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This Frosted Glass
it’s the never ending battle
to break into that head of yours
if i’m all locked up with regret
then maybe you’re the only cure
the missing key that fits the lock
slightly open window shades
i’ve been shut out and can’t see in
and it’s been like this for days
i slammed my fists against the screen
that separates my world from you
the frosted glass nearly shattered
but no amount of force will really do
i’ve knocked a few times
and i know you’re still in there
i see you pacing back and forth
running your hands in your hair
i can see the shadows of your life
through all this frosted glass screening
of times we might’ve laughed together
but that time has lost its meaning
it seems the glass protects your sadness
i can about see all, yet things remain unseen
i see you, but not the features of your face
so i can’t see what all the pacing means
are you locked up in there?
or is it me that is locked out?
i'm done fighting to breach the glass
because, to you, i'm not that devout
i’m not some shining savior though
i'm someone who rarely gives a fuck
so if this coffin is of your choosing
then i’ll gladly help you nail it shut
to break into that head of yours
if i’m all locked up with regret
then maybe you’re the only cure
the missing key that fits the lock
slightly open window shades
i’ve been shut out and can’t see in
and it’s been like this for days
i slammed my fists against the screen
that separates my world from you
the frosted glass nearly shattered
but no amount of force will really do
i’ve knocked a few times
and i know you’re still in there
i see you pacing back and forth
running your hands in your hair
i can see the shadows of your life
through all this frosted glass screening
of times we might’ve laughed together
but that time has lost its meaning
it seems the glass protects your sadness
i can about see all, yet things remain unseen
i see you, but not the features of your face
so i can’t see what all the pacing means
are you locked up in there?
or is it me that is locked out?
i'm done fighting to breach the glass
because, to you, i'm not that devout
i’m not some shining savior though
i'm someone who rarely gives a fuck
so if this coffin is of your choosing
then i’ll gladly help you nail it shut
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Re. This Frosted Glass
2nd Jul 2019 10:36pm
(un) HOLY crap -- those last final stanzas tells us all of how You've been feeling (feel now) !!
and
You spilled it concise and explicit - Wow!
and
You spilled it concise and explicit - Wow!
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Re: Re. This Frosted Glass
2nd Jul 2019 10:37pm
Ha, yes. I might be getting pissed off, a bit. I don't chase, and refuse to pretend I do anymore. Thank you Tallen, for the read and comment!
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2nd Jul 2019 10:41pm
If You need a break from life
You are always welcome to visit southern AZ and i will sleep on the floor (i still have my floor mat i used in California)
We pretty much have nothing You have in North Scottsdale but our temps are cooler and You can hear the wee beasties and birds better (actually some mornings they are super noisy - lol)
You are always welcome to visit southern AZ and i will sleep on the floor (i still have my floor mat i used in California)
We pretty much have nothing You have in North Scottsdale but our temps are cooler and You can hear the wee beasties and birds better (actually some mornings they are super noisy - lol)
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Re: Re. This Frosted Glass
2nd Jul 2019 10:44pm
Ah, thank you for that. I'll certainly keep that kind offer in mind. If this heat doesn't take me before!
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2nd Jul 2019 10:47pm
Well
if You recall
Yesterday it was stinking HOT
and for me here in Green Valley it rained really had and i was happy because i was gonna take my car to the carwash.
if You recall
Yesterday it was stinking HOT
and for me here in Green Valley it rained really had and i was happy because i was gonna take my car to the carwash.
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2nd Jul 2019 10:48pm
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Re. This Frosted Glass
2nd Jul 2019 10:42pm
My wife stared hard at me after reading this said she knows this feeling well
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Re: Re. This Frosted Glass
2nd Jul 2019 10:43pm
Ooh, um... best of luck with that, Liam. Hope all turns out well. Thanks for the read and comment nonetheless.
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Anonymous
2nd Jul 2019 10:42pm
"I'm done fighting to breach the glass"....apart from the poetry value of the piece, I hope that quote reflects more than just the literary you! I wonder how very powerful a positive Liv Diane will generate (when she's good and ready, of course!) :-)
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Re: Re. This Frosted Glass
2nd Jul 2019 10:52pm
Haha, yeah, I've just got an overwhelming sense of fuck it, you know? Ready to move on from this, maybe tap into that powerful positivity you speak of :)
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Anonymous
3rd Jul 2019 1:39am
When you are ready to move on, you'll know it. Life is short...who knows who you may become? (Whoever that is, I Hope she's happier!)
