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Solitude
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The cell phone swivels like a lasso
Crowded sidewalks coming on to its camera
Maybe I am looking for company
As a detached observer of myself
It is a disturbing experience
Maybe I have changed...
And the world has become vague
Dreamlike, ... I am outside reality ...
While looking at the videos...
A pleasant emotional response to isolation
My body sensations...
My body emotions belonging to those images...
It is normal to be sleepy in the afternoon
A loss of control over my solitude
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The cell phone swivels like a lasso
Crowded sidewalks coming on to its camera
Maybe I am looking for company
As a detached observer of myself
It is a disturbing experience
Maybe I have changed...
And the world has become vague
Dreamlike, ... I am outside reality ...
While looking at the videos...
A pleasant emotional response to isolation
My body sensations...
My body emotions belonging to those images...
It is normal to be sleepy in the afternoon
A loss of control over my solitude
... ...
Published 25th Sep 2019
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25th Sep 2019 12:13pm
There's a lot of subtle and not so subtle tension here, Marks. It lulls the reader into the dreamlike state with you.
Not certain why, but I related the ending to my own personal experience of feeling so relaxed in my own solitude I felt sleep was an intruder abducting time from me.
Not certain why, but I related the ending to my own personal experience of feeling so relaxed in my own solitude I felt sleep was an intruder abducting time from me.
Thank you for reading it, Ahavati.
I like your interpretation.
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It is only just ... " A *temporary* loss of control over my solitude..."
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I like your interpretation.
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It is only just ... " A *temporary* loss of control over my solitude..."
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1st Oct 2019 8:04pm
Certainly enjoyed this piece. A dreamy quality to it. A smooth flow from beginning to end. Nice work.
3rd Oct 2019 1:09am
