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Pillow Talk
just between you and me
I let go
words tumble from my lips
they bounce and fall
just between you and me
the silence stretches
pulling us apart
until it snaps
I showed you mine
now show me yours
if you say it
I will stop talking
I let go
words tumble from my lips
they bounce and fall
just between you and me
the silence stretches
pulling us apart
until it snaps
I showed you mine
now show me yours
if you say it
I will stop talking
Published 4th Jun 2019
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- Edited 21st Oct 2019 4:45am
4th Jun 2019 10:41am
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4th Jun 2019 11:15am
Thank you very much. I was quite pleased with it myself… Originally it was a poem I had written in my mother tongue. While transcribing it, I found that the meaning had changed, so I went with it. :)
Glad you like it!
Delanee.
Glad you like it!
Delanee.
4th Jun 2019 1:14pm
Made me think that getting the right amount of silence between the words (notes) is the key to good 'music', and the invitation to dance together. Sometimes silence is the most powerful way to ask a question (or gain a response). The poem communicates at several levels. Nice.
4th Jun 2019 1:45pm
I am so happy you gather all of this from one single poem, Josh. Very interesting to read this comment of yours. Thank you for the praise!
Delanee.
Delanee.
