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You broke me
I can’t believe that’s what you really think of me.
I was myself around you, I felt free.
The whole time you really thought I was a lazy PIEce of shit,
I’m used to getting hurt but I’m so sick of it.
People always play me, use me and hurt me.
No matter what I do I’ll never be free.
All these things become thoughts in my brain, wrapping around me like invisible chains.
The pain within becomes a swarm like bees inside of my soul, I can feel the sting and it’s taking a toll, on me.
Published 14th Jun 2019
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14th Jun 2019 11:24am
God I’ve been there.
“I was myself around you, I felt free.
The whole time you really thought I was a lazy PIEce of shit...”
It hurrrrrts finding shit like that out, man. For fucking real. I feel you. Great ink!
“I was myself around you, I felt free.
The whole time you really thought I was a lazy PIEce of shit...”
It hurrrrrts finding shit like that out, man. For fucking real. I feel you. Great ink!
15th Jun 2019 4:24am
15th Jun 2019 5:05pm
I've been in that type of relationship. Painful. Broken and repaired. Makes it harder to trust in new relationships--wondering what they really think beneath their words.
Nicely done.
Nicely done.
15th Jun 2019 11:53pm
16th Jun 2019 12:21pm
Simple, but well written. I hate it when people smile at you to your face but talk bad about you behind your back. Must hurt even more when it's in a relationship.
16th Jun 2019 12:24pm
Well i cant point anything out here but amazing write i will say its heartbreaking in story though
16th Jun 2019 10:35pm
It was felt and I really like how you choose your references and the power you display in the way you write its really cool, keep it up... though I would say when you feel it , and you when you write let it really flow through your mind and heart to the page , it will really boost the emotion you put out and the felt will really cause a rally. just saying...
17th Jun 2019 10:29am
Wow! Thank you all so much for your feedback! I’ll keep trying to improve my work, and let you feel what I feel!
