I think the muse is tired of erotica..we've been chatting.;)
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20th Oct 2019 2:59am
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20th Oct 2019 00:53am
It's always so pleasant to see you show up with your love & light, Melia. Thanks for the humbling support & praise!🌷🙏🍃
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19th Oct 2019 1:52pm
Strange how that can happen. The somber tones hit hard though strung together in a unique beauty. Looks like the muse might not let you.
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20th Oct 2019 1:01am
Oh, T...so many things have bothered me. You know the love I have for this place & the foundation just seems to be crumbling all around us. I thought this was a place of respite. Crims in a big funk too, bless her heart, she feels she isn't doing enough. Plus I think my muse is wanting to make a change..a switch from so much baseless sexual stuff & I've just been ignoring her. It actually feels good to bleed & not be scared of it anymore...
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20th Oct 2019 2:03am
I've definitely felt the shift here. It's even been a push for me this past week. It's just been so chaotic, and at times, I'm forcing myself to right to not implode under the invisibility of waking life. The cycle of work and chores does little for inspiration. It may be strange to admit, but I find influence here and when others go silent, it can be hard to forge ahead. But despite where the writes lead you, try to find some peace in that at least. And there is no harm in exploring these exact thoughts.
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20th Oct 2019 3:29am
It's not strange at all to gain inspiration from those around us. Substance in others give us strength & their support gives us a voice. I know what you mean about getting overwhelmed. I don't even work or have kids & my followings often drain me, but I like picking others up..
...then I just totally go off radar for 3 or 4 days.👀
...then I just totally go off radar for 3 or 4 days.👀
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20th Oct 2019 3:39am
Sometimes it's good to get off the radar and recharge. At least, you come back.
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19th Oct 2019 3:36pm
I have those thoughts a lot. I just want to stop writing. I did once. For five long years. I didnt write a single thing. I sometimes worry if weeks go by and nothing comes that I will enter that nothing realm again. But I dont think we will ever put the pen down forever. Your strike through of the word SILENCING is very loud. Listen to your heart ❤️
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20th Oct 2019 1:05am
I've been in that same state, it was four years of writer's block for me. I never have been able to snatch the story form back, but damn did it feel good to get that spark!
This writing was pretty much about my life & feelings. The authors not was just that..an extra little message. Thank you for the support & praise, beautiful.💕
This writing was pretty much about my life & feelings. The authors not was just that..an extra little message. Thank you for the support & praise, beautiful.💕
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19th Oct 2019 4:06pm
Pandy, I too love the style of the this piece...the long pauses between short, melancholy stanzas seeming to cry for rescue but diminished to fractured whispers.
As you can see by this comment and the ones above, we've assembled quite a rescue party. You need to write we need to read what you write. In a short time you've made an enormous impact on the family...just think how much good you can do in years to come. Brava! 💕🙏😊
As you can see by this comment and the ones above, we've assembled quite a rescue party. You need to write we need to read what you write. In a short time you've made an enormous impact on the family...just think how much good you can do in years to come. Brava! 💕🙏😊
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20th Oct 2019 3:37am
Ahhh, *teary eyes*
... " In a short time you've made an enormous impact on the family...just think how much good you can do in years to come. Brava! "
I LOVE this place so damn much & knowing my voice & words matter make me feel incredibly happy. Thank you for such support since the early days , when I looked at your haikus & senryu's, thinking wtf are these?!? 😅 I was clueless about poetry or writing period. I'm glad you embraced this hot mess , only two people here have abandoned me. I'm blessed to know you.....
...... & your metaphors. 🔥
... " In a short time you've made an enormous impact on the family...just think how much good you can do in years to come. Brava! "
I LOVE this place so damn much & knowing my voice & words matter make me feel incredibly happy. Thank you for such support since the early days , when I looked at your haikus & senryu's, thinking wtf are these?!? 😅 I was clueless about poetry or writing period. I'm glad you embraced this hot mess , only two people here have abandoned me. I'm blessed to know you.....
...... & your metaphors. 🔥
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I didn't know wtf a Senryu was either 😁 A German, who left us, taught me. So don't feel clueless at all. This is uncharted territory for most of us Isn't it cool how global DUP is. I truly benefit from international voices and cultures...I think this site is a foreshadowing of this world will be. Yes, the site has changed but it's still the best place to publish our multi-genre poetry. 🌷😁🙏
BTW: The image is awesome...dare I say sexy 😌
BTW: The image is awesome...dare I say sexy 😌
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20th Oct 2019 3:04pm
I've been holding on to that image for a while now, it was faceted to me; representing either, a state of floating on the clouds of ecstasy and passion or being completely washed out and screaming, I'm overwhelmed.
