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How to appreciate being alive
To be alive isn't just to be alive and kicking
feeling your own legs and limbs.
To be alive is to
percieve the sights and sounds
that those who have kicked the bucket can't appreciate
until resurrection and the long wait for heaven's gate
God's most precious gift to us
Is life which He breathed into our souls.
But to be alive is to thaw
the frozen cold heart
with the warmth of feeling
coz we aren't born coldblooded.
Alive is
the sense of hearing
that hearkens not just the artificial violin
but the natural songbird's birdsong.
To see not just the obvious, the apparent
but as well to see with the eyes of wisdom.
To not just gaze at silver screens and the telly all day
But rather to gaze and observe all of nature's
sights and scenery around you,
To feel not just your own skin,
to not spend life touching cellphones
but rather employ the sense of touch
to feel petals and other critters.
To be alive isn't to smell your own breath and sweat
but to inhale all the distinct fragrances of nature.
And to taste not merely of the artificial flavors
of fizzy pale poison refined sugar's sodas
but to cup your hands to taste the raindrop!
Do I in anyway imply by this that those born blind, deaf or dumb are less alive?
Never! For I've seen the blind appreciate
divinely created nature far more than the seeing.
For to the blind every sound is precious,
for every voice they are grateful.
And every touch has meaning...
Be alive with all your God given senses
Don't wait to be deprived of even one,
to appreciate them.
For senses like limbs, freeze and can get impaired
when they're in limbo, not in usage.
God created this world for our toil and to appreciate life as a divine present,
We must thank Him for granting us existence
so we deserve the next life in heaven.
feeling your own legs and limbs.
To be alive is to
percieve the sights and sounds
that those who have kicked the bucket can't appreciate
until resurrection and the long wait for heaven's gate
God's most precious gift to us
Is life which He breathed into our souls.
But to be alive is to thaw
the frozen cold heart
with the warmth of feeling
coz we aren't born coldblooded.
Alive is
the sense of hearing
that hearkens not just the artificial violin
but the natural songbird's birdsong.
To see not just the obvious, the apparent
but as well to see with the eyes of wisdom.
To not just gaze at silver screens and the telly all day
But rather to gaze and observe all of nature's
sights and scenery around you,
To feel not just your own skin,
to not spend life touching cellphones
but rather employ the sense of touch
to feel petals and other critters.
To be alive isn't to smell your own breath and sweat
but to inhale all the distinct fragrances of nature.
And to taste not merely of the artificial flavors
of fizzy pale poison refined sugar's sodas
but to cup your hands to taste the raindrop!
Do I in anyway imply by this that those born blind, deaf or dumb are less alive?
Never! For I've seen the blind appreciate
divinely created nature far more than the seeing.
For to the blind every sound is precious,
for every voice they are grateful.
And every touch has meaning...
Be alive with all your God given senses
Don't wait to be deprived of even one,
to appreciate them.
For senses like limbs, freeze and can get impaired
when they're in limbo, not in usage.
God created this world for our toil and to appreciate life as a divine present,
We must thank Him for granting us existence
so we deserve the next life in heaven.
Written by
Zaynab_kamoonpury
Published 18th Oct 2019
| Edited 6th Jan 2023
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Re. How to appreciate being alive
18th Oct 2019 10:53pm
These are my favourite parts of your poem Zaynab hope you dont mind me showing it like this and I hope you consider this as freindly feedback, I really enjoyed your poem but I was getting a little lost with some of the extended lines, I have only taken out some words, everything below is as you wrote it.
To be alive, feeling
your own legs and limbs.
To be alive to perceive
sight and sound
until resurrection Is life
breathed into our souls.
To be alive with warmth
of feeling not born coldblooded.
Alive is the sense of hearing
not just the artificial violin
but the natural songbird
not just the obvious, the apparent
but as wisdom.
To not just gaze at silver screens
But rather to gaze and observe
nature's scene
not just your own skin touching cellphones
employ the sense of touch to petals.
To be alive isn't breath and sweat
inhale all the fragrances of nature,
not merely the artificial flavors
pale poison refined sugar's
cup your hands to taste the raindrop!
God created this world for our toil
and to appreciate life as a divine present,
We must thank Him for granting us existence
so we deserve the next life in heaven
To be alive, feeling
your own legs and limbs.
To be alive to perceive
sight and sound
until resurrection Is life
breathed into our souls.
To be alive with warmth
of feeling not born coldblooded.
Alive is the sense of hearing
not just the artificial violin
but the natural songbird
not just the obvious, the apparent
but as wisdom.
To not just gaze at silver screens
But rather to gaze and observe
nature's scene
not just your own skin touching cellphones
employ the sense of touch to petals.
To be alive isn't breath and sweat
inhale all the fragrances of nature,
not merely the artificial flavors
pale poison refined sugar's
cup your hands to taste the raindrop!