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Re. This Frosted Glass
2nd Jul 2019 10:51pm
are you locked up in there?
or is it me that is locked out? - some amazing stuff right here, the hardest part is knowing or is it not knowing.
or is it me that is locked out? - some amazing stuff right here, the hardest part is knowing or is it not knowing.
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Re: Re. This Frosted Glass
2nd Jul 2019 10:54pm
Mmm, good question. I wonder if I'm starting to not care if I ever know or not? Sometimes if you can't help someone else, but it doesn't mean you can't save yourself. Self-preservation ;)
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2nd Jul 2019 10:59pm
Re. This Frosted Glass
3rd Jul 2019 00:09am
beautiful Liv this is an amazingly deep piece of writing
you have a beautiful heart
it must be terribly painful to be shut out
I wonder if your friend suffers from anxiety
I used to pace and shut down verbally when I was anxious...
just thinking loud hoping to help you find answers...
great write...
love Brenda ❤
you have a beautiful heart
it must be terribly painful to be shut out
I wonder if your friend suffers from anxiety
I used to pace and shut down verbally when I was anxious...
just thinking loud hoping to help you find answers...
great write...
love Brenda ❤
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Re: Re. This Frosted Glass
3rd Jul 2019 00:11am
Very much so, but I've always tried to be a soft place to land. I think I'm just tired... tired of wondering my place, when I know in my heart where it is. Thank you for the kind words, dearest Brenda. You're always a light among all this darkness.
Re: Re. This Frosted Glass
3rd Jul 2019 00:16am
he has to get to a place where he realizes he needs a little help for his anxiety I know people hate taking meds but sometimes you have to especially when your illness is destroying relationships...only you know if it's time to move on inside yourself and if you don't know yet keep writing things out I believe it's the best way to get to the heart of yourself ❤
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Re. This Frosted Glass
3rd Jul 2019 00:13am
hang in the beautiful Liv it sounds like you really care about this person
no matter the outcome you will remain the wonderful soul you are
able to love, create, and touch people through your poetry 🌹
no matter the outcome you will remain the wonderful soul you are
able to love, create, and touch people through your poetry 🌹
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3rd Jul 2019 00:15am
Re. This Frosted Glass
3rd Jul 2019 00:54am
there is a thin line between empathetic and being a doormat. I have learned this lesson to my own personal cost and been on the receiving end of both of being taken advantage off and intolerable cruelty. I have no advice to give as such each must choose their own path and their point of choosing actions. All you need to convince yourself is that you are doing the right thing even when others are telling you it's wrong.
this is a very deep and important write lots of respect for writing it :-)))))
this is a very deep and important write lots of respect for writing it :-)))))
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3rd Jul 2019 1:03am
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3rd Jul 2019 6:25am
Brilliant, love the flow and the message. Love the last stanza sums the poem up just perfect.
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3rd Jul 2019 8:12am
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3rd Jul 2019 7:31am
Damn girl, you let the emotions fly. May the release of your well written words & the bittersweet beauty of stepping away from the prison this person & the pain they've had you in, bring you love & light. Fierce write, Liv. Big hugs & best wishes, beautiful! ❤🙏
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3rd Jul 2019 8:21am
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3rd Jul 2019 10:35am
Re. This Frosted Glass
Anonymous
3rd Jul 2019 1:37pm
You really went in with this one. You start out almost musing & sad...then it progresses through emotions...much like the pacing...and you finalize it with a bang. Almost like a closing door. Another amazing bit of expression. Sometimes we just gotta turn off the screen to see what's right in front of us. Hugs if you need 'em...I'm a hugger :-)
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3rd Jul 2019 5:35pm
I totally agree, Willow! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and leave a comment❤️
Re. This Frosted Glass
8th Jul 2019 10:06am
"it seems the glass protects your sadness
i can about see all, yet things remain unseen
i see you, but not the features of your face
so i can’t see what all the pacing means
are you locked up in there?
or is it me that is locked out?
i'm done fighting to breach the glass
because, to you, i'm not that devout "
Very enjoyable to read. The pacing of each stanza, and the imagery was vivid.
i can about see all, yet things remain unseen
i see you, but not the features of your face
so i can’t see what all the pacing means
are you locked up in there?
or is it me that is locked out?
i'm done fighting to breach the glass
because, to you, i'm not that devout "
Very enjoyable to read. The pacing of each stanza, and the imagery was vivid.
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Wow, thank you, Manley. I’m so happy you enjoyed the read. Thanks for reading and commenting❤️ As well as the generous RL add!