So much so this ------- "Yes, the site has changed but it's still the best place to publish our multi-genre poetry. "
All other sites are only inclusive if your a well seasoned, top notch poet. Although I've seen some like me, "hello, I'm over here with a voice too, ya know ". I nearly left this place in the beginning because it seemed so dead, so empty. But thank the heavens , i found my family. Although a small one, but one I wouldn't trade for the word!
Ah geez, if ever we met, we would babble on for hours. LOL.. I enjoy our banter & sharing likeness, so I just keep on typing away. Enjoy your Sunday, I'm gonna try to put my mind into some " sensuality under the cosmos " state. ...may my endeavors be successful so we can heat up the page.😏🔥
So much so this ------- "Yes, the site has changed but it's still the best place to publish our multi-genre poetry. "
All other sites are only inclusive if your a well seasoned, top notch poet. Although I've seen some like me, "hello, I'm over here with a voice too, ya know ". I nearly left this place in the beginning because it seemed so dead, so empty. But thank the heavens , i found my family. Although a small one, but one I wouldn't trade for the word!
Ah geez, if ever we met, we would babble on for hours. LOL.. I enjoy our banter & sharing likeness, so I just keep on typing away. Enjoy your Sunday, I'm gonna try to put my mind into some " sensuality under the cosmos " state. ...may my endeavors be successful so we can heat up the page.😏🔥
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20th Oct 2019 9:54pm
You're right about the it is multi faceted. I see it as weathering the storm, or the Goddess of the heaven's, or a vivid sensual cloud formation... whereas sometimes we see a horse, bird, whateve. This time, laying on my back on the grass or riding to work in the bus, I see a voluptuous, curvy vision searching for me 😁💋
"Heating up the page" made me tingle and grow a bit 😊
"Heating up the page" made me tingle and grow a bit 😊
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Re. noth/ing/ness.....
19th Oct 2019 7:43pm
Wow I felt this deeply totally can relate
"i'm bound
to a perpetual
axis of darkness
my emotions
- soaked in
putrid rains"
Yea ive been feeling this way on and off for the past few years but like you said in this comment ". I'm trying hard to let go of the darkness within" as am I and it's not always easy but we definitely must try
Excellent piece pandy! Love this
"i'm bound
to a perpetual
axis of darkness
my emotions
- soaked in
putrid rains"
Yea ive been feeling this way on and off for the past few years but like you said in this comment ". I'm trying hard to let go of the darkness within" as am I and it's not always easy but we definitely must try
Excellent piece pandy! Love this
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20th Oct 2019 3:43am
Thank you, Hunter. I'm touched you could relate to it. I think we're all a bit fucked up around the edges here, but that's why we're the most beautiful writing family/community. I know my presence has been intermittent, but I'm pretty sure I noticed a lapse in your activity, if not a closed account at once? Regardless, I'm happy to have you here, and reaching out to the cosmos for strength... surely, there's green stuff somewhere in this mix too.😄...Pandy hugs,!
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20th Oct 2019 2:05pm
No prob and yes most definitely I know I am and yes we are!! Yes I've not been as active as I'd like to be probably for the past 6 months at least, went through some form of writers block and just couldn't find the energy/time and didn't feel to interested in what I was writing or to read the good shit here at the du but I'm feeling better these days and finding time to read more and write more shit
And ohhhyeeee you know the greens always in the mix hahaha 😂
And ohhhyeeee you know the greens always in the mix hahaha 😂
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19th Oct 2019 11:30pm
what i read is of sad thoughts that go so very deep
stay strong it is just words that carrie some meaning that is not seen
stay strong it is just words that carrie some meaning that is not seen
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20th Oct 2019 3:47am
Thank you for always reaching out. You've NEVER let me down, in that sense. I appreciate you beyond words, D. I've been the bad friend for not paying you the same attention to your health & soul.. forgive me..you're in my thoughts & prayers! 🙏❤
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20th Oct 2019 1:33pm
you are fine just be yourself as you have a great gift that is who you are
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Anonymous
20th Oct 2019 2:22pm
Girl, you know how I've struggled myself lately. And I've come to the conclusion that when our quills are not moving it means we're healing. The muse licking open wounds. Best to let it rest and not stress on it. And when you least expect, it bubbles back to life. You've just proven my theory here with this beauty. Double hugs & snuggles...with an extra squeeze
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22nd Oct 2019 00:16am
Thank you for the assessment & reassurance. When I wrote this, it came from feeling the inner void vs written one, so I was surprised it bubbled up. I've had a talk with the muse & now have something very satirical to write that she inspired. 👌🙏💌
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20th Oct 2019 8:02pm
A voice from the dark forest asks this from me....
How many wild strawberries grow in your salt sea
I answer thus, with a tear in my eye...
How many ships sink in the forest?
Never give up your passion for words.