God created this world for our toil
and to appreciate life as a divine present,
We must thank Him for granting us existence
so we deserve the next life in heaven
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 4:42am
Wow thanks for editing my poem, your version does read more conventional and professional. I like how u put it though it would mean altering my poem too much . Best wishes,
Anonymous
- Edited 29th Apr 2020 5:45pm
28th Nov 2019 7:20am
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Hi Didi3d yes best intentions but also a lesson learnt, just to be clear I didn't change any words my edit only cut. But as I said I see how this could be seen as being too much. I guess I always want too improve so I am very happy to receive crit and edits but it isn't everyone's cup of tea, we can set the level of interference we are seeking when we post a poem and I was responding in good faith to that. Thanks for your concern. I was going to take my post down but now you have referenced it twice, its probably better I leave it to give your words some context.
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Re. How to appreciate being alive
18th Oct 2019 11:04pm
one so well written that covers all you have touch smell and sight most of all the sense of hearing is one gift that was given to mankind
beautiful
beautiful
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 4:39am
Thanks so much for a beautiful comment! You summed my poem so finely poet! Cheers!
Re. How to appreciate being alive
18th Oct 2019 11:34pm
a great point of view of truly seeing the world of life through open eyes for to be alive is to see life all around you in the things that brings beauty to the world and harmony to the soul...nicely written for in the format that you use I can see it more as a story teller and the advice of razzerleaf is a good sound advice by shorten some sentences giving your work a more of a beginning a middle and end yet still holding the readers attention for you want your readers to take the journey with you as they read your work...
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
Warm thanks, for review, ,yes for clarity and lucid meaning I tend to get carried away with my line lengths. I like your advice .
Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 12:33pm
YOUR VERY WELCOME THAT IS WHY WE AS WRITERS ARE HERE TO GROW IN MIND HEART AND SOUL THROUGH SPOKEN WORDS OF OUR WRITINGS, FOR SOME SAY AND MAY THINK THAT NOT EVERYONE CAN BE A WRITER BUT I WOULD HAVE TO DISAGREE, FOR IF ITS DEEP WITHIN YOU TO WRITE A LETTER TO SOMEONE THAT YOU LOVE AND BE ABLE TO SPEAK YOUR THOUGHTS, THEN TO ME POETRY OR SPOKEN WORDS ARE NO MORE DIFFERENT THAN WRITING A LETTER TO SOMEONE FOR YOU STILL POUR OUT YOUR HEART AND SOUL...THATS JUST MY OPINION
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Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 00:01am
I like the way you give 'being alive' a deeper perspective - with all our senses able to expand into greater awareness and appreciation.
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 4:45am
Hi! Nice to hear from yah again! ThAnks so much for how you summed my poem with a better grasp. Cheers!
Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 00:35am
You have expressed your world view excellently here. Good write.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 4:46am
Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 1:48am
hi, Zaynab :)
a pleasure to read your poem... even if i don't subscribe to any 'god', Nature is the closest thing to my religion and so your words about the beauties therein, the taking time to appreciate them, are not lost on me.
i particularly liked the violin .v. birdsong concept... both are beautiful, but the birdsong is pure and natural, no artifice or interception by humanity required to make it so. it just 'is'
a pleasure to read your poem... even if i don't subscribe to any 'god', Nature is the closest thing to my religion and so your words about the beauties therein, the taking time to appreciate them, are not lost on me.
i particularly liked the violin .v. birdsong concept... both are beautiful, but the birdsong is pure and natural, no artifice or interception by humanity required to make it so. it just 'is'
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19th Oct 2019 4:50am
warm thanks for your comment, your thoughts, yes we need more nature and natural in our lives than man made artificiality since nature is more therapeutic too. You interpret my poem's intent well enough.
Take care.
Take care.
Re. How to appreciate being alive
I absolutely adore this piece. It was a message dear to my heart, but also a gentle reminder to be more grateful. As a person who's lost the ability to walk & face many health issues, it's easy to get lost in the darkness... just as you read in the poem of mine you commented on. I've been repressed from experiencing life's luxuries that you've mentioned here due to a long healing process. People don't realize just what precious gifts they've been granted. I thought this very thing when I was exposed to others in worse conditions than I. This too, shall pass for me, but for many, there aren't any victory dances waiting on them. I could keep babbling, but I'm glad you found my page so I could read this beautifully written message. Bless you! 🙏🌷❤
ETA: I forgot to mention the how it's infused which nature; my favorite and most treasured blessing...
ETA: I forgot to mention the how it's infused which nature; my favorite and most treasured blessing...
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Aww you are a real admirable personality then, to be so positive despite life's struggles aches and pains that many have. Yes remember there are others in much worse conditions. Yours shall pass. You will walk to enjoy God's nature to the fullest I hope fervently. You know I saw someone enjoying the scenery even from a wheelchair so in this life we can make do and hope for a perfect life in heaven only.
Take care, warmest thanks and wishes, 🌷
Take care, warmest thanks and wishes, 🌷
Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 7:08am
It's as though You used mindfulness while utilizing Your senses
love the imagery here in this spill
love the imagery here in this spill
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19th Oct 2019 8:43am
Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 10:47am
Loved the imagery in this piece. These days people are more worried about themselves & forget to look at the world. Some lines in this piece could be shorter but roughness isn't a bad thing.
