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Sweat pouring off my body
Muscles tense tired sore swole
Swelling bulge it wont be long
You can tell its about to blow
Turns and twists
Heat of the moment intense
Hold you in my arms put it in back
Almost done satisfying sense
Tell by our face we are both wore out
How the hell did we have two tires blowout
Muscles tense tired sore swole
Swelling bulge it wont be long
You can tell its about to blow
Turns and twists
Heat of the moment intense
Hold you in my arms put it in back
Almost done satisfying sense
Tell by our face we are both wore out
How the hell did we have two tires blowout
Published 7th Sep 2019
Author's Note
Actually no idea why i wrote this but i found it funny
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7th Sep 2019 5:20pm
7th Sep 2019 5:29pm
7th Sep 2019 6:58pm
7th Sep 2019 7:00pm
Hell yeah i take honor in that ive only wrote three i guess youd call these poems im just playimg around figured be fun
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- Edited 22nd Feb 2020 6:45am
7th Sep 2019 7:01pm
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7th Sep 2019 7:02pm
7th Sep 2019 7:40pm
lol, great last line, i didn't expect it but you had a great of way of holding the attention in the poem.
7th Sep 2019 7:44pm
Thank you lol i have no idea what im doing but if your happy it usually works out anyway
7th Sep 2019 7:49pm
I can definitely see talent here, your style has distinct lines of someone who's skill is somewhat honed. There is no mediocrity here for sure, reading this one and your first. I did read your bdsm poem, i chose not to comment cause the theme is not something that interests me all that much. But your non sexual poems are really fantastic.
7th Sep 2019 7:51pm
Probably wont see alot of sexual out of me i looked through trying to see what i can do in each then found out there is a limit to posts
7th Sep 2019 7:54pm
7th Sep 2019 8:26pm
Two people riding through a bed of nails on their way to the airport. Endless possibilities here.
That was fun to read.
That was fun to read.
7th Sep 2019 8:30pm
8th Sep 2019 5:55am
Dear J,
Very spritely turn of phrase at the end. I very much enjoyed this. You claim to be new to writing but it would seem you have a natural penchant for it.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Well done! H🌷
Very spritely turn of phrase at the end. I very much enjoyed this. You claim to be new to writing but it would seem you have a natural penchant for it.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Well done! H🌷