How many wild strawberries grow in your salt sea
I answer thus, with a tear in my eye...
How many ships sink in the forest?
Never give up your passion for words.
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22nd Oct 2019 00:23am
This comment as precious, David. In honor of our dearest HF that left us, I'll use his phrase.." your poetry doesn't even stop at the comment box". I'm in awe of the poetry you bestowed on me, but I'm not surprised; it's in your soul & bones.;)
I was honestly in a fuck life state vs fuck writing, so to have it choke me as I wrote it out was a surprise. I was pretty down about the Underground so thought, why do it?! The muse let me have it & I now know the path to follow. 🙏💌💜
I was honestly in a fuck life state vs fuck writing, so to have it choke me as I wrote it out was a surprise. I was pretty down about the Underground so thought, why do it?! The muse let me have it & I now know the path to follow. 🙏💌💜
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23rd Oct 2019 7:48pm
You are blessed with a beautiful, intricate... Though sometimes troubled mind , dear Shannon. You have a gift that few truly possess... And, thank goodness , you share it with your poetry. 🤗❤🤗
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22nd Oct 2019 00:28am
I already like you a lot based on commentary alone. I'm so very grateful to see your detailed view & have that sense you truly felt me. I thank you beyond ________
words...;)
words...;)
Re. noth/ing/ness.....
21st Oct 2019 2:30am
beautiful one don't fear the darkness inside you we are made up of both
if you try to restrain it when you write you won't write
this is a beautiful freeing of your soul... I'm so grateful to see this day...
fucking fantastic...
love you lady...
Brenda 🌹
if you try to restrain it when you write you won't write
this is a beautiful freeing of your soul... I'm so grateful to see this day...
fucking fantastic...
love you lady...
Brenda 🌹
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22nd Oct 2019 00:37am
Thank you, Brenda.... from one who knows the darkest of hell. That's where I was coming from, I thought "why even write? It's all pointless...everything is"...but I now know better.
It feels liberating & I'm no longer scared to write it out. Since I've spoken to my grumpy ass muse, I now know what's expected. A satirical ode is in the works.😅
Bunches of fierce hugs to my fellow Goddess and Phoenix rising. 😉🙏❤
It feels liberating & I'm no longer scared to write it out. Since I've spoken to my grumpy ass muse, I now know what's expected. A satirical ode is in the works.😅
Bunches of fierce hugs to my fellow Goddess and Phoenix rising. 😉🙏❤
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21st Oct 2019 11:47pm
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22nd Oct 2019 00:40am
Thank you kindly with a big Pandy welcome to the Underground. We're always happy when new family members grace us!
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22nd Oct 2019 00:43am
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22nd Oct 2019 12:57pm
blues gazing
upon galaxies
of dull obsidian
Each line is a miracle of birth, a surrendering to your muse on the verge of silence. You can never be silent my friend. Your poetry will sing forever. And people like me will relish you from whatever dark place you write. This is brilliance exponentiated.
XoXoXo
John
upon galaxies
of dull obsidian
Each line is a miracle of birth, a surrendering to your muse on the verge of silence. You can never be silent my friend. Your poetry will sing forever. And people like me will relish you from whatever dark place you write. This is brilliance exponentiated.
XoXoXo
John
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25th Oct 2019 9:21pm
John,
You never fail to pick me up & praise me well. I dearly appreciate your kind & encouraging words! I'm glad you liked that phrase, I love referencing these blues;)
I have read & bookmarked a few of your oldies that I'll be coming back to pay the same respect you deserve for them. Hugs!
You never fail to pick me up & praise me well. I dearly appreciate your kind & encouraging words! I'm glad you liked that phrase, I love referencing these blues;)
I have read & bookmarked a few of your oldies that I'll be coming back to pay the same respect you deserve for them. Hugs!
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26th Oct 2019 1:49am
Thank you muchly. I know I've seen you on my page before so thanks for the revisit! Let me catch up with my peeps & I'll read yours soon! 😀
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26th Oct 2019 11:28pm
nicely penned just the though of nothingness gives images to the mind touching the depth of ones soul, as darkness swirls within its natural element that we all have gone before is to be reborn, from within to be able to rise like a falcon again that has been giving wings ready to soar above the clouds of darkness into the very realm of light...respect
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28th Oct 2019 2:28am
Thank you for stopping by, Stoney, and for leaving your thoughts. You're absolutely correct that from the darkness, can we be reborn in spirit. Although, as much as we know this, it never truly registers at that moment. We rise & wait for the next battle. Thank you once again, and for the honor of your add. Stay blessed! ⭐
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28th Oct 2019 11:02am
Thank you for sharing your thoughts on a subject that touches many of hearts and minds and souls be bless for you are loved more than you know with honor and devotion and respect
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