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 5:24pm
Yeah i have my poems that have shorter lines. Thanks for comment brother and your thoughts on it.
Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 2:49pm
I like the paradoxical nature you describe here. In one sense, appreciating life is about taking in everything, and yet at the same time, you don’t necessarily need all of your senses to accomplish that. Thanks for this!
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 5:28pm
Wow you added to it with extracting the paradox actually, that though we should use all our senses to appreciate life yet those deprived of a sense by birth esp can still acknowledge life.
Thanks so much for the clever comment.
Thanks so much for the clever comment.
Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 3:40pm
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19th Oct 2019 5:29pm
Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 7:04pm
Such a wonderful piece!👏 Really this is incredible as well as all the great comments it produced 🙌
The ending is so powerful and resonates with me deeply
"Be alive with all your God given senses
Don't wait to be deprived of even one,
to appreciate them.
For senses like limbs, freeze and can get impaired
when they're not in usage.
God created this world for our toil and to appreciate life as a divine present,
We must thank Him for granting us existence
so we deserve the next life in heaven."
So much truth here
This is how I've been trying to think about life recently not taking anything for granted and being grateful for everything I have and not complaining about what I don't have
Excellent piece! Really enjoyed this 👏
The ending is so powerful and resonates with me deeply
"Be alive with all your God given senses
Don't wait to be deprived of even one,
to appreciate them.
For senses like limbs, freeze and can get impaired
when they're not in usage.
God created this world for our toil and to appreciate life as a divine present,
We must thank Him for granting us existence
so we deserve the next life in heaven."
So much truth here
This is how I've been trying to think about life recently not taking anything for granted and being grateful for everything I have and not complaining about what I don't have
Excellent piece! Really enjoyed this 👏
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
I'm super glad you resonate with and appreciate the intent of my poem, thanks so much for fine comment. Cheers and I would love to have more of your thoughts in future. Have a great day!
Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 8:47pm
It's a lovely vision you paint here Zaynab with your words & we do just take for granted our senses when really we should stop & think for a while about what we do have & think about the nature that surrounds us.; especially during low moments when we can sometimes feel we have nothing!
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 9:16pm
Heyy poet Billy so nice to hear from you! Thanks ever so much for your great thoughts and comment on this.
Now I'm heading to see what poetic delights you have in your section for you are a fine poet.
Now I'm heading to see what poetic delights you have in your section for you are a fine poet.
Re. How to appreciate being alive
19th Oct 2019 9:19pm
It's very good and heartfelt. A much needed message in today's hectic and stressed world.
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
20th Oct 2019 5:06am
Thanks soo much for the great comment! I'm glad if it can reduce stress. God has created nature for that yes! Best wishes,
Re. How to appreciate being alive
20th Oct 2019 10:26pm
This is some profound ink indeed Zaynab...we humans get so caught up in our own little worlds sometimes that we forget about treasures that we are blessed with...just to sit in my backyard on a spring morning and wact and listen to the birds birding...how wonderful are the simple pleasures. Your poem points directly to the heart of each and every human being...and demands a little attention. Bravo!
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
21st Oct 2019 9:14am
Wow thanks soo much for such a wonderful comment, you truly know how to enjoy nature as shown by your lofty poetic heart comment. Regards,
Re. How to appreciate being alive
Anonymous
22nd Oct 2019 9:05pm
That’s some really good stuff right there !!
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23rd Oct 2019 4:33am
Re. How to appreciate being alive
27th Oct 2019 7:27pm
Great poem! I love the way you state we are not born coldblooded,( just paraphrasing), I agree we are all born sweet and good, it's the world and it's people who change us. I look forward to reading more.
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
29th Oct 2019 3:27am
You are so right that people can change us into cold attitudes with their coldness.
Warm thanks for a great comment!
Warm thanks for a great comment!
Anonymous
- Edited 29th Apr 2020 5:45pm
28th Nov 2019 7:17am
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Re: Re. How to appreciate being alive
28th Nov 2019 8:27am
Aww sir poet im charmed that you dance wirh my words and care about my original touches. Thanks ever soo much, im your fan too now . Im impressed that you thibk poetry is sacred. See you again fir exchange if thoughts in your abd my poems. Bestt wishes.
Re. How to appreciate being alive
29th Nov 2019 3:19pm
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29th Nov 2019 4:58pm
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30th Nov 2019 1:01am
Taught mythology. Was good friends with George Lucas. I recommend all of his books.
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Re. How to appreciate being alive
An enthusing call to wake up and smell the proverbial coffee of nature around us. (As some of my own poems testify I enjoy going naked outdoors - where it isn't going to get me arrested - in different weathers for that reason.)
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30th Nov 2019 1:15pm
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Anonymous
10th Dec 2020 9:39pm
Innocents are only seen through the eyes of a child, but your writing resonates with promise.
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